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wobbling
   earth
      Phoebus
          slipover
               &
            winkling
                horizon
                       mind thrums
                 cliffhanging
             rhyming
             &
         static reach
     cooling
brisk air
                     
                             autumn ribbons
                         nettled
                    disgruntled
                       &
                 kibitzed
             stillborn moon
         thought
 molds around
          cornucopia curvatures
                       &spine

silken rustles
       &
  wind sweeping
       spawning
           slices 
              of 
                 arctic time
                        swaggering
                  sight&smell
              memories
        no privilege
      of 
    quietus
born crane
        &wings
              nuzzled 
                     in 
                       uncured coves
                and shade
                  of 
           huddled house
       deep-dug
 to shingle

                                  no clouds
                               swell
                              &
                           no taste
                      moisten
                 dust-dry 
        rhizomes
             sun stretches&
                    tired meadow
                           with swung
                                       gold
                                & brown
                             stalk 
                       twilights
                    sharp
                   &
        seed shrunk
 dwindled

          green promise
                equanimous
                       spinous
                             pernicious
                                  posthumous
                        laden with agony
                    except 
               poets
      ensnared 
         in 
              necropolis
                   dusk dumps
                             
                                 cosmos
                        cupping crystal&
                 protean oaths
              dawdling
            delving
       digging
  drizzling
       attic wound
               pauperized
                                cloister
                         willowy gleam
                   orphaned
             wadded
      writhe
within shell
        between
             consciousness
                         &
                     humanity nexus
                                  started from 
              h e a r t   c u s p

3rd Place contest winner


Written: September 22, 2022

A Brian Strand Premiere Choice Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Brian Strand

NOTE:THIS IS AN OPEN(organic) FORM VERSE   using spaces&breaks without grammatical symbols ,the ' open' relies upon 'the one breath limitation' & so inherently requires the 'reader' (reciter) to input and responds thus making this enigmatic form a two way interplay & interpretatIon unique to the moment& changing according to mood is inherently variable.

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Date: 10/6/2022 10:16:00 AM
You continue to amaze me with your creativity and use of language Lasaad. Not only does this poem have a rhythm like waves but the "open" format illustrates the poem. Congrats and high fives for your win! Blessings and prayers.
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Date: 9/26/2022 12:50:00 PM
- Congratulations on your great win, Las :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 9/25/2022 9:25:00 PM
Congratulations Lasaad on your outstanding win on this well deserved piece of zig zagging poem.. :)
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Date: 9/25/2022 8:37:00 PM
"cloister willowy gleam orphaned", "cosmos cupping crystal& protean oaths" - Beautiful. Congratulations!
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Date: 9/24/2022 10:29:00 AM
An intriguing write Sotto, Very nicely penned
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Date: 9/23/2022 1:46:00 PM
A very creative form to display intriguing imagery and a sprinkling of illiteration to inhance the rhythm, Lasaad. Great entry for the contest. An interesting read for me. Thanks for sharing, Bill
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Date: 9/23/2022 12:31:00 PM
Love this one Lasaad Brian Strand dows many like these. Yours is one of my favorites. Congratulations my friend you do this form perfectly.
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Date: 9/23/2022 5:45:00 AM
Excellent yet I had to work hard to understand. A very original poem.
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Date: 9/23/2022 4:20:00 AM
Your creative spirits shine my friend. Best to you, Lasaad.
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Date: 9/22/2022 11:40:00 PM
Wow, love the openness, Lasaad. The poetry is excellent. The whole universe brought to us via your pen and mind.
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Date: 9/22/2022 9:33:00 PM
Amazing lay out.....dear friend ! Very artistic ! Got carried away by its shape, shall read the poem later :)
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Date: 9/22/2022 6:23:00 PM
Love the layout form with meaning. Many blessings friend
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