Hush

silently I braid her long hair - my fingers whisper


A Monoku contest hosted by S1
Placed 1st

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Maria Williams

Date: 1/31/2018 2:39:00 AM

Congrats on your first placing Paul. Great monoku - I can imagine the sensation going through sensitive fingers which I can imagine. A plain lovely verse full with deep feeling...Maria

Paul Callus
Date: 2/1/2018 12:00:00 PM

Thank you, Maria; so pleased that you enjoyed it. Always a pleasure to have you visiting:) Regards // paul

Line Gauthier

Date: 1/2/2018 2:37:00 PM

How lovely. Congrats on your win, Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 1/2/2018 2:47:00 PM

Thank you, Line; both comment and congrats are appreciated. Regards // paul

Barry Stebbings

Date: 12/28/2017 12:54:00 PM

Congratulations on your win with this one, Paul. Nice images. // Barry

Paul Callus
Date: 12/28/2017 1:30:00 PM

Pleased that you liked it, Barry...thank you. Regards // paul

Probir Gupta

Date: 12/28/2017 4:40:00 AM

None eavesdropping? ... Simply Great ... Congratulations ....

Paul Callus
Date: 12/28/2017 9:44:00 AM

Many thanks, Probir. I appreciate your awesome comment and congrats. Regards // paul

Supraja Kannan

Date: 12/27/2017 6:10:00 AM

Beautiful monoku and congratulations on your well deserved win...

Paul Callus
Date: 12/27/2017 9:04:00 AM

Thank you, Supraja; I enjoyed your blissful winning entry:) Regards // paul

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

Date: 12/26/2017 10:27:00 PM

Wonderful pen! Congratulations on your win Paul :) xomo!

Paul Callus
Date: 12/27/2017 8:44:00 AM

Thank you, Maureen; both lovely comment and congrats are appreciated:) Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/26/2017 9:34:00 PM

back here for third time I think and this time to congratulate you for a MOST well deserved win. Congratulations!!!

Paul Callus
Date: 12/27/2017 8:42:00 AM

Third time lucky, Andrea:) not that in your eyes I needed any:) Regards // paul

Eve Roper

Date: 12/26/2017 8:28:00 PM

this is beautiful, Paul, congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve

Paul Callus
Date: 12/27/2017 8:41:00 AM

Thank you for reading and commenting, and for the congrats, Eve:) Hugs // paul

Judith S

Date: 12/26/2017 6:28:00 PM

Beautiful Paul! Just love the second half!! Congratulations on a top win! ~ Judy

Paul Callus
Date: 12/27/2017 8:39:00 AM

Thank you very much, Judith; I enjoyed your winning entry, too! Regards // paul

Akkina Downing

Date: 12/26/2017 6:09:00 PM

Congrats Paul :)

Paul Callus
Date: 12/27/2017 8:38:00 AM

Thank you, Akkina....smiles & hugs // paul

David Mohn

Date: 12/26/2017 5:38:00 PM

I love this tranquil gem Paul...congrats!

Paul Callus
Date: 12/27/2017 8:17:00 AM

Thank you for the 'like' and congrats, David. Kind regards // paul

Susan Ashley

Date: 12/26/2017 5:00:00 PM

Paul, returning to extend my congratulations to you for your well deserved first place win with your gorgeous write. Warmest wishes my friend. ~Susan

Susan Ashley
Date: 12/26/2017 5:46:00 PM

It's such a pleasure to share the winners list with you Paul! :)

Paul Callus
Date: 12/26/2017 5:12:00 PM

Many thanks, Susan. I was pleased to see your entry on the winners' list, too:) ~ Warm regards // paul

Janice Canerdy

Date: 12/26/2017 4:12:00 PM

Quite an image you've painted, Paul! Congrats. Janice

Paul Callus
Date: 12/26/2017 4:51:00 PM

Many thanks, Janice. Enjoyed your winning entry, too! Regards // paul

Curtis Moorman

Date: 12/26/2017 3:57:00 PM

WOW! Great write, Paul. Congratulations!

Paul Callus
Date: 12/26/2017 4:51:00 PM

Thank you Curtis...the wow is appreciated! Regards // paul

Charlie Smith

Date: 12/26/2017 3:08:00 PM

Lovely Paul, congratulations...

Paul Callus
Date: 12/26/2017 4:50:00 PM

Thank you, Charlie. Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 12/26/2017 2:58:00 PM

- So soft and lovely, Paul :) - Congratulations on your 1st place in the contest! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 12/26/2017 4:52:00 PM

Thank you for the lovely comments and congrats, Anne-Lise - Hugs // paul

Silent One

Date: 12/26/2017 1:36:00 PM

This is so simple, but so clever.. Congratulations on your first place in the Monoku 1 contest Paul..

Paul Callus
Date: 12/26/2017 4:29:00 PM

Thank you for my high placement, S-1. I see that I am in good company! Regards // paul

Rhoda Tripp

Date: 12/25/2017 12:28:00 PM

This is beautifully written. If there is anything a woman loves, its having her hair played with.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/25/2017 2:21:00 PM

Thank you for the lovely comments, Rhoda; so pleased you liked. Regards // paul

Nathan D.

Date: 12/25/2017 11:36:00 AM

I'm a little demented so this strikes me as creepy very cool though.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/25/2017 1:57:00 PM

I see where you are going, Nathan; this could also be dark and creepy! Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/24/2017 1:26:00 PM

Thanks for seeing my movie poem. It's hard to get people to read them this week! If I did not say it before, Merry Christmas to you, Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/24/2017 2:47:00 PM

It's not only this week, Andrea; I have seen a sharp fall in readership these past few weeks. Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/24/2017 1:25:00 PM

This is absolutely gorgeous. If it were in my contest, I would give it first place!

Paul Callus
Date: 12/24/2017 2:44:00 PM

That is very generous of you, Andrea:) Thank you! Once again...Merry Christmas to you and your family. // paul

Susan Ashley

Date: 12/22/2017 6:07:00 PM

Ohh Paul, such a sensual, serene and loving write. Tender, intimate and beautiful; like you fingers are whispering sweet nothings in her ear.. blissful poetry my enlightened friend. I love it :) My warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Paul Callus
Date: 12/23/2017 3:28:00 PM

Thank you for these awesome comments, Susan...your reaction to this single line of poetry is very much appreciated! ~ Warm regards, my friend. // paul