Newton Ranaweera Poet Rhyme

I Met That Star In a Hamlet

I met that star, with my name on; I met
That twinkling star, a beacon, lovely one; 
I met her in a hamlet—less spoiled—yet 
We met when homeward sun his cart did run.

She often tip-toed with her mother star,
To the field to cut grains or feed her cow,
While blinking slyly, like an angled spar
At her love, as she’s doing here, just now.

She was the peahen, and I...the peacock.
Drowned in our astral love, we did dance;
Just forgetting how other stars did flock,
We danced, diving in our hypnotic trance.

I gaze in my dreams at blue star-lit sky
And then see two lovely stars gleaming high.

Revised

* A 3rd Place*  in the following contest (judged on Dec. 31, 2020)

Dec. 29, 2020
Podium placing promise (2) Poetry Contest
Contest sponsor: Brian Strand

* A 2nd Place* in the following contest (judged on Nov. 12, 2020) 
 
Nov. 10, 2020
There is a star with my name on it Poetry Contest
Contest Sponsor: Silent One

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Paghunda Zahid February 16, 2021 at 9:49 AM Beautiful! Congratulations on your wins Newton Ranaweera February 16, 2021 at 9:56 AM Thank you so much for this great comment, Zahid!!

Sara Kendrick January 6, 2021 at 3:18 PM Congrats on your winning romantic work. Way to go. Sara Newton Ranaweera January 8, 2021 at 4:30 PM Thank you so much, Sara, for this impressively sweet comment!!

Caren Krutsinger November 28, 2020 at 2:46 AM This is exquisitely done, Mr. Peacock. Newton Ranaweera November 28, 2020 at 3:04 PM Thank you so much, Caren, for this lovelier comment!!

Beryl Edmonds November 13, 2020 at 10:10 PM That’s so lovely Newton, no one should ever mar love between two stars... Congratulations on a well deserved win for this delightful storytelling poem. Belle Newton Ranaweera November 14, 2020 at 4:36 AM Thank you so much, Belle, for this impressively beautiful comment and congratulations!!

Andrea Dietrich November 13, 2020 at 5:33 PM Back with congrats and thanks for the information in your reply to my comment below, Newton. Newton Ranaweera November 13, 2020 at 7:06 PM Thank you so much, Andrea, for your revisit, comments and congrats!!

Mystic Rose Rose November 13, 2020 at 7:52 AM I come back carrying a heart full of congrats and a smile in my heart. Be well, and know you've been thought of today, dear poet friend. Newton Ranaweera November 13, 2020 at 12:26 PM Thank you so much, Pixie, for this impressively lovely comment and congratulations!!

Sigrid Ermine November 12, 2020 at 4:46 PM Newton, this is a quaint adorable poem! Such lovely sentiment and dedication.! A well deserved win with SO. Congratulations, dear! Newton Ranaweera November 12, 2020 at 5:54 PM Thank you so much, Sigrid, for this impressively great comment and congratulations!!

Susan Ashley November 12, 2020 at 4:37 PM Newton, I am enraptured with the exquisite rhyming love story that your golden pen and your brilliant tender being composed. An astral love affair for the ages.. A fav! Your use of language is lyrical and lovey. Congratulations for your excellent win in Silent One's contest.. ~Susan Newton Ranaweera November 12, 2020 at 5:55 PM Thank you so much, Susan, for your wonderfully beautiful comment, great complement and the congratulations!!

Sam Kauffman November 12, 2020 at 10:58 AM Congratulations Newton on your tender and beautiful poem. Great storytelling in lines that flow. Love your take on the theme - very creative. Newton Ranaweera November 12, 2020 at 11:28 AM Thank you so much, Sam, for this impressively great comment and the congratulations!!

Anitha Jayasankar November 12, 2020 at 9:30 AM A great write with a different approach.. Just enjoyed reading this... Congrats on your win Newton ~ Ani Newton Ranaweera November 12, 2020 at 11:27 AM Thank you so much, Anitha, for this sweet comment and the congratulations!!

Silent One November 12, 2020 at 8:42 AM Nice take on the contest.. Congratulations on your placement.. Newton Ranaweera November 12, 2020 at 11:26 AM Thank you so much, Silent One, for the comment and the placement!!

Anne-Lise Andresen November 12, 2020 at 7:43 AM - A wonderful poem, Newton ... sparkling :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Newton Ranaweera November 12, 2020 at 11:29 AM Thank you so much, Anne-Lise, for your lovely comment and the best wishes!!

Regina Mcintosh November 12, 2020 at 4:03 AM Lovely write. Best wishes for the contest and God bless you always, Love, Gina Newton Ranaweera November 12, 2020 at 4:17 AM Thank you so much, Gina, for this so sweet comment and your kind wish!!

Constance La France November 11, 2020 at 10:23 AM Newton, your poem is lovely, best of luck in the contest _Constance Newton Ranaweera November 11, 2020 at 11:03 AM Thank you so much, Contance, for this impressively great comment!!

Mystic Rose Rose November 11, 2020 at 5:42 AM Ah, Silent One will appreciate this for sure. I loved it to no end dear poet, continue to inspire us with your golden pen, and be well. Newton Ranaweera November 11, 2020 at 9:50 AM Thank you so much, Pixie, for this impressively beautiful comment!!

Andrea Dietrich November 10, 2020 at 2:23 PM this is really cool. I am assuming the woman has her husband's "name". If I got that right, I think that was a really awesome way to take the theme. I am curious on just one thing. HOw did the valley mar their love by telling each star? Newton Ranaweera November 10, 2020 at 2:43 PM Thank you so much, Andrea, for this truly, lovely comment with some prompts to tell that astral tale in detail. Sure, it’s believed that lovers’ names are carved on each other’s forehead. In another note, tale-telling in remote hamlets mars one’s love. There are some restrictions based on one’s caste, class, creed in such hamlets in the context that this speaker has been familiar with.