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Humbley Sought

I try My very best To be Being Is the purpose Of life Living Only happens Today Daylight Or in the dark Live free Freedom Comes from knowing Yourself Self love Is the first step Not pride Prideful Selfish people Are sad Sadness Can eat them up Inside In ways I can't describe Fully Filling Their empty hearts With gloom Gloomy Shadows make them Lonely Alone In the darkness They cry Crying They truly crave The light Lightning Flashes accross The sky Skyward Their thoughts now flow Humbled Try out my Mussetle Train. Directions are on my previous poem. Let's see if we can turn this into a freight train, Toot! Toot! Please let me know if you try one out, I would love to see what you come up with. It is fun to see where the train ends up after leaving the station.

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Maurice Yvonne

Date: 12/7/2014 9:58:00 AM

Another great train, with your created form.

Casarah Nance

Date: 12/2/2014 7:09:00 PM

Okay I want on the train, I guess I missed the boarding call, curious to know what all this is all about! :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/2/2014 7:19:00 PM

I am trying to create some interest in my new form. My Questionku was accepted so you never know, maybe this one will as well. I hope you enter my contest Casarah.

Monterey Sirak

Date: 12/2/2014 6:45:00 AM

I love the randomness of this. It is like at every switch point the poem chooses which track to take next and the poet just rides along. Fantastic!

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 12/1/2014 4:34:00 AM

A lovely line of thought that after passing through gloomy tunnels of despair shows the light of redemption! Excellent dear friend, Richard! Enlightening and uplifting!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/1/2014 9:50:00 AM

Thanks Demetrious, I hope you give the form a try. It is interesting where it takes you once you get going.

Timothy Hicks

Date: 12/1/2014 2:26:00 AM

This carries like the blitz form; not even the poet knows where he/she will end up, when it's done! Many thoughts to ponder here. I like how you distinguish self-love from pride. We can't expect to love others if we don't love ourselves first; we can't give away what we do not have.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/1/2014 9:51:00 AM

So true Timothy.

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 11/30/2014 5:37:00 PM

Mine has left the station toot toot.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/30/2014 5:43:00 PM

On my way Brenda.

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 11/30/2014 2:30:00 PM

Toot toot-Self love /is the first step/not pride-I am om that cabin..cause its my favourite of all the lines : )toot

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/30/2014 5:00:00 PM

You are sweet Charmaine, I hope you give my contest a go.

Kelly Deschler

Date: 11/30/2014 12:39:00 PM

This poem travels in a different direction with each stanza and I didn't know where the journey was going to end up.... I really enjoyed this interesting and expressive write. Nice work, Richard!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/30/2014 5:03:00 PM

Hi Kelly, so glad you enjoyed this piece. I hope I can persuade you to submit one for my contest.

Tim Smith

Date: 11/30/2014 12:38:00 PM

I tried it Richard one did rhyme though....toot toot

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/30/2014 4:58:00 PM

Hi Tim, thanks for giving it a go. On my way to check it out.

Jan Allison

Date: 11/30/2014 8:55:00 AM

wow what a unique train of through Richard I may give it a go one day - its a 7 from me! Hugs jan xx

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/30/2014 9:09:00 AM

Aww thanks Jan, I hope you do. I appreciate the seven. Hugs Rick.