I Wish

I have wished on the morning star to help us find the way we've lost, the kindness we gave without cost. The love...it now seems very far-- a ship that's lost is what we are. Beliefs have become wildly tossed... I have wished on the morning star. Entered fantasy--door ajar, have ideas that in past were glossed, a line that now can't be uncrossed. We continue into bizarre... I have wished on the morning star. October 13, 2002 Rondine

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Line Gauthier

Date: 10/27/2022 5:56:00 PM

Delightful, Ann ~

Ann Peck
Date: 10/28/2022 10:39:00 AM

Thank you, Line.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 10/26/2022 8:33:00 PM

All I can see is 'Continue Wishing.' As they say: If you will it, it is no dream.' ~ Ad astra per aspera! (To the stars through hope, in Latin). :) gw

Ann Peck
Date: 10/28/2022 10:39:00 AM

Oh, that's lovely, Gershon. I'll remember to keep wishing.

Gary Radice

Date: 10/14/2022 12:42:00 PM

Beautiful simplicity that conveys a heart warming message of wishes & hope. I think the first verse is superb in its own right. Good luck in the contest Ann. I enjoyed the read. Cheers - Gary

Ann Peck
Date: 10/14/2022 2:47:00 PM

Thank you, Gary. That form was extra hard for me. I kept running out of rhymes :)

Jack Horne

Date: 10/14/2022 12:28:00 PM

a lovely poem with a great message

Ann Peck
Date: 10/14/2022 2:49:00 PM

Thank you, Jack. I think it will take a lot of work to find our path again.

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 10/13/2022 6:24:00 PM

Beautiful poem ~ perhaps you should not tinker with the refrain though, as in last line

Ann Peck
Date: 10/14/2022 8:47:00 AM

Seeker, Thank you so much. I worried about that very thing most of the night. I wrote Jeff to see if poem can be edited in last refrain, but then went ahead and edited it anyhow. If he writes back no, he can always eliminate the poem from judging. I appreciate your insightful comments!