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Hope, Not Yet Lost

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I stand upon this aging wooden bridge peering into depths of the swollen stream a fingerling flowing to waters of the sea grief is rhythmic like the beat of my heart tears ebbing in rise with the morning tide each breath escapes in a murmured sigh Three months gone by since my love left bereft am I since there's been no word no news of his vessel, now long overdue a great storm cast its eye on his ship's course If prayers were diamonds I'd have great wealth currency in which I could never take pleasure In my worst nightmare he lies tangled in kelp without help to free him he surely will drown a torturous fate that nearly drives me insane Here, on the bridge, amid my sighs and cries I beg that somehow he finds his way home escaping the wrath of an unmerciful sea Day after day, when dawn has barely broken I stand on the bridge, sealed bottle in my hand inside is a note in which my sad heart entreats, "Poseidon, please send my love back to me before loneliness becomes the cause of my death." To the current my plea tossed. Hope, not yet lost June 21, 2017

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Funom Makama

Date: 7/4/2017 8:51:00 AM

Oh my goodness! This is why I always miss your work when I stay away from this site for a while. Your choice of words and perfect blend of a cute message is beyond description. This is definitely good..

Carol Deason

Date: 7/2/2017 3:35:00 PM

Very nice poem! I too loved the ending!

Lin Lane
Date: 7/2/2017 5:16:00 PM

Thanks for the nice comments, Carol.

Winged Warrior

Date: 6/22/2017 10:06:00 PM

Back to Congrats!!! Lin...enjoy my friend...a great write...^WW^

Lin Lane
Date: 6/22/2017 10:23:00 PM

Thank you ever so much, ^WW^

Eve Roper

Date: 6/22/2017 1:03:00 PM

Remarkable write, Lin ~*

Lin Lane
Date: 6/22/2017 10:23:00 PM

Thank you very much, Eve.

Daniel Turner

Date: 6/21/2017 4:53:00 PM

Beautifully written as per usual, Peaches. The reader feels the longing in your lines. Masterfully done:)

Lin Lane
Date: 6/21/2017 5:32:00 PM

Merci beaucoup, Danny.

Jan Allison

Date: 6/21/2017 4:33:00 PM

So many fabulous lines in this sad poem If prayers were diamonds I'd have great wealth ... living on a little Island I love poems about the sea. I wonder if I ever dare write another poem mentioning bridges lol lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 6/21/2017 5:30:00 PM

haha Jan. I almost titled this one "Bridge of Grief," but decided I wasn't going to set foot on that bridge. Thanks!

Charlie Smith

Date: 6/21/2017 2:49:00 PM

Well done Lin, sadly tragic but well written...

Lin Lane
Date: 6/21/2017 5:29:00 PM

Thank you, Charlie. I always appreciate your thoughts.

Tim Smith

Date: 6/21/2017 2:12:00 PM

Water on the brain...love the internal rhymes...hope is not lost

Lin Lane
Date: 6/21/2017 5:28:00 PM

Thanks for noticing the occasional internal rhyming, Tim. There is always hope.

White Wolf

Date: 6/21/2017 2:02:00 PM

Great penmanship, Lin! Really well done! Loved it

Lin Lane
Date: 6/21/2017 5:27:00 PM

I appreciate your comments very much, Wolf. Thank you.

Winged Warrior

Date: 6/21/2017 1:42:00 PM

Looks like we both are listening to whispering winds Lin lol...great write my friend...god bless...^WW^

Lin Lane
Date: 6/21/2017 5:27:00 PM

You could be right, WW. Thanks so much.

Chris Green

Date: 6/21/2017 1:37:00 PM

This was really beautiful, a sad and lonely piece that expresses emotions that are easily felt. Reading this was like gazing upon a painting in a gallery that began speaking. This was gorgeous Lin.

Heidi Sands

Date: 6/21/2017 12:51:00 PM

I enjoyed reading this Lin. Very well written! Great ending. :)

Lin Lane
Date: 6/21/2017 5:25:00 PM

Hi Heidi. Thanks, especially for pointing out something you particularly liked.