Holly

As she walked across the sand,
receding waves made graffiti
out of the footsteps of a Valkyrie.
An ocean’s city let go of her hand
as we passed under a tree –
her hair like the gold of Valhalla’s marquee.
It was there, in another god’s hall,
the raven flew under a ceiling of shields,
and her grace lived in every swan.
It was then, when I first met need,
thirsting for wine but settling for mead.
Baldr’s death carved into a stone wall
moved me west to the mistletoe.
Her face held by another, his fingers 
the lightening that tore open the skies
and bled the blue into her eyes.
My first loss and left out of place,
to learn what can’t be taught.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Inman Avatar
April 27, 2018 at 8:21 PM
Such an exceptional line, "Her face held by another, his fingers the lightening that tore open the skies and bled the blue into her eyes."
Carmack Avatar
April 28, 2018 at 1:07 AM
Thank You James.
Haight Avatar
April 27, 2018 at 10:45 AM
Back again, Rob, to congratulate you again for another fine win for your very beautiful, emotive poem. Sandra
Carmack Avatar
April 28, 2018 at 1:06 AM
TY Sandra.
Sietesantos Avatar
April 26, 2018 at 7:26 AM
Hi Rob, what a beautiful love story told as only you could articulate it! Reminds me of a Viking lore! Congratulations my friend this piece is truly a winner! Love it! Hugs. Pandita
Carmack Avatar
April 26, 2018 at 9:16 PM
Thanks with a hug Pandita!
Krampe Avatar
April 26, 2018 at 7:20 AM
This is fantastic, Rob. I love how you weave the pieces of mythology into your poem. Congrats on your win.
Carmack Avatar
April 26, 2018 at 9:17 PM
She was fantastic too. TY for reading and commenting.
Gauthier Avatar
April 25, 2018 at 11:41 PM
A beautiful haunting love story. Congrats on your most deserving win, Rob.
Carmack Avatar
April 26, 2018 at 9:16 PM
TY Line.
Bateman Avatar
April 21, 2018 at 2:29 PM
Hello Rob, Congratulation on your win here!! This selection of yours is a truly wondrous narrative poem. Superb in every respect. I enjoyed it very much. Cheers and Best, Gary
Carmack Avatar
April 24, 2018 at 9:09 PM
Gary - thank you for reading and commenting.
Barden Avatar
April 16, 2018 at 12:42 AM
Blessings and congratulations on your well-deserved win, Rob - keep up the wonderful work, my friend - "A writer writes - always!"
Carmack Avatar
April 16, 2018 at 5:24 PM
TY Greg.
Onclaud Avatar
April 10, 2018 at 3:17 PM
you crushed this, rob... happy to see you winning, dear friend... big congrats!..huggs
Carmack Avatar
April 10, 2018 at 4:52 PM
TY Nette - hugs back to you.
Marcum Wong Avatar
April 10, 2018 at 2:41 AM
Your romantic poem gave me chills Rob. I loved this passionate piece and it would have placed much higher for me. Congratulations on your wonderful win my friend! : )
Carmack Avatar
April 10, 2018 at 4:51 PM
Maybe I can try my luck in another contest in the future and see if I can get a higher placement, but I am thankful to Viv for sponsoring the contest and inspiring this poem. TY Connie for reading and commenting.
Gentry Avatar
April 9, 2018 at 10:34 PM
Congratulations on your win with this wonderful love letter! Enjoyed the imagery.
Carmack Avatar
April 10, 2018 at 4:46 PM
TY Susan.
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April 9, 2018 at 5:55 PM
oh my gosh, one of your VERY best, Rob. for me a FAVE from you. I hope this placed very high.
Carmack Avatar
April 10, 2018 at 4:46 PM
Thanks for the FAVE friend.
Haight Avatar
April 9, 2018 at 3:14 PM
Well-written with wonderful imagery, Rob! Congratulations on your win!
Carmack Avatar
April 10, 2018 at 4:45 PM
TY Sandra.
Murray Avatar
April 9, 2018 at 3:46 AM
"bled the blue into her eyes". I fall for this type of rhyme every time. I am also partial to a Viking. Congratulations on your placement Rob.
Carmack Avatar
April 10, 2018 at 4:45 PM
TY Jean.
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April 8, 2018 at 10:08 PM
Well done, Rob, a fine write. Regards, Viv
Carmack Avatar
April 8, 2018 at 11:30 PM
TY Viv, this contest really inspired me.
Roper Avatar
April 8, 2018 at 9:36 PM
Congratulations on your win, Rob, nicely done! Hugs Eve ~`*
Carmack Avatar
April 8, 2018 at 11:30 PM
A hug and a thanks Eve.
Gauthier Avatar
April 8, 2018 at 6:45 PM
Lovely, Robe. Congrats on your win.
Carmack Avatar
April 8, 2018 at 11:30 PM
TY Line.
Allison Avatar
April 8, 2018 at 1:37 PM
Many congrats on your win Rob, I need to google some of the characters to learn and understand more of the poems:-) hugs jan xx
Carmack Avatar
April 8, 2018 at 11:29 PM
Thanks Jan, I liked this contest because it had me do some researching and learning.
Godwin Avatar
March 28, 2018 at 6:20 PM
I am sooooooo into the Vikings TV series that I couldn't help but 'fall' for your write. I thoroughly enjoyed your theme and delivery of same. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
Carmack Avatar
March 28, 2018 at 6:57 PM
TY CayCay and God bless you.
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