I Felt An Ache Inside

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Rondeau Redouble Modified
Created by Constance La France...
Lines are 10 syllables except last line which is five words
Verse 1 A1, B1, A2, B2 * These are the repeating lines
Verse 2 b, a, b, A1,
Verse 3 a ,b, a, B1,
Verse 4 b, a ,b, A2
Verse 5 a, b, a, B2,
Verse 6 b, a, b, a, x* 5 words from line 1
Title of Rondeau is your last line of the poem.

When just a boy, I felt an ache inside for not liking girls as other boys did. And I still remember the nights I cried for feeling feelings that the church forbid. Consumed by this relentless ache, I hid my feelings, for they left me petrified. And I wasn't brave like a normal kid when just a boy; I felt an ache inside. Fate had stripped my budding ego of pride, my inner-self was kept under a lid. And I felt ostracized and pushed aside, for not liking girls as other boys did. I was scared of disobeying God's bid, and I'd oft run into the woods to hide. But facing a slippery slope, I slid, and I still remember the nights I cried. I'd contemplate committing suicide when I was alone, somewhere off the grid. And in my soul, this ache was amplified, for feeling feelings that the church forbid. My heroes were pirates like Captain Kidd, why; was a secret never specified. It felt like the whole world wanted to rid themselves of me, no one cared if I died, I felt an ache inside. (Rondeau Redouble Modified) 4/25/2021 Writing Prompt - Ache - Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Constance La France

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Constance La France

Date: 4/28/2021 8:38:00 AM

Emile, congratulations on your win in my Writing Prompt -Ache- Challenge with your wonderful Rondeau Redouble poem, the things that happen to us as children remain forever, well done, love _Constance

Emile Pinet
Date: 4/28/2021 9:18:00 AM

Thanks Constance, I appreciate your comments and the placement my friend, Emile.

Funom Makama

Date: 4/27/2021 7:49:00 PM

Beautifully written with so much grace. Your lines are thick with craft and fascination. Great work.

Emile Pinet
Date: 4/28/2021 6:59:00 AM

Thanks Funom, I appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.

L Milton Hankins

Date: 4/25/2021 8:17:00 AM

Wow, Emile, what an awesome poem! You have laid bare the feelings of so many of us who have struggled with who we really are deep inside our entire lives. It starts with that deep ache when we are just little kids. I can't thank you enough! I'm marking this a FAV!

L Milton Hankins
Date: 4/25/2021 4:32:00 PM

Thanks so much, Emile.

Emile Pinet
Date: 4/25/2021 8:24:00 AM

Thank you so much Milt, we are no longer kids and we don't have to feel ashamed or scared, you comments are greatly appreciated my friend, Emile.