I Wish I Had

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March.18.2024

I Wish I Had Poetry Contest

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~ Placed First~

“The ego within forced me to resist
But now I wish I had effused a love mist
With aplomb and flair, just kind of left it there
For self-aware souls passing by, who choose to pair”---- Line of inquiry



As we roamed under the star-spangled sky,
Sharing many a trivial thought
I failed to voice my clandestine whim,
Carefully structured within my mind’s alcove

When words were suddenly broken up
With a lump forming in my throat
I failed to convey what I meant,
In a language explicit for you to grasp.

Gazing at each other, as we stood
Without uttering a word aloud
You failed to notice my saddened eyes,
Glistening with tears, about to shed

At the end of a pleasant, united jaunt
As our roads diverged in opposite tracks
We failed to say even a parting word,
As a gesture of courtesy, due for both.

Now in the twilight of the setting sun
When the past has dwindled slowly away
We remain in our cloistered cells,
Failing to forget what has transpired.

How I wish I had expressed myself! 
Was it my ego or the fear of rejection,
Or was it a lack of confidence, not quite sure,
That punctured the love mist and prevented us from pairing?

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Diane Christian

Date: 5/22/2024 12:35:00 PM

A well written poem, My mam used to tell us girls never he scared to say how you feel as people won't know if we don't tell them. It's true I wear my heart on my sleeve but been hurt at every turn, maybe one day we never know. There was one person I never persued and regret not being more open hearted. But they say there is always something better waiting just round the corner.

Tonye George

Date: 3/20/2024 12:55:00 PM

It's quite hard to talk about your feelings to people. I understand that. Sometimes it's a risk we should take. Let it out, let it go. Iove it.

Tom Woody

Date: 3/19/2024 1:29:00 PM

Ahhh a love never to be. Very nice. You're so good Valsa, very articulate. Great use of language, as always

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 3/19/2024 9:19:00 AM

Dear Valsa, I really loved the imagery of wandering under the stars, stifled emotions, and silent farewells, wonderfully showing the pain of unexpressed feelings. Valsa, this is a great reflection on the complexities of human relationships and the barriers we face in sharing our true selves. Such a moving piece that invites us to confront our own hesitations and regrets. - Blessings, Daniel

Christina Bowring

Date: 3/18/2024 2:11:00 PM

This is such a tender, romantic, beautifully written poem dear Valsa of a missed and regretted opportunity. So many will relate to this in one way or another. Love the quote too. The opening line is captivating and sets the scene well. It’s so touching and the last two stanza’s especially convey so much ‘ we remain in our cloistered cells’ ‘ that punctured the love mist’. Good luck in the contest. I loved it. Hugs and blessings xx