I

.                        This fate is not final and irrevocable.  Hope  was not made
                         to exist. dum spiro, spero I face battles with Id as my sole
                         weapon.  Always defeated,  conquered  by  my  conceited
                         self, I come to God—to Him I surrender, to Him I give my
                                                       vow.  History was
                                                       made to endure—
                                                       to  be our  gover-
                                                       ness, to be victo-
                                                       rious.  dum  vivi-
                                                       mus,     vivamus.
                                                       And now,  as my
                                                       true battle  unra-
                                                       vels,    the   only
                                                       weapon   I   had
                                                       has become  my
                                                       foe.     Defeated
                                                       once    more    I
                                                       come  to You for
                                                       Your refuge, and
                                                       to  You  I pledge
                                                       again  my  vows;
                                                       but    none   had
                                                       lived long. Never
                         had  I  won a  fight  against  Id  and  never  was  I a victor.
                         vae victis. As for this  defeat  not  to  continue, I  would  be
                         more than  willing to sacrifice my sanity, to give it up if this
                         will  also  be  the  grounds   for  me  to  be  far  from  You…
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Moreno Avatar
November 30, 2009 at 10:11 PM
Ray, congrats on your success in Deborah's contest...Raul
Brown Avatar
November 30, 2009 at 1:16 PM
Congratulations on your win in Deborah's contest Ray. Love,Carol
Fraser Avatar
November 30, 2009 at 10:57 AM
Ray, many congratulations on your win in Deborah's contest >> James
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November 29, 2009 at 6:06 PM
Congrats on your success in Deborah's contest, Ray! Hugs, Donna
Guzzi Avatar
October 24, 2009 at 1:35 PM
Hey Ray what a magnificient job! Thanks for entering it in my contest. I see it as concrete. Light & Love
Mason Avatar
February 4, 2009 at 12:01 PM
Interesting and unusual, your writing is a wonderful selection in Michael's contest. I think the Form is "Shape" because you are making your "I" except for the top line ... but since I'm not familar with the "Concrete" form, I'm probably wrong ... LOL ... Anway, Congratulations on your win, Ray!!
Winter Avatar
February 3, 2009 at 6:23 AM
Warmest congrats Ray on your win in Michael's contest! Amazing write! Love, Shar
Brown Avatar
January 5, 2009 at 5:34 AM
Congratulations on being a finalist and having your poetry featured Ray. Love Carol
Richards Avatar
January 4, 2009 at 4:32 PM
Great job, Ray...perfect form and poem combined. Congratulations on this winner being in the finals! ~ Carrie
Jordan Avatar
January 4, 2009 at 9:43 AM
Ray - Seems to me like a double congratulations is in order – A Finalist and a featured poem – Great Job – God Bless, MJ
Winter Avatar
January 4, 2009 at 6:43 AM
Congratulations on being a featured finalist this week! Love, Shar
Strand Avatar
January 4, 2009 at 12:37 AM
Congrats on your feature this week Ray.Rgds Brian
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January 3, 2009 at 7:14 PM
"As for this defeat not to continue, I would be more than willing to sacrifice my sanity, to give it up if this will also be the grounds for me to be far from You…" So then regaining my sanity would be my reason to get closer to You...Have you ever heard of A Course in Miracles?
Foster Avatar
December 17, 2008 at 12:26 PM
Congratulations Ray on making it through to the next round. The concrete form is one of my favorites, I thank you for sharing the read. Good Luck and God Bless, Always, Adell
Heck Avatar
November 30, 2008 at 7:45 AM
Ray - A stunning visual! Congratulations on your poem making Round One of the PSoup poetry contest! Wishing you all the best in the finals and have a Happy Holiday season. Peace always, John
Jordan Avatar
November 17, 2008 at 8:43 AM
Angelo - Congrats on your poetry making it through to the next round – Great Job & God Bless
Brown Avatar
November 13, 2008 at 3:25 AM
Congratulations on your poetry making it through the first round. Good luck in the finals. Love, Carol
Winter Avatar
November 11, 2008 at 8:21 AM
Congrats on making it through to the first round! Good luck in the finals! Love, Shar
George   Avatar
November 3, 2008 at 5:10 PM
Hi Ray, GREAT CONCRETE RAY. SINCE THE SOUP RESTRUCTURED, I NOTICED IN THESE TYPES OF FORMAT, THE FIRST LINE IS NOT WHERE IT ISSUPPOSED TO BE . I FOUND IF I WENT TO THE VERY FIRST SPACE AT THE BEGINNING OF THAT LINE AND PUT A (PERIOD), I WAS THEN ABLE TO MOVE THE TEXT INTO ITS PROPER PLACE. HOPE IT WORKS FOR YOU. BEST WISHES IN THE NEXT ROUND. lAINIE
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August 13, 2008 at 3:47 PM
Ray Congratulations on your featured poem this week great form your a talented man indeed. Laura :)
Beer Avatar
August 13, 2008 at 3:05 PM
Ray, you truly are an artist in words and in display. I marvel at the artistic way some of you portray your work. I am afraid I don't have the patience to do it myself. Congrats and God Bless, Cile
Winter Avatar
August 11, 2008 at 9:28 AM
Congratulations Ray in this wonderful poem being featured once again. Love, Shar
Brown Avatar
August 11, 2008 at 4:17 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved poetry being featured this week Mike . Love, Carol
Strand Avatar
August 11, 2008 at 12:41 AM
Congrats on your feature this week Ray.Rgds Brian
Jordan Avatar
August 10, 2008 at 7:37 PM
Congrats on having I featured this week - wonderful poem/story.
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