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Premiere Contest WinnerHubby's Hair Cut


A corner shop, a busy street
your mother's hand, your dragging feet
I can almost set the scene.......A messy rack of magazines,
A barber pole,  some shaving cream, and jars of greasy Brilliantine

I try to picture you back then,
How many barbers have there been?
Your  rosy cheeks, eyes shining bright,
above the crisp white cloth so tight,
around your neck. (You hated that!)

A squirmy worm, but there you sat
Your daddy waits to pay the bill
Darn it, won't you please hold still?!!

          Today there's less to take off top
          Behind you, I have snipped and cropped
          My scissors fold and I must stop
          and for a moment I was there...
          and saw that small boy in the chair
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Haight Avatar
May 30, 2018 at 3:49 PM
Awe...such cute memories conveyed to us so well with your poetic creativity, Carrie! Love your poem...I remember times like this too...Congrats on your well-deserved Trophy win! Hugs, Sandra
Allison Avatar
May 29, 2018 at 2:01 PM
Fabulous memories Carrie I congratulate you on your top spot:-) hugs jan xx
Gauthier Avatar
May 27, 2018 at 10:57 AM
So sweet, Carrie. Congrats on your top win.
Gentry Avatar
May 24, 2018 at 1:44 PM
Oh gee!! This brought tears for some reason. So well written, so real. Can see why #1. Congratulations. A fave.
Pigeon Tart Avatar
May 24, 2018 at 7:58 AM
Wonderful ink Carrie! Oh just delightful. A fave. Congratulations on your fine trophy win!
Cozart Avatar
May 24, 2018 at 7:50 AM
This is charming, Carrie, and deftly written. Congrats.
Canerdy Avatar
May 24, 2018 at 7:44 AM
I really LOVE this great WINNING poem, Carrie! Janice
Culverhouse Avatar
February 17, 2010 at 5:42 PM
enjoyed, congrats on the win!
Foster Avatar
February 6, 2010 at 4:24 PM
Congratulations Carrie. I think everyone with sons has had this experience. The first time your baby becomes a little boy, lovely work...Margaret
Dietrich Avatar
February 6, 2010 at 3:47 PM
A sweet memory poem, Carrie. Congratulations!
Guzzi Avatar
February 6, 2010 at 2:53 PM
So preciuos a memory! Congrad's dear one! congrad's Light & Love
Sweetheart Avatar
February 6, 2010 at 1:28 PM
Congrats Carrie on your winning poem and placement in Mac's contest yesterday.. a wonderful write and win.. luv.. Linda-Marie.
Brown Avatar
February 6, 2010 at 11:36 AM
Congratulations on your win in Mac's contest Carrie. Love, Carol
Mcgovern Avatar
February 6, 2010 at 11:36 AM
Congratulations on your 3rd place win. Indeed a pleasure to read...and a return of forgotten memories. Mac
Suzadail Jr. Avatar
March 7, 2009 at 10:07 AM
Pleasant memory. A trip to the barber was one of my favorites when my boys were small. I came back once with 2 boot camp cuts and my wife was furious, but my kids were laughing and proud of their hairless heads. Vince
Gass Avatar
March 4, 2009 at 8:36 PM
This is such a lovely, nostalgic piece, Carrie. Very beautifully written! well done! Love, Robin
Mason Avatar
March 4, 2009 at 2:35 PM
Almost have me crying, Carrie ... smile ... what a beautiful tribute to a boy's haircut and I don't think I've seen that subject before here at the soup! Wonderful write ... you've really brought March in with a roar ... so many writes already ... LOL ...
Williams Avatar
March 4, 2009 at 11:07 AM
Hi Carrie... loads of memories come flooding back.... making me smile.. squirming and wiggling in that big chair.... great stuff Carrie.. loved it ! and thanks so much for the comment
Degenhardt Avatar
March 4, 2009 at 7:14 AM
I have two sons and this reminds me so clearly of the times I've taken them to the barber, to see them again as little kids. Wonderful! Michael
Winter Avatar
March 4, 2009 at 5:39 AM
~lol~ You have a way of bringing magic and joy to every day simple things of life. Adorable write. Gotta love the line "...Now there's less to take off top..." Makes me smile! Love, Shar
Strand Avatar
March 4, 2009 at 12:42 AM
This takes me back to those short,back & sides styling Carrie.Nice work.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments
Bingham Avatar
March 3, 2009 at 7:21 PM
Oh such precious memories you always muster up. I remember my granddad cutting my hair with hand operated clippers. Thanks for the memories. Blessings to you and your family, Ron
Ginn Avatar
March 3, 2009 at 7:05 PM
Gosh I remember quite a few tears in the beginning and such sad faces, and terribly itchy until you would've thought they were dying. Fun stuff now
Moreno Avatar
March 3, 2009 at 6:35 PM
You brought back some wonderful memories Carrie...Raul
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March 3, 2009 at 3:01 PM
O, how could I resist, since my father prided himself a barber, with his bowl on my head and clippers doing there thing on my beautiful hair, is it no wonder that my hair stays long, now!! LOL - A keeper, Dear Carrie!!!! poet butterfly
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