Jan Allison Poet Free verse

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I Felt So Blue When Grandpa Died

Grandpa joined the Royal Navy as a cadet,
he adored life on the cerulean sea.
Often we’d talk until midnight,
his sapphire eyes twinkled as he told me tales about ‘The Celeste’
I’d see photos of places he’d visited -
Malta and Honolulu were his favourites.

I was bereft when Grandpa died
Sprays of lavender, heliotrope, and iris adorned his coffin

After the funeral Dad gave me Grandma’s aquamarine and sapphire pendant
which I wear daily.

I really miss Grandpa.

FICTION WRITE

80 words and 13 shades of blue are in this poem

Brevity in Blue Contest
Sponsored by Dale Gregory Cozart

submitted to any poem written in July 2018 Poetry Contest
Sponsored by Dear Heart a k a Broken Wings

7/14/18

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Line Gauthier April 28, 2019 at 6:16 PM Back with more well deserved congrats, Jan.

Susan Gentry August 11, 2018 at 6:39 PM Back again to congratulate you again! I really like this story.958 Jan Allison August 12, 2018 at 4:04 AM Thanks Susan:-) hugs Jan xx

Constance La France August 10, 2018 at 2:01 PM Jan congratulations on your win in my contest with this emotional write! Jan Allison August 11, 2018 at 7:12 AM Thanks so much Constance!!:-) hugs Jan xx

Susan Ashley August 9, 2018 at 9:55 PM Jan, you used the different shades of blue beautifully to express a palette of emotions in your moving and heartwarming tribute. Congratulations on your excellent win! Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan Jan Allison August 10, 2018 at 3:24 AM I so love Dale's contests and the way he inspires us to use colour:-) hugs jan xx

John Gondolf August 9, 2018 at 9:28 PM Jan, congrats on your win for this wonderful verse. John Jan Allison August 10, 2018 at 3:24 AM Thanks John:-) hugs Jan xx

Gershon Wolf August 9, 2018 at 8:59 PM This tribute to your beloved grandpa touches the heart. Congrats, Jan, on your win in the contest. Best wishes, Gershon Jan Allison August 10, 2018 at 3:23 AM I wish it had been true Gershon, pure fiction I'm afraid:-( hugs jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong July 21, 2018 at 5:06 PM Congratulations on making this short list Jan! I enjoyed writing a poem for this contest even though mine didn't make the list. Yours deserved to be honored. I am happy for you. xxoo : ) Jan Allison July 21, 2018 at 5:11 PM Thanks Connie I was delighted to be on the short winner's list:-) hugs Jan xx

Line Gauthier July 19, 2018 at 11:10 PM Lovely, Jan. Love your poem. Congrats on your well deserved win. Jan Allison July 20, 2018 at 2:51 PM Thanks Line:-) hugs Jan xx

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart July 18, 2018 at 6:42 AM Sweet and tender, congratulations on your win Jan! xomo :) Jan Allison July 18, 2018 at 8:00 AM Thanks Mo:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper July 17, 2018 at 9:38 PM Back with a big congratulations on your great win. Hugs Eve Jan Allison July 18, 2018 at 7:59 AM Thanks Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Susan Gentry July 16, 2018 at 4:10 PM This is so good. Congratulations on your win. It is amazingly written with the theme, well thought out. Had my attention from beginning to end. Jan Allison July 16, 2018 at 5:49 PM Thanks for such a supportive comment:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich July 16, 2018 at 3:40 PM Big congrats, my friend! Jan Allison July 16, 2018 at 5:49 PM thanks Andrea:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues July 16, 2018 at 3:17 PM Lovely images from the spray on his coffin to “we’d often talk to midnight” (shows a close bond). Congrats on your win! Jan Allison July 16, 2018 at 5:49 PM Thanks Kim:-) hugs jan xx

Tom Cunningham July 16, 2018 at 12:50 PM Back with congratulations Jan. Tom Jan Allison July 16, 2018 at 1:20 PM Thanks Tom am doing ok today lol:-) hugs jan xx

Reason A. Poteet July 16, 2018 at 12:19 PM Congrats well-deserved for this nostalgic piece. enjoyed it, Jan. Jan Allison July 16, 2018 at 12:44 PM Thanks Reason:-) hugs Jan xx

Carolyn Devonshire July 16, 2018 at 11:30 AM A very touching poem, Jan. Congratulations on your win! Hugs, Carolyn Jan Allison July 16, 2018 at 12:43 PM Thanks Carolyn I am so happy to be on the short winner's list:-) hugs Jan xx

Dale Gregory Cozart July 16, 2018 at 10:53 AM Jan, congratulations on your 6th Place win! Thank you so much for taking the time to enter. Jan Allison July 16, 2018 at 11:17 AM Thanks for the inspiration Dale, I'm delighted to be on your short list of winners:-) hugs jan xx

Eve Roper July 15, 2018 at 12:32 PM Very nice and well written poem... good luck in the contest . hugs Jan Allison July 15, 2018 at 6:54 PM Thanks Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso July 15, 2018 at 12:53 AM So sweet Jan, beautiful write, I wish I had a memento to remember the same as you! Jan Allison July 15, 2018 at 4:11 AM I have no momento's Arthur, pure fictional write. We rarely had contact with my maternal grandfather he was not a nice man, We did see our step step Grandma from time to time but she wasn't a close relative at all. My paternal grandfather died when dad was very small and his wife died in a work camp in Siberia. I feel I missed out so much in my childhood by not having grandparents:-( hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane July 14, 2018 at 6:34 PM Color offers a poet the emphasis needed to describe emotion and you've done a terrific job in doing just that. I'm sorry you never had time with your own. Hugs, Jan. Jan Allison July 14, 2018 at 6:37 PM My maternal grandpa was not a nice man and his actions affected my mother all her life and we rarely had contact with him, he married 3 times. My paternal grandparents both died many years before I was born, I feel I missed out so much as a child:-( hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham July 14, 2018 at 5:58 PM You've certainly written brevity in blue with this Jan, I was surprised it was fiction, it seemed so real. Good luck. Tom Jan Allison July 14, 2018 at 6:02 PM Thanks Tom, no I never had any real grandparents only a step step grandma:-( hugs jan xx

Ilene Bauer July 14, 2018 at 4:35 PM you've done an amazing job for this contest, jan! i enjoyed the poem no matter where you place. best of luck! Jan Allison July 14, 2018 at 4:57 PM Thanks Ilene, I learned a few new shades of blue like Malta, Honolulu and cadet:-) hugs jan xx

Lyric Man July 14, 2018 at 3:15 PM Jan, your beautiful mind has never got in the way of your clever humor or your sweet heart. This write is smart, clever, and heartfelt. I miss my grandpa too!! Lyric Man July 14, 2018 at 7:11 PM I understand.. I'm with you... Jan Allison July 14, 2018 at 4:26 PM I wish I HAD had grandparents LM, I feel I missed out so much:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen July 14, 2018 at 2:12 PM - Love the color tunes in this wonderful writing, Jan - A sad theme ... but so beautifully written, best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Jan Allison July 14, 2018 at 4:26 PM Thanks Anne-lise:-) hugs Jan xx

Emile Pinet July 14, 2018 at 1:36 PM Very well said with grace, dignity and love. Very imaginative use of words and skillfully constructed. Your words took stage and treated the reader to a glimpse of your heart and poetic talent in a rhapsody of blue. Emile. Jan Allison July 14, 2018 at 4:26 PM Thanks for such a lovely comment Emile- hugs Jan xx