I Will Breathe In Your Rarefied Air

When you said to me,
"Climb up here,  It's pollution free."
Sacred. Safe.
Your rarefied air.
Calculating, you seemed so free.
Safeguard. Sage.
I said I could breathe...
Underrated your density.
Saintly. Sane.
High-minded insight.
When anticipated terror
denuded me,
cool rarefied air
regulated insanity, 
far gone fear.

I will breathe
in your rarefied air.
Let it burn brisk
in brittle, brave lungs.
Gasp and grasp 
life's flame, full flare.
Lunge for high notions,
those far-flung schemes.

I will breathe in
High mind's smoke,
hung  in air- 
that ghostly stroke of genius,
rare token in disguise
Well spoken word flurries
whipping away thin guise.
Floating crown
adrift on high.

I will breathe in 
Your rarefied air,
because I listened to you.
"Clamber up, high!
Unfazed view will circle you,
miles on end surround you.
No going around the bend.
Nowhere else to go.
No zig zag escape.
No spike in pressure.
No deep depression.
No bad atmosphere.
No stabbing shove.
No push or pull on edge.
Just your pledge to breathe.
To move in one direction.
Forever. Mentally "together."
Stay in good shape."

I will breathe out.
Your rarefied thoughts
congeal life's force,
slows down blood flow.
Till body gloved heart
faintly, faintly glows...
Concealed fire's torch,
caved embers die down.
Stripped artfully apart,
Your rarefied airs
blanket my mind in snow.


13/10/2018. Purely fiction. On the pros and cons of mentorship. "Higher" education is not necessarily a good thing. Learning lessons are.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018



Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 1/27/2021 7:48:00 AM
You are so spot on re 'higher education'--Socrates, Plato, Aristotle, Lincoln, Hemingway, Dickens, Churchill-- none went to university-- perhaps that is why they were so original in thought and word. [And today, colleges seem more propaganda mills than places to stimulate the art of thought--and thinking is an art, isn't ?]
Login to Reply
Date: 11/5/2018 3:33:00 AM
An interesting write!
Login to Reply
Marine Avatar
Aqua Marine
Date: 11/13/2018 4:58:00 PM
A real pleasure to have your visit and comment, Kim- happy you found this interesting- thank you for taking g the time to visit and read ! : )))
Date: 10/29/2018 8:52:00 AM
Yes I too am never bored. Thanks for your visit this morning.
Login to Reply
Marine Avatar
Aqua Marine
Date: 10/29/2018 10:20:00 AM
Profoundly affected by your latest poem, on assisted suicide, "How to feel.," thank you for posting thoughts and feelings that must have been very difficult to express...Many hearts were deeply touched. Thank you too, for your visit. (((HUGS)))
Date: 10/22/2018 7:50:00 AM
Much wisdom here. We are educated in many ways. All forms of education are not necessarily the formal route. If we remain curious and seek out knowledge we will become educated.
Login to Reply
Marine Avatar
Aqua Marine
Date: 10/28/2018 6:27:00 PM
There will always be something new to discover, and learning should be cherished...I don't understand how people can be bored with life. It's exquisitely designed to keep us occupied, and happily so! Thank you very much for your visit and comment! :-)
Date: 10/14/2018 2:24:00 PM
I agree.. .well expressed AM...
Login to Reply
Marine Avatar
Aqua Marine
Date: 10/19/2018 5:02:00 PM
Thank you, Silent One, I am Happy for your comment, and visit- does mean a lot to me. (((HUGS)))
Date: 10/13/2018 5:39:00 PM
My great friend, as always you present very fine verses and important message in your creations. This is a gem and a great fav..
Login to Reply
Marine Avatar
Aqua Marine
Date: 10/18/2018 3:07:00 PM
I thank you for your thoughtful generosity, and very welcome visit, Robert- means so much to me! Your viewpoint is deeply respected.
Get a Premium Membership
Get more exposure for your poetry and more features with a Premium Membership.
Book: Reflection on the Important Things

Member Area

My Admin
Profile and Settings
Edit My Poems
Edit My Quotes
Edit My Short Stories
Edit My Articles
My Comments Inboxes
My Comments Outboxes
Soup Mail
Poetry Contests
Contest Results/Status
Followers
Poems of Poets I Follow
Friend Builder

Soup Social

Poetry Forum
New/Upcoming Features
The Wall
Soup Facebook Page
Who is Online
Link to Us

Member Poems

Poems - Top 100 New
Poems - Top 100 All-Time
Poems - Best
Poems - by Topic
Poems - New (All)
Poems - New (PM)
Poems - New by Poet
Poems - Read
Poems - Unread

Member Poets

Poets - Best New
Poets - New
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems Recent
Poets - Top 100 Community
Poets - Top 100 Contest

Famous Poems

Famous Poems - African American
Famous Poems - Best
Famous Poems - Classical
Famous Poems - English
Famous Poems - Haiku
Famous Poems - Love
Famous Poems - Short
Famous Poems - Top 100

Famous Poets

Famous Poets - Living
Famous Poets - Most Popular
Famous Poets - Top 100
Famous Poets - Best
Famous Poets - Women
Famous Poets - African American
Famous Poets - Beat
Famous Poets - Cinquain
Famous Poets - Classical
Famous Poets - English
Famous Poets - Haiku
Famous Poets - Hindi
Famous Poets - Jewish
Famous Poets - Love
Famous Poets - Metaphysical
Famous Poets - Modern
Famous Poets - Punjabi
Famous Poets - Romantic
Famous Poets - Spanish
Famous Poets - Suicidal
Famous Poets - Urdu
Famous Poets - War

Poetry Resources

Anagrams
Bible
Book Store
Character Counter
Cliché Finder
Poetry Clichés
Common Words
Copyright Information
Grammar
Grammar Checker
Homonym
Homophones
How to Write a Poem
Lyrics
Love Poem Generator
New Poetic Forms
Plagiarism Checker
Poetics
Poetry Art
Publishing
Random Word Generator
Spell Checker
Store
What is Good Poetry?
Word Counter