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Hopeless

It seeps into your bones this silent sadness Spreading like a caustic cancerous liquid Black and oozing slithery fingers into spaces Once open petals to joy and light ... and hope Like the nap of a velvet pillow Stroked with the palm against the grain Changing smiles to tears and love to hate Choking the light of life from your soul You scream to release the impending hell But the sound is choked back by the oil And only a gurgle of a horrific thought emerges The impact lost in the silenced words No one knows ... no one sees The unrelenting march of death that spreads Beyond sight ... without sound ... in the depths Of your being and your defeated mortality Willing it to stop with what’s left of your resolve Yet knowing your weak fight can no longer conquer Surrendering to the chokehold on your soul The night is your comfort and your demise. ____________________________ 5/23/2018

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Date: 9/11/2018 8:16:00 PM
Judy, the depth and breadth of the depression, loneliness, and despair expressed in your poignant poem is profound.. Your last line is indeed brilliant in its sadness and its dark emotional truth.. Your artistry is simply stunning. Belated congratulations on your wonderful and well deserved recognition with POTD honors for your exquisite poem. Warmest wishes my NE friend.. ~Susan
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Date: 6/6/2018 6:29:00 PM
Gosh Judy, I am totally blown away by this poetic expression of utter hopelessness and despair, each line building to an amazing crescendo, then bringing it home in that final line....'The night is your comfort and your demise'. Bravo my dear friend, I can see why it got POTD . You are one amazing Poetess, congratulations....Maria xxx
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Date: 6/6/2018 5:55:00 PM
wow, you really composed a great poem showing the emotions of feeling utter despair. I don't think I have ever been to this place, but I can imagine how horrible it must be because recently I 've been experiencing "dread" feelings which I am told means anxiety. WELL DONE.
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Date: 6/6/2018 10:37:00 AM
Each word, each line carefully crafted, this is a special write Judith, profound in it's insight, obviously not just a theoretical write, but leaves me with the impression that this is from experience, if so hope it passes soon or has passed! I must fave this as it has inspired a song, will post soon!
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Date: 6/1/2018 4:49:00 PM
Word porn. This is absolutely epic and brilliant.
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Date: 5/31/2018 5:27:00 PM
This is an excellent expression of the depths of hopelessness and despair in this poignant piece. Congratulations on your well-deserved honor of POTD Judith! xxoo
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Date: 5/31/2018 4:08:00 PM
Wow! What a poignant piece! I have experienced this Judith; your poem describes that hopelessness wonderfully. Congratulations on well-deserved recognition.
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Date: 5/31/2018 3:53:00 PM
stunning write, congrats on POTD, thank you very much for sharing :) x
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Date: 5/31/2018 11:41:00 AM
Sadness explored and cleverly so! Congratulations Judith on POTD. Mick
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Date: 5/31/2018 11:24:00 AM
Congratulations on potd Judith :) Powerful piece! xomo enjoy the day!
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Date: 5/31/2018 10:18:00 AM
Hopeless, hopeless, hopeless...Neil Young said it well, but you Judy have said it excellent! Congrats on your POTD...All the best...Charlie
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Date: 5/31/2018 9:19:00 AM
To write such a knowledgeable poem, you must have had experience. I think we all have waves of hopelessness, but hope can and will return. Your writing is exquisite.
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Date: 5/31/2018 8:09:00 AM
Hi Judith, You described the state of "hopelessness " very well. Excellent job. Congratulations on getting the poem of day. It was well deserved:-) Alexis
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Date: 5/31/2018 7:57:00 AM
POTD! Congrats, fully deserving on this emotive piece... A sign of your talent...
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Date: 5/31/2018 7:53:00 AM
Back to say congrats on your POTD, Well deserved !!
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Date: 5/31/2018 6:47:00 AM
Love that last line Judith. Nice metaphor and eerie images. An emotional wringer well fashioned.
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Date: 5/31/2018 6:25:00 AM
It's a really beautiful poem and it has surely touch my heart, Congratulations on your poem being chosen as POTD
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Date: 5/31/2018 6:06:00 AM
Back with congrats Judy on poem of the day..absolutely well deserved!
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Date: 5/31/2018 5:21:00 AM
A beautiful sad write...hopefully, the boo-boo will go away soon lol...Congrats!!! on your POTD! Judith...very well expressed...love and light...^WW^
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Date: 5/31/2018 5:15:00 AM
- A great poem that touches the reader - Congratulations on your well deserved p.o.td., Judith :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 5/31/2018 2:31:00 AM
Congratulations on POTD Judith, well deserved. Tom.
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Date: 5/30/2018 8:51:00 AM
The last line is what hits hardest for me, Judy. You have crafted a deep and so easily relatable portrayal of sadness and depression. Exquisite xxoo
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Date: 5/30/2018 8:23:00 AM
You described it well... from deep within your soul...All the best Judith
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Date: 5/29/2018 4:29:00 PM
Excellent poetry Judy..though your words describe a sad tale--it is far reaching for many..observations well interpreted and delivered.
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Date: 5/29/2018 7:54:00 PM
Ahhhhh dear Vijay. So nice to see your kind comments here. It has really made my evening to see your appreciation of my heart felt words :) Best to you ... ~Judy
Date: 5/29/2018 12:29:00 PM
A well written verse tinged with sadness Judith, Tom.
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Date: 5/29/2018 7:53:00 PM
Thank you so much Tom for your visit. It has been awhile since I've posted and it's welcoming to find your greeting here. Best ... ~Judy
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