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Hitchhiker

I wondered why I’d flagged her down – She looked a mess and acted weird; She talked about the deaths she’d watched And roared with laughter as she steered. I said I didn’t want to know About the accidents she’d seen; She told me, ‘Hell, I’m having fun.’ And, ‘Get out then if I’m so mean.’ At last I said, ‘I get out here.’ - I hoped to thumb another ride - She let me out and laughed again, And told me, ‘This is where I died.’ She vanished then before my eyes. As thunder rolled and lightning flashed, I slowly walked towards my spot: The place I’d died, where I had crashed.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 9/4/2011 7:18:00 PM
Very cool poem Jack, I really like how you did this. Love Alexa
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Date: 8/29/2011 11:34:00 AM
oooooo..spooky is taking me over and this piece just added to it.. simply luv good ghost stories and u seem to be on a role luv.. impressive and scary.. ghost ride.. ooooooo...
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Date: 8/28/2011 10:32:00 PM
Wow, I see you are a master of the paranomral and your stories keep the reader enthralled. Keep up your great rhyme.
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Date: 8/28/2011 10:21:00 PM
well, just two spooks in the night you were. GREAT job, so creative. And it looks like you got up more than two today. Let me go have a look at another!
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Date: 8/28/2011 5:40:00 PM
Very, very spooky, Jack. I'd love to know if this was inspired by a book or a real ghost sighting. Awesome twist at the end! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 8/28/2011 5:31:00 PM
Wow, I'm in awe with that lat line! I was not expecting that at all! Very awesome write, you did a great job!
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Date: 8/28/2011 5:31:00 PM
Jack this reminded me of the road trips we took with my folks as children and my dad always spotted hitchhikers that only he could see :) Needless to say I really enjoyed this write of yours ;) lfde Wilma
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Date: 8/28/2011 4:19:00 PM
Wonderful done with suspense and the twist, jack
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Date: 8/28/2011 3:02:00 PM
A captivating suspenseful write jack...enjoyed reading this.
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