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Hoaxed Hydrangeas

I am your lilac moon, cocooned in cashmere wool of clouds that carol in chorus, love-sewn Searching for life beyond hieroglyphic fangs of hoaxed hydrangeas, exiled in grey moors; Today, jasmine stars taste bittersweet and each tan twilight reminds me of your scent, deadly And no inked dots align in intuitions from constellations of confusion, again; So, drink saturated misunderstandings as mist from blood-stained petals like plush smoked tears As, hope has always drawn me as a chirping flake, faced like a lonely gold-lilac luna.

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Joanna Daniel

Date: 10/17/2023 9:54:00 PM

Brilliant, Hiya, so many lovely lines, congratulations:)

Valsa George

Date: 10/17/2023 8:31:00 PM

Loved these lovely string of cinquains ! Never knew this form could be made so beautiful ! Your coinages of words with the names of flowers make a wonderful effect.... like 'hoaxed hydrangeas', 'lilac moon', 'jasmine stars' etc. You stand apart in many ways. Ink Empress and Hiya Sharma are twin stars who recently appeared in the firmament of Poetry Soup and the site is getting drowned in your exceptional glow. Beautiful young friend

Sotto Poet

Date: 10/17/2023 2:25:00 PM

Back with hearty congratulations on your contest win, Hiya

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 10/17/2023 1:34:00 PM

A beautiful multi-faceted poem posing the serenity of nature as a backdrop.

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 10/17/2023 1:34:00 PM

A beautiful multi-faceted poem posing the serenity of nature as a backdrop.

Ink Empress

Date: 10/17/2023 5:21:00 AM

This is absolutely stunning! One of your best cinquain chain! I really am in awe captivated by the way you’ve played around with words and how you’ve painted imagery in such an ethereal manner! So gorgeous! The opening truly drew me in! And i love how you’ve written “ jasmine stars taste bittersweet” wow! How deep and touching! Such a poignant and profound write.”constellation of confusion” “ lonely gold lilac luna” wow! I am truly impressed! Just impeccable! Thank you for writing. Congratulations

Paige Hind

Date: 10/16/2023 3:24:00 PM

Amazing work! I loved the part about "So, drink saturated misunderstandings as mist from blood-stained petals like plush smoked tears" beautiful!

Stephan McBride

Date: 10/16/2023 2:23:00 PM

True masterpiece, how elegant and graceful you put these poems together, thanks for sharing your amazing gift with us all: )

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/16/2023 10:22:00 AM

wow, so creative and poetic. I am noticing people doing more than one cinquain, so now i am hoping i even did it right!!

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 10/16/2023 5:58:00 AM

Lilac moon? Great imagery, very inventive. Blessings.

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 10/15/2023 5:46:00 PM

What a lovely flower of hope you are dear poetess, :)

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 10/15/2023 1:54:00 PM

Outstanding Cinquains, Hiya. Your imagery and words blended together so well leading the reader calmly to the last Cinquain...which is my favorite. I admire your artistic talent with words. You posses a beautiful voice..have a pleasant day, Sara

Sotto Poet

Date: 10/15/2023 11:03:00 AM

Dear Hiya, Your poetry is truly exceptional. Your vast vocabulary's rich and vivid imagery lends a degree of depth and beauty to each line. The opening cinquain sets the tone well, immersing the reader in your poem's emotional voyage. The way you link your thoughts throughout the poem is like building a picture in the reader's head using your well-picked words. Your brilliance shows through in this poem.

Silent One

Date: 10/15/2023 7:04:00 AM

You have done so many here, I am sure Ink will be really impressed.. Each one with wonderful imagery due to the use of your vast vocabulary... however, be careful not to put words that do not really go together like 'carol in chorus'.. although it is your poetic license and you probably wanted to use alliteration, you could have used an alternative word like collate or nocturne or used a simple words like sing... Well done though.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 10/15/2023 6:28:00 AM

I am your lilac moon, cocooned in cashmere wool of clouds that carol in chorus, love-sewn--with this beautiful beginning your linked thoughts deliver a word painting. You excel here, as always, Hiya.

Joe Dimino

Date: 10/15/2023 6:28:00 AM

"As, hope has always drawn me as a chirping flake, faced like a lonely gold-lilac luna." What an image! Wonderful writing. Enchanting. Poets...we live for love. Die for love. And rise again like the Phoenix. It is all good. I think I have destroyed many a beautiful romance (not consciously of course) just to experience new rise and lift. I am my own puppet master...severing, mending fastening new strings. Your poem got me traveling.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/15/2023 6:08:00 AM

Gold-lilac luna very different way to describe the moon. Creative beyond measure. Thank you for sharing your talent with us and for dropping by my page. Sara K