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June 28, 2025

Contest: After Poem Poetry Contest
Sponsor: Jaymee Thomas

after “I Wandered Lonely as a Cloud” by William Wordsworth I wandered weightless as a feather, a muted plume from mourning dove. A tuft afloat in breezy weather connected now to skies above; as long as winds will carry me from over fields and out to sea. My glad esprit more free than birds, detached from mortal needs I fly, where spirits long to share their words among the songs in clouds, I sigh... for Earth was never this composed, this high I travel unopposed. With cumulus, a meadow white, I feel at home among the waves illuminant in purest light — mid savored heights my memory saves inertia of the clover green and shiver of the water’s sheen. Such riches now I do enjoy in solitude away from fray. I'm free from living once so coy; in spirits’ realm I long to stay, for then, myself I will fulfill with gild as gold as daffodil.

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Paula Goldsmith

Date: 7/5/2025 11:06:00 AM

What a wonderful write. I enjoyed reading. Love It... "Good Luck" Have a fun day writing away..........

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/5/2025 11:10:00 AM

Dear Paula, I'm so happy to know that you enjoyed my poem. Your comments are heartwarming and a joy to receive. Thank you, my dear poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Sam Kauffman

Date: 7/3/2025 12:07:00 PM

My Dearest Rhyme Time Friend, your word usage and images are so rich I floated with you through the skies and over the seas! I love the homage to Daffodils in your last line - the feather to be gilded with golden sunshine! You have, as always, chosen a beautiful symbol and made it a metaphor for the seasons of life. Your words always reach a deep place in me. Are you going to set this to music? It would be a beautiful song! Best wishes for the contest. Sending you blessings of joy!

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/4/2025 8:42:00 AM

My Dearest Rhyme Time Friend, your beautiful and uplifting comments thrill me like 4th of July fireworks! I'm so glad my imagery had you floating through cumulus fields like a weightless feather. A wonderful journey for us both... thank you for joining me and for noticing my homage to "Daffodils" with my last line.. your poetic perception never fails to be aware and wondrous. I would love to see this piece set to music but since I don't read or write music, I'm unable to do that.. but I humbly agree it would make a beautiful song. If you would like to add music/vocals let me know :) I know your musical talents could take this poem much further, my sweet and gifted poet sis. Happy 4th to you! Warmest wishes sent on a muted plume of peace.. ~Susan

Bill Baker

Date: 6/30/2025 2:29:00 PM

Great entry and great poetry, Susan. The imagery was outstanding and the message so true and fulfilling. You'll need no luck with this one. :-) A FAV for my list! Your poet friend in Texas, Bill

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/1/2025 9:09:00 AM

Dear Bill, I'm elated to receive your wonderful comments. Your words are truly uplifting as is the high honor of your fav. Thank you for sharing your thoughts with me, they are treasured, my poet friend from Texas :) Warmest wishes to you and Sara.. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/30/2025 11:31:00 AM

Wow. A beautiful job. I did not really understand the rules to this contest. But it looks like you sure did

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/1/2025 9:06:00 AM

Dear Andrea, I hope I got it right.. I had to read the rules several times, and since this concept is new to me, I have my fingers crossed that I understood it all correctly:) I'm so happy to receive your encouraging comments. They mean a lot to me. Thank you, dear Andrea. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

David Crandall

Date: 6/29/2025 11:27:00 AM

Thanks for introducing me to two beautiful poems, Wordsworth's and yours, I truly enjoyed reading them both.

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/29/2025 9:26:00 PM

Dear David, thank you for your beautiful comments. Wordsworth’s poem is so expressive and musical, and of course, inspiring. I’m glad you read and enjoyed the fantastic poem that inspired mine. Your visit is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Tom Woody

Date: 6/29/2025 5:11:00 AM

You know it's funny, when I read some of the so-called Greats poems, I sometimes think to myself, what's so great about it? In truth I've seen some poetry on PS that rivals what's out there in the professional world. Your excellent rhyme poem, carefully metered, is one such example. Soar on, Suze

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/29/2025 8:58:00 AM

Dear Tom, you have always been a vibrant and expressive voice in admiring and promoting the quality of the amateur poetry on PS compared to the 'professional' grade poetry out there. I share in your opinions here. Thank you for your uplifting comments, and though, I tweaked the iambic tetrameter a bit (using feminine endings on the feather/weather and the choice to make a small break with meter with 'memory'), I'm so glad you noticed my "carefully metered" poem. Your thoughts mean a lot to me, my poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Suze

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 6/28/2025 7:57:00 PM

I feel like the feather on its enchanting journey! William Wordsworth will be pleased :)

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/28/2025 8:07:00 PM

Dear Seeker, your thoughts are meaningful and treasured. Thank you for sharing in the enchanted journey with me. I hope William Wordsworth would be pleased and proud. I adore his poetry and wish to pay homage to his artistry. Warmest wishes, my poet friend.. ~Susan

Len Gasun

Date: 6/28/2025 7:05:00 PM

Hello my dearest poet friend Susan! A breathtaking and dazzling piece. Love this a lot from beginning to end. I'm joining you in the flight. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes in the contest! God bless you always. Hugs, hugs

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/28/2025 7:21:00 PM

Hello my wonderful poet friend, Len, it’s a joy to hear from you! Thank you for sharing in this soulful flight with me. I’m so glad you enjoyed my poem, I’m uplifted by your words. Warmest wishes, my sweet poet friend.. ~Susan

Abdullah Alhemaidy

Date: 6/28/2025 12:40:00 PM

Hi Susan :-) Very interesting read! Flying is many poets big dream, Have a nice day AA

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/28/2025 12:43:00 PM

Dear AA, I have dreamed about it since I was a kid.. thank you for your gracious visit and wonderful response to my poem. I'm glad you found it interesting :) Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Paige Hind

Date: 6/28/2025 11:46:00 AM

Hey, you did a great job with this!! It's so whimsical and I feel like I'm floating. Beautiful.

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/28/2025 12:23:00 PM

Dear Paige, thank you for your uplifting comments. I'm so glad you feel like you're floating... my verse has done its job! :) Your gracious visit is so appreciated. Warmest wishes, my poet friend.. ~Susan