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Her hibiscus heartbeats sing silent hymns, since Selene healed hiraeth-stars.

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Panagiota Romios

Date: 4/14/2024 10:04:00 AM

Outstanding alliterations, HIya. Pangie xx

Howard Kerr

Date: 3/16/2024 7:28:00 PM

This is a truly exquisite alliteration, Hiya. Your word selection glistens and glows. Haunting imagery as emphasis. Marvellous Howard

Tonye George

Date: 3/6/2024 4:44:00 AM

Lovely one Hiya. I really would love to hear Heartbeats sing silent hymns, I know they sing already but I've heard jazz more often. Amazing alliteration and choice of words. Stars need healing too, they give us so much strength.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/2/2024 7:38:00 AM

Congratulations on your winning work. Way to go. Thanks for sharing your line with us. Sara K

A. Ormulyce

Date: 2/23/2024 7:59:00 AM

Perfect!

Jeanette Swan

Date: 2/23/2024 4:12:00 AM

What a pretty sentence! I had to look up 'hiraeth', ah - the homesick stars healed by the moon lady. This matches the peaceful sounds of your initials. It is a sentence that lingers. J :)

Christina Bowring

Date: 2/23/2024 3:18:00 AM

Such a beautiful alliteration line dear Hiya from your artistic pen. Love the choice of words so creatively penned for a seamless flow using your initials. I love ‘ silent hymns’ Exquisite as always from you dear one. I think this will do very well in the contest. Good luck ! Hugs and blessings xx

Duke Beaufort

Date: 2/21/2024 7:47:00 AM

I love the way you praise/honor Selene and the order of the words to make the point. You point out that we can take solace in the kindness of others and bask in the goodness this universe offers. I admire the beauty of this work!

Tom Woody

Date: 2/21/2024 6:02:00 AM

My wife loves hibiscus. Sweet alliterative one liner Hiya

Bill Baker

Date: 2/20/2024 9:38:00 PM

A lovely Alliteration poem, Hiya. It could also be an Monku with alliteration within it. Thank you for sharing your many talents with us. I enjoy reading your poetry, my friend. Hugs, Bill

Maria Williams

Date: 2/20/2024 8:58:00 PM

I love alliterations in poems, and yours is a true gem. All the best in the contest dear Hiya...Hugs

Sotto Poet

Date: 2/20/2024 5:38:00 PM

I am captivated by the melodic use of alliteration in your writing and impressed by the skillful selection of words, dear Hiya. Your poem is exceptionally eloquent and effectively conveyed. Best wishes for the contest.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 2/20/2024 4:43:00 PM

lovely alliterative words. Was this written for a contest? If so, best wishes. Have a splendid evening, hugs, Sara

Abdullah Alhemaidy

Date: 2/20/2024 3:56:00 PM

Lovely cute poem from lovely Hiya Sharma!

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 2/20/2024 3:13:00 PM

Love it! Alliteration is great when it involves a variety of sounds synched up just right! Very nice, Hiya!

Vijay Pandit

Date: 2/20/2024 12:22:00 PM

I hear the tenor of alliteration and feel the prowess of your vocabulary, Hiya. Stunningly articulate, poem--succinctly delivered.

Paige Hind

Date: 2/20/2024 10:08:00 AM

Beautiful writing. Hiya! Loved your name in alliteration!

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 2/20/2024 9:18:00 AM

Dear Hiya, The way you describe the hibiscus heartbeats singing silent hymns and Selene healing hiraeth-stars is truly enchanting and evocative. Your words transport me to a place of quiet beauty and introspection, where the heartbeats of nature and the healing touch of the moon create a sense of serenity and wonder. You captured the essence of nature's grace and the power of healing. - Blessings, Daniel

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/20/2024 7:46:00 AM

I wonder if that is the red hibiscus or is it the white. I enjoyed reading your work because it made me ask a question. Sara K

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 2/20/2024 5:46:00 AM

Subtle Monoline with great alliteration. Gave me some worry over hiraeth a Welsh word not easy to translate. Best for a win.

Ink Empress

Date: 2/20/2024 2:42:00 AM

Ah angelic star! Im so happy to see you post again, and ofcourse alliterations come easy for you too, and you do them so very well in such eloquence. Usually one liners with alliterations can be too cluttered but yours flow just seamlessly! And has so much depth and beauty! So artistic too! I love “ hibiscus heartbeats” how beautiful and deep is that how youv used hibiscus there is clever. “ silent hymns” the closest to our heart usually are whispered and sung in silence. “ hiraeth stars” i love

Ink Empress
Date: 2/20/2024 2:43:00 AM

That really! So creative and so mesmerising! One of the best one liners with alliterations that iv read! Youv nailed it! I bet this will do very well too in the contest. Best of luck! And keep sharing always