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For Joseph May's eight word contest..

A rondeau (plural rondeaux) is a form of French poetry with 15 lines written on two rhymes. Variant forms may have 10 or 13 lines. It makes use of refrains, repeated according to a certain stylized pattern. It was customarily regarded as a challenge to arrange for these refrains to contribute to the meaning of the poem in as succinct and poignant a manner as possible. The rondeau consists of thirteen lines of eight syllables, plus two refrains (which are half lines, each of four syllables), employing, altogether, only three rhymes. It has three stanzas and its rhyme scheme is as follows: (1) A A B B A (2) A A B with refrain: C (3) A A B B A with concluding refrain C. The refrain must be identical with the beginning of the first line.

 

I need your love


I need your love when life seems lame,
behind each sigh I call your name.
In silent slumber when in pain,
you shelter me in misty rain.
Emphasize that I'm not to blame.

When I'm weary and full of shame.
Cajole my heart, so it can tame.
Stop my mind from feeling insane.
I need your love.

I will sing a song to exclaim
and strum my guitar to proclaim
how your support keeps my thoughts sane.
Like lilacs your voice soothes the strain.
I'm etching your words to reclaim
I need your love
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Kendrick Avatar
September 2, 2024 at 4:00 AM
Congratulations on your winning work in Joseph's contest. Way to go. Thanks for sharing your creative talent with us. Sara K
mysore Avatar
August 28, 2024 at 4:56 AM
congratulations dear poet. cheers.
Jones Avatar
August 27, 2024 at 8:15 AM
This is heartfelt, so touching! Well done on your win congratulations!
May Avatar
August 27, 2024 at 7:40 AM
Very nicely done Silent, Congrats on your win
Buehler Avatar
August 15, 2024 at 3:24 PM
Fervent and romantic, you have written a beautiful, magic poem, Silent One. Love the video, too. Blessings.
Alhemaidy Avatar
August 12, 2024 at 4:46 PM
So beautiful!
George Avatar
August 9, 2024 at 4:28 AM
This is so lovely. Hearing a call for love or a yearning for warmth is so refreshing. You have written this with the right words and it is heartfelt. Love is meant to be proclaimed, to be sung all decades until the lover goes deaf. Not hearing another love song except from their lover's lips. "Like lilacs your voice soothes the strain. I'm etching your words to reclaim I need your love." This is not a time to suppress emotions or hide feelings. Let us sing it like birds. Great one Dear, Silent.
George Avatar
August 8, 2024 at 5:33 AM
What a lovely poem.... so ingeniously created. How beautifully you have put all the key words in places so fit. This poem, I believe has come from your heart. That is why it causes tides of emotions in those who read it. I am sure this will be a top winner. All the best, dear Silent One.
Hind Avatar
August 7, 2024 at 11:24 AM
I loved your rondeau...beautiful writing, Silent!
Jones Avatar
August 7, 2024 at 3:32 AM
Touching heart felt words! The beauty of it especially the last stanza will surely be a winner in the contest! Best wishes Silent One!
Onclaud Avatar
August 5, 2024 at 3:31 PM
this humbling, stunning poe reflects the vulnerable parts of any being that has set aside his big ego for love 's sake...tenderly moving, S...nice!
Buhagiar Avatar
August 5, 2024 at 8:23 AM
One always admires your talent. A great rondeau with great rhymes and perfect form. You use the chosen words perfectly.
Rodgers Avatar
August 5, 2024 at 6:49 AM
Dear SO, I loved your heartfelt plea for love and support. Being married for 42 years, I have always recognized that we spouses deeply rely on the love of another to navigate life's challenges, finding solace, strength, and peace in their presence. I can relate at all levels, and your words filled my morning. - Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel
Rolland Avatar
August 4, 2024 at 11:26 PM
touching and beautiful, enjoyed your gracious rondeau, yann
Beaufort Avatar
August 4, 2024 at 2:12 PM
SO, great song and a very enjoyable music video. It is amazing how we can take a lot of comfort with the right partner. It really helps to have a true friend and companion. Hopefully, this works out well for the party in need! I always worry…lol!!! You’re making me smile! The video title casts a doubt on the outcome, but I am being slightly pessimistic today. I worry about needing love, but it’s good to admit it for sure.
Rose  Avatar
August 4, 2024 at 1:19 PM
this is a poem that deserves music and voice, Silent One, beautifully rounded gl in the contest , :)
Dietrich Avatar
August 4, 2024 at 12:38 PM
Great job with rondeau. I was gonna use it but ended up going the easier route with quatern form, not posted yet.
DiMino Avatar
August 4, 2024 at 12:33 PM
Marvelous song, I think -- very well done. Needs the right music. Words are perfect, relatable.
Kauffman Avatar
August 4, 2024 at 9:22 AM
Wonderful use of the required words, SO. The poem flows like a song. The rondeau is perfect to express the lyrics of your song! Love the blending of the poetic form and the theme of your poem. Best wishes for the contest. Blessings!
Empress Avatar
August 4, 2024 at 7:36 AM
What a soothing and heartfelt poem that flows with such longing and deep feelings flowing in such a seamless manner! I absolutely love this! Especially “ I will sing a song to exclaim and strum my guitar to proclaim how your support keeps my thoughts sane.” i can picture you strumming your guitar, and like lilacs their voice soothing the inner turmoil. Just beautiful! This sounds like the kind of song ed sheeran would write and sing! Just love it! And your use of prompts here is brilliant! BOL
Williams Avatar
August 4, 2024 at 5:45 AM
You are truly a Master of Form dear S1. This would be a great poem for your friend to create another awesome song. Love it...Hugs
Gentile Avatar
August 4, 2024 at 4:53 AM
Silent One, your Rondeau expresses so beautifully, the yearnings of low and the strong emotions at play! Excellent use of the form! Happy Sunday!!
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