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I couldn't talk about it so, I wrote a poem

When metaphors play 'hide and seek,' my shield is a veil nurturing premature petals. Yet there are some words that become poems, to help those who care to read to interpret the alchemist mystery, personifying personal alliterative angst. The heart ponders... What will abandon me first, my trusted muse? Who reveals my truth or my wallflower soul, which prevents butterfly breaths - breathing their last sigh? What am I, but a pomegranate pebble, oppressed by stones - in a man's world, feeling like a boy. Once, I planted two seeds with ultimate care, but they no longer bloom for my atonement. Yet, I still care for them from a distance, soaking their roots with drops of blood. Once, I found love, so I formed into a bridge, protecting her from raging torrents, but I could not live up to expectations, as turbulent waves crashed against my chest. Now I'm crumbling. Sometimes, I'm left alone upon an unknown path, with only cloudy horizons above - but I keep wandering. Hoping to be found. Slowly, I lose a part of me, but I'm inexperienced in trying to be who you want me to be. I'm tired from being devalued. Maybe, I'm worthless, simply useless, some what careless, so throw your spears - I no longer feel. I won't tell. I'll remain silent, but my poetry will forever echo. Simple Musing An example for my current contest.

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Date: 7/6/2024 1:42:00 AM
Dear Silent, this is so relatable... "I won't tell. I'll remain silent, but my poetry will forever echo." A constant struggle it is to free our True Selves by being Truthful. It's comforting to know we're not alone in this. (( Hugs))
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Date: 7/3/2024 9:02:00 AM
SO, a lot of things do happen that can make us feel not so good. You detail and summarize that really well here. It's quite a contrast to getting up after a knock down, and very impressive that you can write like this....with such truth and emotion. The current contest is funny....is it a PS contest or an internal struggle?
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Date: 7/3/2024 2:26:00 PM
An internal struggle my friend...
Date: 7/2/2024 3:45:00 PM
Careless spears don't define your value SO: Your beautiful heartfelt poetry does- and you inspire so many of us with your kindness, Expectations damage so many of us....the impossibility is so daunting. SuZ
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Date: 7/1/2024 6:08:00 AM
Dear Silent One, This is a extremely emotive and fatalistic poem. "once I found love so I formed into a bridge protecting her from raging torrents but I could not live up to expectations". What about the cliche, "better to have loved and lost then never to have loved at all". very moving write..
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Date: 6/30/2024 11:18:00 AM
Dear silent one, this is such a poignant and sincere write that truly made me feel very sad reading it: sigh! Sometimes we cant talk about things or maybe we refuse to, because we live in a world that refuse to hear us, but pretends like they see us, this poem truly speaks volumes and is so well delivered! I am not sure which part of this really did hit the most! But i can tell from your metaphors and alliterations that this is a very soulful poem! I love the ending because, yes your poetry will forever echo! And your words arent just words but they are emotive and deeply moving! So many can resonate and will find inspiration to express! Truly this is the perfect example for your contest! Now the challenge would be to write something as good as this or as close to this! Impeccable write, silent one! Fave
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Date: 6/30/2024 2:34:00 AM
Emotional and heartbreaking poetry SO. Sad but great poetry my friend . Jennifer. Blessings,
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Date: 6/29/2024 6:06:00 PM
Yet there are some words that become poems, and yet those are the only words worth penning, you S, are a poem in itself, you are poetry, and a beautiful poem at that !
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Date: 6/29/2024 10:05:00 AM
Great piece as always. I feel delighted to be back on poetry soup reading your poem. Thank you for writing <3
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Date: 6/29/2024 5:27:00 AM
I know you write mostly fiction but in fiction we find little pieces of ourselves. You will never be worthless or valueless to those who support and love you. In any case, your words mean alot, since I often have these conflicted feelings. Great poetry
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Date: 6/29/2024 2:07:00 AM
In the tranquility of our poetry we bare our souls with all the hardships, ache and turmoil.. Our words always able to embrace our pain, our emotions and thoughts.. so touching and beautiful what you have rendered, Silent One! So much delighted to read your poetry.. Best regards.
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Date: 6/28/2024 9:45:00 PM
Great!
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Date: 6/28/2024 5:45:00 PM
What am I, but a pomegranate pebble, great image forever, enjoyed your enlughning poem, thanks SO
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Date: 6/28/2024 4:22:00 PM
The power of WORDS and you have intricately woven a piece of powerful words.
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Date: 6/28/2024 10:57:00 AM
The most beautiful part about love is one's ability to secure and protect a lover. And it's okay to fail or not be up to the task. The vital part is trying to. And that should go on until one can fully protect its own. A great opening, Dear Silent. But I love these lines so much. "The heart ponders... What will abandon me first, my trusted muse? Who reveals my truth or my wallflower soul, which prevents butterfly breaths - breathing their last sigh?" Oh I know what will abandon me first. Me.
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Date: 6/28/2024 10:38:00 AM
Love it. Great poem.
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Date: 6/28/2024 5:13:00 AM
Such a soulful write. It seems words come from the core of your heart as you pass through such a mental state "Once, I planted two seeds with ultimate care, but they no longer bloom for my atonement. Yet, I still care for them from a distance, soaking their roots with drops of blood." Too emotive. With out deep feeling, one cannot write this sort of a poem. I am sure what I write, if ever I take part in this contest, will be banal and bland.
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Date: 6/27/2024 8:23:00 PM
yes, your poetry will forever echo, my friend
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Date: 6/27/2024 7:54:00 PM
Wow...this is so deep SO. Another of your masterpiece. You are so vulnerable yet so strong. A true reflection of how small human being is in face of the huge expectations of others. Great example.
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Date: 6/27/2024 2:47:00 PM
Deep vulnerability... I hope you will find what you need, this really showed heart, a beautiful poem
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Date: 6/27/2024 2:46:00 PM
sumptuous food for the heart and soul, S...you laid it all out for others to drink in your poem: so existential are various slices of life described in languid, sentimental moods...
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Date: 6/27/2024 1:31:00 PM
Another excellent musing, Silent One. Thanks for the example, but I can't write this way, so oh well, let's see what I will conjure up!
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Date: 6/27/2024 12:41:00 PM
Oops, I just noticed it's your contest. :)
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Date: 6/27/2024 11:56:00 AM
What will abandon me first…excellent musings, dear Silent!
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Date: 6/27/2024 11:47:00 AM
A soulful and heart stirring poem, Silent One. I wish you the very best, and also good luck in the contest. ~
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