Silent One Poet Rhyme

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I Died a Little Inside

In the silence of sadness,
what will the winds bring tomorrow?
In the sadness of silence,
my soul sighs soft breaths of sorrow.

Where did those rainbows go,
reminiscing happier times?
Thunder brings further misery -
am I victim of my own crimes?

I must have betrayed the sun,
for it offers no sanctuary.
Moon refuses to shine in the darkness,
since when were you my adversary?

When there was love,
it never rained so violently.
Winds would come and go,
fading away so silently.

Mind drowns in a somber cesspit,
struggling to cope with your demons of pride.
I don't know what I've become,
since you left, I've died a little inside.

Simple Musing
Silent One
7 February 2019

Example for I died a little inside contest.

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Elaine Perrin October 6, 2019 at 12:57 PM You have such an amazing way with words! This is a favourite :-) x Silent One October 6, 2019 at 1:00 PM Thank you Elaine..

Edlynn Nau April 13, 2019 at 1:31 PM Wow! You captured dark feelings and dark times. Loved how you placed difficult feelings of abandonment, loneliness, and loss, next to the darker parts of nature. The storm is not over just yet. “I am a victim of my crimes” is something we can all relate to as we see our faults and blame ourselves with no way of fixing it. Good rhyme scheme... lots of time spent on this one. Excellent.

Pashang Salehi March 8, 2019 at 10:18 PM Beautiful piece...

Sara Kendrick February 21, 2019 at 9:53 AM Enjoyed reading your work. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara

FJ Thomas February 13, 2019 at 11:11 AM Your words caress the lowly spirit with understanding. Maybe love just made those violent rains less noticable then ;) I am glad to have read from you S1.

Arturo Michael February 12, 2019 at 11:22 AM Who feels it knows it...once a road is walked you change inside...

Elaine George February 11, 2019 at 11:53 PM Your poetry always stirs my emotions. A great poet you are my friend! Elaine

Alexis Y. February 8, 2019 at 10:44 PM Wow! Silent, This is an excellent example for your contest -Alexis

Andrea Dietrich February 8, 2019 at 6:42 PM I love how you did your theme for an example of "I died a little inside" Very well done, S1.

Jennifer Proxenos February 8, 2019 at 1:06 PM A very powerful poem S.O. It radiates sadness but in such a touching beautiful way. Good luck in the contest! Poetry hugs, Jennifer.

Anisha Dutta February 8, 2019 at 10:57 AM Whelmed in first stanza. and overwhelmed reaching third. Bad luck. Again I missed your last contest. Blessing.

Vladislav Raven February 8, 2019 at 8:29 AM Hi Silent, the emotions are flowing in this excellent write. The sadness permeates each wonderful line. You know how to take emotions to their outer limits, to make them sing in poetic grace. You let your emotions dance through this wonderful write. Every day I die a little inside. have a wonderful Friday. Your friend always....Mike. A fave.

Eve Roper February 8, 2019 at 3:21 AM beautiful, SO, hugs eve

Berteena Harmony Of The Soul February 8, 2019 at 12:59 AM Choking on memories while swallowing my own heart with pride. I died a little inside. You turned back time for us with your rhyme. x

M. L. Kiser February 7, 2019 at 2:41 PM Moving, emotionally lovely and sad.

Anne-Lise Andresen February 7, 2019 at 1:46 PM - Heartbreaking beautiful, S.O. - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Nette Onclaud February 7, 2019 at 12:21 PM S.O...this poem so sublime in content speaks of your sensitive persuasions... you have a new contest?... i hope i can write like this!...huggs

Brandy Nicole February 7, 2019 at 12:12 PM Feeling lost, empty inside will create these moments- these emotions. You have expressed this perfectly here. ~ Brandy

Charlie Smith February 7, 2019 at 11:38 AM Such sorrow, well done Silent One...

Caren Krutsinger February 7, 2019 at 10:39 AM I think you have won your own contest, Silent One. I truly do.

Sunlite Wanter February 7, 2019 at 10:12 AM Your usual lovely writing. Par of us dies inside when someone we care about leaves us, but sometimes it causes us to forgive and toughen up.

Jay Vee February 7, 2019 at 9:35 AM That's really beautiful

Judith S February 7, 2019 at 9:15 AM Another fav for my vast collection! Such a flowing read ... and the first stanza is another genius example of your gift for alliteration. Just beautifully written ... brilliant poet!!!

Bobby May February 7, 2019 at 8:05 AM Can I borrow this one for the contest? that was very heart felt and meaningful my friend!

Lawrence Sharp February 7, 2019 at 7:44 AM A great write, S1, every word just so.

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