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I’ve known the streets: Places where the night lingers and the echoes of passing cars feel distant. My feet have grown accustomed to the dim-lit alleys. I walked past shuttered windows when the city slept, listening for the familiar footsteps that come and go. I leaned against the brick walls, my breath clouding in the cold air, and I whispered in low tones, watching headlights sweep across the pavement, and I felt the city thrum with unseen stories. I’ve known the streets: Quiet, restless streets. My feet have grown accustomed to the dim-lit alleys. I’ve lain stretched out, my body bare to the night, where beauty and sorrow mingled in my broken bones. I’ve forsaken my soul for a walking dead man’s pleasure, trading dignity for a moment’s release. I wanted to retire, live on the beach in Miami, listen to the waves crash on the shore. But another car has stopped at the curb, and I must wear that smile that pulls at a lonely man’s groin.

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Date: 4/26/2024 3:43:00 PM
A poignant and evocative poem, Don. It speaks of life 'on the streets' -- the dim lit alleys, the shuttered windows, unseen stories. The combined imagery creates a feeling of emptiness and despair. I felt the soullessness of the narrator trading dignity for a moment's release from the despair. A brilliant creation, a masterpiece in my mind. Appreciate your skill and creativity, have a great evening, Sara
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Don Iannone
Date: 4/26/2024 8:11:00 PM
Sara, as always, I appreciate your amazing insights about the poems that I write. As I said to Daniel, I’m trying to move my poetry in new directions both in terms of subject matter and style. And since trying to be very experimental. Have a great weekend. Cheers, Don.
Date: 4/26/2024 8:49:00 AM
Hello Don, I liked how your poem is a haunting portrayal of life on the streets, filled with raw emotion and stark imagery. The juxtaposition of beauty and sorrow, desire and despair, is palpable in your words. I also loved how your portrayal of the city's unseen stories and their toll on the soul is both evocative and poignant. This is a powerful piece that sheds light on the complexities of human experience. - Blessings, Daniel
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Don Iannone
Date: 4/26/2024 8:10:00 PM
Daniel, Poignant comments. I am trying to move my Poetry in new directions both in terms of subject matter and style. Appreciate your comments. Cheers, Don.

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