I Remember - 1

I remember…
The long rocky finger I lived on that stretched
out from the mainland in the Bay of Fundy and
the soggy little white house covered in ocean brine 
that did its best to shelter us from the great bi-polar Atlantic Ocean
that would on some days roar and thrash and throw itself against 
our rocky foundation, splintering itself into endless liquid shards  
 that would climb high into the sky, then fall on my up-turned face,
drenching me into a state of near hypothermia.

There I would stand, squinting through burning eyes,
unable to pull myself away from that wrath, when suddenly - 
the sun would disappear from the sky, causing the air temperature 
to plummet, leaving me shaking like a leaf as the Great roaring Atlantic
fell silent and laid itself down as flat as a sheet of glass as that massive
grey monster approached.

Off in the distance, I would hear a  buoy-bell  timidly ringing in a feeble attempt to warn me of the  impending danger that was quietly devouring the mainland, our little house, and the Great Atlantic, as the FOG came silently creeping in.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 8/23/2014 2:54:00 PM
Unexpected end. Stream of consciousness in poetry, nice description
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Elaine George
Date: 8/27/2014 1:12:00 AM
Thank you for dropping by, Vassilis. Elaine
Date: 6/21/2014 11:10:00 AM
Lovely description of the Atlantic will carry on to part 2. love phyl
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Date: 5/29/2014 5:41:00 PM
WOW, 65 years ago... Thank you for sharing this with me today... Elaine, you are very sweet...Linda
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Elaine George
Date: 5/29/2014 6:09:00 PM
Its all a guise...lol...only in my poetry. As Susan Boil said on her Britain's Got Talent audition....and that's only one side of me. I have many.. bfn Lainie
Date: 5/29/2014 5:19:00 PM
Hi Elaine, into a state of near hypothermia while cutting into my eyes <---- wow... drench me with imagery...WOW!!! Now that's scary for a toddler. I can't even remember something so frightening. In my book, this is the best one o've read for this contest. Wishing you the best... Linda
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Elaine George
Date: 5/29/2014 5:35:00 PM
Thanks Linda. Tthat was nearly 65 years ago, but it is a real to me today as it was then. bfn Lainie
Date: 5/29/2014 2:15:00 AM
A great true to life story in poetry. It really is scary but I love how you pictured out the place very clearly. Though I love the serenity of the ocean, but big waves can scare you a lot. Wonderful poem.
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Date: 5/28/2014 1:29:00 AM
I love how you contrast might of the Atlantic Ocean with the vulnerability of your small home, and you seem so bold while confronted with the great storm Elaine. I've always wanted to be on the great ocean while storm erupts, from awe, reverence and daring. You put next to the ocean with your wonderful style, thanks! J.A.B.
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Date: 5/27/2014 10:59:00 AM
gripping work graced by your fear-laden words, elaine.. wonderful!.. huggs
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Date: 5/27/2014 7:34:00 AM
Excellent. Well penned. Tfs
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Date: 5/23/2014 8:09:00 PM
this is really descriptive, Elaine. And I think it would be quite scary for a little kid. Maybe you can put it into that scary contest. VERY good writing. I really love this one.
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Date: 5/23/2014 4:32:00 PM
Wow, Lainie, I don't know where the "Bay of Fundy" is, but the picture you paint with your words is awesome. Love the way you describe the Atlantic Ocean as "bi-polar," for truly it is just that. Hurricane season begins in a week and who knows what the Atlantic will toss our way this year. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 5/23/2014 2:54:00 PM
You brought me there with you Laine [typo second line from bottom- warn?] I just loved it as I love all your verse of the sea. Light & Love
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