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Written: March 31, 2024 For Unseeking Seeker Contest ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Under expansive evening sky, Paths diverged, leading me in various directions, staring at dusk, as sun gradually set, I stood at a nook, and a knot grew in my throat.  Words were fragmented, chaotic, and trivial, I failed to convey what I meant to say, Whispering desires of my secret longing, Yet, I struggle to grasp The obvious cues of farewell. Shimmering tears slide, from eyes full of despair, I sensed the warmth of a love that'd faltered... genuine trek of love, flung, was initiated too soon, I'm trapped within confines of my ego.  The fear of rejection, punctured my confidence, Preventing the pairing of my soul with another, And as I yearned, to express myself, I realized, My cultural consciousness, had misconceived love. Sculptures of my heart lay in shards, Bruised and pretending to be content, but barely surviving, As I became a predator, of my happiness, Deceiving myself with, a veil of silence and sacrifice. Assailed by love and closed me off, I am afraid to let anyone else in, for magnanimity, I stifled my soul's walls in the process, and forfeited felicity fulfillment, frightfully fetched. It dawned on me: ego is a cloak of love and grief, A barrier hinders genuine affection from flourishing, I had to release my grip, as I kneeled in the alcove, I'd let my soul roam free, from unwise love.

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Date: 4/4/2024 3:13:00 PM
Dear Sotto, you are the most of my inspirations for writing. I would like to touch your ankles. I know every word you right is magical. But for me it's not easy to understand all your poems. This one more I can interpretate maybe bad but I think this is envolving my heart with a love I dreamt about. So touching. Really Sotto, you are unique. Blessingsxxxx
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Date: 4/2/2024 6:19:00 AM
We build our own barriers! There may be many excuses.... the fear of rejection, the lack of confidence, or the ego that weighs one down. Whatever be the cause, one later comes to regret and it is too late. Powerfully penned. We are almost similar in our thinking. I too have entered a poem of similar thoughts. Your poem stands out in its brilliant composition and free flow.
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Date: 4/1/2024 8:46:00 AM
Your poem is a powerful exploration of the internal struggles we face in love and relationships, as well as the transformative journey towards self-awareness and emotional growth. It serves as a poignant reminder of the importance of vulnerability, honesty, and self-acceptance in finding true fulfillment and connection.
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Date: 4/1/2024 6:46:00 AM
Powerful, expressive thoughts, my friend. You are a master poet, Lasaad ---Sculptures of my heart lay in shards, Bruised and pretending to be content, but barely surviving, As I became a predator, of my happiness, Deceiving myself with, a veil of silence and sacrifice-----Excellent!
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Date: 4/1/2024 6:38:00 AM
SP, hopefully this happened when you were young and you've completely recovered or perhaps this is just a story. However, you capture the hurt of a relationship not going as hoped. I like the last stanza where you realize that ego hinders genuine affection. Something to think about. Hard to cleanse the brain from what happened even with the realization of what is going on. I have my own experience with this and find it very difficult to release all regret.
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Date: 4/1/2024 12:31:00 AM
Fear of rejection and abandonment two things that do play a significant role in how one perceives things and also how they approach or express. Your poem is an intellectual one that flows very well with brilliant diction to a theme that is impeccable! I llve how this sounds and how your lines flow too in a flawless manner. So much truth within put on paper, thats what i felt as i read this. When ego gets in the way so much can be destroyed and youv written very well on that.Goes well with prompt. Best wishes for the contest
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Date: 3/31/2024 5:35:00 PM
A truly magnificent work of art, dearest Sotto. Your words totally mesmerized me as I put myself in the narrator's shoes. This line was filled with introspective wisdom: "Cultural consciousness misconceived love." I've found that statement to be true in my life. I felt pain in: "Sculptures of my heart lay in shards, Bruised and pretending to be content" What a courageous soul the narrator is. What left me breathless though was: It dawned on me:ego is a cloak of love and grief. Such profundity!
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Date: 3/31/2024 1:43:00 PM
Creative work. Yes, we need to avoid unwise love and pray for the ability to choose a person suited to match our needs. Thanks for sharing this one with us and for dropping by my page. I hope this was a great Easter Sunday. Sara K
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