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Hit Me With Your Best Shot

Hit me Punch me in the face Kick me if you must I need to feel your pain I need to know Understand Where you have been For with your gentle touch I have been unaware of the depth of your pain When you kiss me bite my lip Let my blood pulsate with understanding I will scream out the words you are unable to articulate Let me push into the centre of your need Until we both find release Use your nails Dig into my back I am strong enough I will not be broken by your need Do not be afraid of black ink Or metaphorical anger Hit me Pound upon my chest Until both our hearts feel Convulse with pleasured realization No rules or limitations Digress to primal urges Find your earlier self Until you are lost Until Until You are fully spent Exhausted Consolable For I am not afraid I am willing Yes I am able To take Your worst and "your best shot" If only you are brave enough To let me absorb your pain! For Casarah's Triple Threat contest Written June 23rd. Note: this poem does not advocate violence, it is a fantasy piece.

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Faten Ishak

Date: 10/9/2015 12:18:00 PM

I really loved it , got touched by the power of love here , it is deep and challenging Thanx richard 4 sharing this Faten makram

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/7/2015 1:02:00 AM

Richard, congratulations on your Triple Threat win. Love LINDA

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/7/2015 9:04:00 AM

Thanks Linda.

Skat A

Date: 7/6/2015 8:37:00 PM

a sweet win Richard... SK

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/7/2015 9:04:00 AM

Thanks SKAT

Abdul Malik

Date: 7/6/2015 5:27:00 PM

Man, you did give your best shot...if only you would asked me to!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/7/2015 9:05:00 AM

Thanks Abdul.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/6/2015 3:00:00 PM

Just KNEW this one had to score big. CONGRATS

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/7/2015 9:05:00 AM

Thanks Andrea.

Jan Allison

Date: 7/6/2015 11:59:00 AM

great powerful write Richard congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/7/2015 9:06:00 AM

Thanks Jan.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 7/6/2015 9:02:00 AM

I knew Cas would love this piece, Richard. It's superb. Congrats....on this fine win. Hugs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/7/2015 9:07:00 AM

I'm pleased she liked it. Hugs back to you Eileen.

Casarah Nance

Date: 7/6/2015 8:25:00 AM

Well...I should have known...this immediately caught my attention, thank you for participating in my contest and for an entry that captured first place.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/7/2015 9:08:00 AM

Hi Cassarah, you made my day by choosing this piece.

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 7/4/2015 11:49:00 AM

This defimitely describes a true man who can take it all.I read it three times..I so love it..A fav : )

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/7/2015 9:09:00 AM

You are kind.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/28/2015 1:37:00 PM

It is also metaphorical and VERY well done, Richard. You are such a superb writer of free verse. I think this is the kind of poetry I like best from you. Sorry I can't take a lot more time to see other poems of my friends while I am at my in-laws. I appreciate you seeing my poetry too.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/7/2015 9:11:00 AM

Thanks Andrea, I wanted to take a different perspective and it seems to have worked.

Arthur Vaso

Date: 6/26/2015 7:55:00 PM

Great what you did with this! After reading some other comments I saw someone took you too literally on this! :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/7/2015 9:11:00 AM

Thanks my friend.

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 6/26/2015 12:22:00 PM

Awesome write, Richard...it really packs a punch! I feel the intensity of passion and pain...I'm working on the same theme, but I'm filling my waste basket with drafts...can't get it right. Best wishes in the contest. Hugs, Rhonda

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/7/2015 9:12:00 AM

Thanks Rhonda.

Afolabi Muideen

Date: 6/26/2015 4:27:00 AM

You penned this extremely beautiful, good luck in the contest...........A.M.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/26/2015 7:03:00 AM

Thanks AM.

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 6/24/2015 2:08:00 PM

That was quite some ride. The idea of taking on so much for another, how noble. Nice work, hope it does well in the comp.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/25/2015 6:44:00 AM

Thanks Scott.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 6/24/2015 12:57:00 AM

I'm sure Cas will love this. It's right up her alley. This is a very powerful write. I loved some of the lines....the one about the bite on the lip got me.....very...disturbing but easy to relate to...for me, anyway. I'm more of a...intensity is better type of person.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/24/2015 8:43:00 AM

Hi Eileen, are you still in Cypress? I hope you are having a great time!

Verlena S. Walker

Date: 6/23/2015 7:05:00 PM

Well done Rick... Good write for the contest! Verlena

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/23/2015 8:26:00 PM

Thanks Verlena.

Tim Smith

Date: 6/23/2015 6:24:00 PM

I like how you want to bear the pain for the one you love...It sounds harsh but I see true romance Richard.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/23/2015 8:27:00 PM

Thanks Tim, I have to admit it was interesting putting myself in this mindset.

Constance La France

Date: 6/23/2015 1:49:00 PM

Richard, this is so wonderful for the contest, well done 7 and thanks for visiting my poem, beneath. ..

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/23/2015 8:32:00 PM

Thanks I was trying to be original!

Kp Nunez

Date: 6/23/2015 12:01:00 PM

Whoa...a different side to your pen, Rick! Passion and lots of emotion. Blessings for the contest. I don't have an entry to many of the contests. It's lovely to just enjoy reading. :-)

Gary Bateman

Date: 6/23/2015 10:19:00 AM

A great write here Richard!! Best of Luck ins Casarah's Contest. Your imagery feeds the free verse narrative here quite well. (Glad to hear it's fantasy too!!) A "7" from me, Sir!! Best Always, Gary

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/23/2015 11:18:00 AM

Thanks Gary, I wasn't sure if this one would be a bit to risqué for the soup.