I Pine

Among a stand of pines I lived my life, blissful in the ignorance of my own fate. Tall and proud, my fellow trees and I stood along a ridge that overlooked a lake - its crystal surface mirroring our beauty. Underneath big sky and seeming to lean against a mountain, we reveled in the gifts of our mother nature. Oftentimes we felt the breath of breezes at our backs and cooling downpours in the summer heat. We saw and heard the scampering of squirrels and rabbits; We watched as deer and other woodland creatures stopped to drink at the clear lake or came to visit us. Birds of many sorts serenaded us both day and night; Crickets, bees and other insects came to see us too. Seasons came and went. Still young, I kept growing on the south fringe of my stand. This winter as new snow glistened on the ground, there came intruders to our happy spot. Wielding axes, two men chopped me down. Now I stand alone, uprooted and separated from my stand. No birds adorn my limbs. Instead I’m wearing garlands of garish gold and big red bulbs are hanging from my arms. No moon or stars of night shine above me, but a silver plastic star is tacked on top my head. I’m suffocated by this too-warm room with blinking lights everywhere around me And myriads of gifts brightly wrapped piled high and pressed against my trunk. No longer one of many, I am one alone And the lovely stand of which I was but one small part has been replaced by an old and rusty stand for Christmas trees, a stand that now contains me, for I no longer stand as one part of a whole. Rootless and wondering what will become of me. . . I pine. Written 9/15/12 for Debbie Guzzi's "Stand" Poetry Contest

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Date: 5/14/2021 7:09:00 AM
Andrea, Feelings for the little tree. We had fake one's when I was a kid. Though I prefer the live pine-scented Noble kind. Early in the new year the bits of tinsle a sad reminder. Something gladly anticipated now gone. -Richard
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Date: 4/26/2020 11:26:00 PM
Have always felt the sadness of cutting down a Christmas tree until our Christmas tree farm tells us to leave 4 or 5 whorls at the base of the tree. By the following year we see a new tree growing. I feel comforted in knowing we have only topped the tree and while the upper branches may "pine" the roots will put out another top. Congratulations!
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Date: 4/26/2020 1:09:00 AM
Nice double meaning of the word 'pine' and the personified feelings of nature being disconnected from its home environment to serve the desires of man. Well done.
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Date: 4/17/2020 12:36:00 AM
Wow i read so much into this absolute gem,,,I the reader, sit here in awe of your poetic prowess. I'm sure i'll find more of you in my favourites as i move down the list, one by one...
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Date: 10/17/2012 6:03:00 PM
So sorry I missed this one.. Excellent form and poetry. Hugs n luv Michael
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Date: 9/24/2012 9:22:00 AM
Love this one and pine trees were my dad's favorite tree.He planted so many in the yard and the area is full of pine. An excellent poem Andrea. love phyl
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Date: 9/22/2012 1:19:00 AM
Beautiful, and sad- Great job
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Date: 9/21/2012 10:20:00 PM
Soup mail...BG
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Date: 9/21/2012 4:31:00 PM
I feel so torn because l love having a real tree at Christmas, but l now settle for a fake wreath and a bottle of pine scented oil. I do see the beauty of enjoying the pines in their own realm and why your poem garnered a number one spot in Deb's contest. Super job on this one Andrea. Congratulations on your wonderful win!
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Date: 9/20/2012 11:02:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved win in Debbie Guzzi's contest Andrea. Love, Carol
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Date: 9/20/2012 5:39:00 AM
Great work that probably would fit two contest..Excellent idea for both contest..Good luck ..Reads like a winner to me..It is kind of sad..I was feeling weepy by the end..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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Date: 9/19/2012 2:37:00 PM
Hmm..I often have looked on Christmas trees in this context Andrea; A tree brought in to represent life, that is doomed to die in front of the revelers??? ( go figure ) anyway good and to the point write..! best wishes in contest:)
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Date: 9/18/2012 8:37:00 AM
lovely write indeed, my friend - a sure winner
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Date: 9/18/2012 4:20:00 AM
I guess Chris likes this, congrats it is truly a wonderful poem.........
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Date: 9/17/2012 6:22:00 PM
So glad to see a rich alternate take on the theme and the double entendre! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 9/17/2012 2:30:00 PM
Brilliant! What a touching tale of a pine tree. I too pined for this forlorn pine. :) Tanya
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Date: 9/17/2012 2:25:00 PM
The other side of the Christmas coin, eh, Andrea. People will think twice, now, before they hang that bunch of tinsel. Luck in Debbie's contest. Love, daver
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Date: 9/17/2012 2:12:00 PM
congrats on a great win Andrea
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Date: 9/17/2012 10:25:00 AM
An interesting write.
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Date: 9/17/2012 10:21:00 AM
this is both charming and enchanting in depth and design Andrea .. I felt as if I was there with u luv neath thes pines .. how glorious a read and a natural first place choice luc .. winning wishes for a winning wow wonder ..
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Date: 9/17/2012 8:19:00 AM
Tremendously beautiful and impressive write my dear friend! It's so touching, too where I was totally carried away while reading it ! I'll include this in my favorite writes of yours. I love it! Yes, life sometimes really goes that way. We don't always stay where we're used to be but other's may certainly realize our WORTH. Good luck on your Big Win my dear friend! hugs, Leonora
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Date: 9/17/2012 6:46:00 AM
Wonderful imagination of a pine and the style of personification. Thanks for reading my write and for comment. You are already my fav. Loved always, bl
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Date: 9/17/2012 3:15:00 AM
Andrea, Wonderful entry! Great penning! Cynthia
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Date: 9/16/2012 7:09:00 PM
This is lovely, Andrea, but such a melancholy write. A beautiful personification; looks like a winner here! Best wishes, Mikki
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Date: 9/16/2012 2:44:00 PM
I'm all for tinsle and twinkle and such. But chopping down tree's, I don't think much. Just give me a fake one to put up each year. It seems to work fine to bring christmas cheer. Your poem speaks so well of the sadness befalled. Of this trees young fate after christmas gets hauled.
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