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Ice, Ice, Baby

The rivulets of ice hang greedily To barren brown basalt Drooling downward steadily Like ribbon candy halted a crystal ooze assault. Sweet sap cascading readily frozen curtain seldom parted clothe the breast of earth joyously leave in mist oh mistress tart… pierce not the lingering heart.

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Joyce Johnson

Date: 11/28/2010 7:16:00 PM

Very nice Deborah. I'm glad I didn't have to rate these. Love, joyce

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/28/2010 5:19:00 PM

Congratulations. I remember this ice COOL one. come out come out, wherever you are, Deb!!!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 11/28/2010 4:22:00 PM

Congrats Debbie on your HM in Carol's cool contest with this sweet entry on welcoming Winter my friend... and TEACH.... enjoy a special honor with luv this happy Sunday ...pupil...

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 11/28/2010 2:47:00 PM

Congratulations on this honorable win in the contest, Deb

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 11/28/2010 2:11:00 PM

Congratulations on your success in Carol's contest, Deb! Love, Carolyn

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 11/28/2010 1:53:00 PM

Congratulations on your win in my "Welcoming Winter"contest Deborah. Love, Carol 11/28/2010

David Smalling

Date: 11/11/2010 10:42:00 AM

I like your fascination with frozen water and rocks ... I am still inventing a meaning that will work for me. Good write.

Kim Hilliker

Date: 11/6/2010 3:28:00 AM

Well written Quintain, Deborah. Simple yet deep. I like it. Thanks for sharing.

Charles Henderson

Date: 11/5/2010 10:20:00 PM

Sound like someone with a constant headache. Nice metaphoric here. Charles

Cecil Hickman

Date: 11/5/2010 8:49:00 PM

truly a beauty and so much more, your creations in words always inspire and delight me,,and i want to Thank you for all your visits and comments as well your additional context of help and teaching that I respect and cherish,,all the best in your future writing,and thank You again,,,Blessings..Cecil

L'Nass Shango

Date: 11/5/2010 6:01:00 AM

Alliteration cool, personfication sublime, metaphorical images supreme, poem and poet woven in dream. I love it. Thanks for always remembeing me, inspiring me, mentoring me, and being such shrewd example. One love, my friend

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 11/4/2010 1:28:00 PM

Very "sweet" description of the icicles, Deb. Creative poem! Love, Carolyn

Tahera Mannan

Date: 11/4/2010 6:11:00 AM

What an amazing picture you have drawn here. Thanks for your comments and advice. I have tried to edit the poem. I hope you like it now.

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 11/4/2010 3:41:00 AM

Great imagery, Deb. This one brings back memories of Chicago many wintry freezes ago. xoxox

James Marshall Goff

Date: 11/3/2010 2:26:00 PM

early November confection perfection! jimbo

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/3/2010 1:43:00 PM

Very expressive, Deb. I really enjoyed some of the lines in this one, such as "drooling downward steadily like ribbon candy!" See ya, Andrea

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 11/3/2010 11:58:00 AM

U remember Vanilla Ice too TEACH??? great entry for the contest Welcoming Winter.. luv your description of the icicles.. luv.. good luck..pupil..

Eamon Duffin

Date: 11/3/2010 11:02:00 AM

Hi Deborah. Thank you for your kind words. Ice,Ice, Baby. What can I say. Cold love can be better (and longer lasting) than hot. Ice and snow ,something we don't often see,only once in last 5 years. I envy your competence. Thank you, Eamon