Holly

As she walked across the sand,
receding waves made graffiti
out of the footsteps of a Valkyrie.
An ocean’s city let go of her hand
as we passed under a tree –
her hair like the gold of Valhalla’s marquee.
It was there, in another god’s hall,
the raven flew under a ceiling of shields,
and her grace lived in every swan.
It was then, when I first met need,
thirsting for wine but settling for mead.
Baldr’s death carved into a stone wall
moved me west to the mistletoe.
Her face held by another, his fingers 
the lightening that tore open the skies
and bled the blue into her eyes.
My first loss and left out of place,
to learn what can’t be taught.

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Contest: End April 2018
Sponsor: Brian Strand
Written: 03.23.18


Previous Contest: Love Letter II
Sponsor: Viv Wigley
Written: 03.23.18

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Date: 4/27/2018 8:21:00 PM
Such an exceptional line, "Her face held by another, his fingers the lightening that tore open the skies and bled the blue into her eyes."
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rob carmack
Date: 4/28/2018 1:07:00 AM
Thank You James.
Date: 4/27/2018 10:45:00 AM
Back again, Rob, to congratulate you again for another fine win for your very beautiful, emotive poem. Sandra
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Date: 4/28/2018 1:06:00 AM
TY Sandra.
Date: 4/26/2018 7:26:00 AM
Hi Rob, what a beautiful love story told as only you could articulate it! Reminds me of a Viking lore! Congratulations my friend this piece is truly a winner! Love it! Hugs. Pandita
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Date: 4/26/2018 9:16:00 PM
Thanks with a hug Pandita!
Date: 4/26/2018 7:20:00 AM
This is fantastic, Rob. I love how you weave the pieces of mythology into your poem. Congrats on your win.
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rob carmack
Date: 4/26/2018 9:17:00 PM
She was fantastic too. TY for reading and commenting.
Date: 4/25/2018 11:41:00 PM
A beautiful haunting love story. Congrats on your most deserving win, Rob.
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rob carmack
Date: 4/26/2018 9:16:00 PM
TY Line.
Date: 4/21/2018 2:29:00 PM
Hello Rob, Congratulation on your win here!! This selection of yours is a truly wondrous narrative poem. Superb in every respect. I enjoyed it very much. Cheers and Best, Gary
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rob carmack
Date: 4/24/2018 9:09:00 PM
Gary - thank you for reading and commenting.
Date: 4/16/2018 12:42:00 AM
Blessings and congratulations on your well-deserved win, Rob - keep up the wonderful work, my friend - "A writer writes - always!"
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rob carmack
Date: 4/16/2018 5:24:00 PM
TY Greg.
Date: 4/10/2018 3:17:00 PM
you crushed this, rob... happy to see you winning, dear friend... big congrats!..huggs
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rob carmack
Date: 4/10/2018 4:52:00 PM
TY Nette - hugs back to you.
Date: 4/10/2018 2:41:00 AM
Your romantic poem gave me chills Rob. I loved this passionate piece and it would have placed much higher for me. Congratulations on your wonderful win my friend! : )
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rob carmack
Date: 4/10/2018 4:51:00 PM
Maybe I can try my luck in another contest in the future and see if I can get a higher placement, but I am thankful to Viv for sponsoring the contest and inspiring this poem. TY Connie for reading and commenting.
Date: 4/9/2018 10:34:00 PM
Congratulations on your win with this wonderful love letter! Enjoyed the imagery.
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rob carmack
Date: 4/10/2018 4:46:00 PM
TY Susan.
Date: 4/9/2018 5:55:00 PM
oh my gosh, one of your VERY best, Rob. for me a FAVE from you. I hope this placed very high.
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rob carmack
Date: 4/10/2018 4:46:00 PM
Thanks for the FAVE friend.
Date: 4/9/2018 3:14:00 PM
Well-written with wonderful imagery, Rob! Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 4/10/2018 4:45:00 PM
TY Sandra.
Date: 4/9/2018 3:46:00 AM
"bled the blue into her eyes". I fall for this type of rhyme every time. I am also partial to a Viking. Congratulations on your placement Rob.
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rob carmack
Date: 4/10/2018 4:45:00 PM
TY Jean.
Date: 4/8/2018 10:08:00 PM
Well done, Rob, a fine write. Regards, Viv
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rob carmack
Date: 4/8/2018 11:30:00 PM
TY Viv, this contest really inspired me.
Date: 4/8/2018 9:36:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Rob, nicely done! Hugs Eve ~`*
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rob carmack
Date: 4/8/2018 11:30:00 PM
A hug and a thanks Eve.
Date: 4/8/2018 6:45:00 PM
Lovely, Robe. Congrats on your win.
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rob carmack
Date: 4/8/2018 11:30:00 PM
TY Line.
Date: 4/8/2018 1:37:00 PM
Many congrats on your win Rob, I need to google some of the characters to learn and understand more of the poems:-) hugs jan xx
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rob carmack
Date: 4/8/2018 11:29:00 PM
Thanks Jan, I liked this contest because it had me do some researching and learning.
Date: 3/28/2018 6:20:00 PM
I am sooooooo into the Vikings TV series that I couldn't help but 'fall' for your write. I thoroughly enjoyed your theme and delivery of same. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
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rob carmack
Date: 3/28/2018 6:57:00 PM
TY CayCay and God bless you.