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His Old Pick-Up Truck

He begs me to come, but he's run out of luck You won't catch me dead in that beat-up old truck! It was painted blue...now the color is rust But you can't be too sure...since it's covered in dust!... The engine must idle, (about an hour is good) You can feel the vibration, around the whole neighborhood A life is at risk, if you go for a ride! The windshield is broken, and leaks rain inside It makes a weird noise, rides bumpy and rough The dashboard is littered and covered with "stuff" The seat cushion's torn, and it pokes at my rear The dog sits beside us and licks at my ear There's no place below us, for resting my feet There's a hole in the floor, O my God, there's the street!!! The windows don't close, so there's more than a breeze Wrappers from Twinkies, a Burger King box... One lonely old sneaker, and smelly old socks Half a stale donut smashed down on the floor Darn!! The dog beat me to it, and is looking for more!! The muffler is loose, you can see the sparks fly Dirty looks from the folks, who get smoke in their eyes When we drive by the neighbors, I duck my head and I hide I'm no Prima Donna....but I've still got some pride!! He loves that old truck, he calls her a gem! Make him choose between us??? ....I'd be out on a limb!!
------------------------------------------------------------------------------- For Verlena Walker's Slamming Battle Contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008




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Date: 5/11/2014 10:38:00 AM
This is so much fun, I see that you too followed the instructions. Great job, congratulations.
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Date: 5/10/2014 7:32:00 PM
LOL you know I've ridden in a truck like this and the young man was HELPING me, [don't look a gift horse in the mouth? whatever that means LOL] good on you Carrie congrad's light & love
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Date: 5/10/2014 11:01:00 AM
Well good luck, sounds like your stuck with this hard core ole driver who so loves his truck. Congrats on win Carrie.
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Date: 5/10/2014 8:11:00 AM
This is a great slam on his gem..I love it Carrie...I just hope you weren't going to eat the donut....congrats Tim
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Date: 5/10/2014 3:02:00 AM
Very impressive write Carrie ! Congrats on a merited top win !
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Date: 5/9/2014 5:56:00 PM
This truck is getting great mileage, though, isn't it? Great rhythm and rhyme, and not too rough on the slamming part. Congratulations! Cheers, Roy
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Date: 5/9/2014 2:16:00 PM
Carrie, you slam. Congratulations on placing first in my contest. Verlena
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Date: 6/20/2013 6:35:00 PM
I wouldn't ride in it either..must be a girl thing! congrats. BG
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Date: 6/20/2013 4:33:00 PM
Sounds like home to me! Got one just like it....haha...wanna go for a ride Carrie?? Just to fish in....down on the river....congratulations.. awesome!
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Date: 6/20/2013 5:58:00 AM
Sounds like my dad's fishin' truck. I can just see you bouncing up and down in this old heap...haha! Funny stuff, Carrie...and congrats!
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Date: 6/19/2013 9:11:00 PM
Its fabulous Carrie, great win....Seren
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Date: 7/20/2011 6:20:00 PM
Love it!!! Congrats. to you!
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Date: 7/16/2011 4:13:00 AM
Being a country boy I love pick up trucks. I had one like this but my wife won out and now she has a much nicer one that ...she won;t let me touch for some unknown reason ..? I'm with Andrea on this one for sure. different strokes I guess. Thanks for sharing this beaut.If I still had my old truck I'd paste it to the windshield with old bubble gum from under the seat somewhere . Enjoyed and into my favs
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Date: 7/15/2011 9:04:00 PM
gosh, I just know i saw this before, didn't I? But I don't see my comment below. anyway, A big congrats on this one. It's a very funny one that I'd put close to the top!
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Date: 7/15/2011 1:00:00 PM
We men and our choice of automobiles is a little silly isn't it. Congratulations on the win. I really enjoyed this little gem. Mike
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Date: 7/15/2011 9:00:00 AM
Still have trucks around here like that.Congrats on your win,Carrie.
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Date: 7/15/2011 7:28:00 AM
My congratulations on this win in the contest of P.D., Carrie
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Date: 7/15/2011 6:22:00 AM
Congrats on your win Carrie..enjoyed your poem.
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Date: 7/15/2011 5:16:00 AM
Congratulations Carrie on the win in P.D.'s "Funny Poem" contest. Love, Carol
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Date: 7/14/2011 10:26:00 PM
, Congratulations on your FUNNY entry! Thank you for entering your awesome poem in my contest. Also thanks for supporting my contest. Have yourself a great and wonderful night,..p.d
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Date: 7/14/2011 9:27:00 PM
Congrats Carrie on your terrific win in funny poem contest with this witty write luv..
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Date: 7/14/2011 9:26:00 PM
Great poem, thought you should have been higher on the list. Lee
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Date: 11/14/2008 8:35:00 AM
you did it here girl! this is the one to be proud of. if i hadn't ridden in one myself i wouldn't believe it but there are thousands of cars and trucks riding around like this. it beats walking. John H Loving III
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Date: 11/7/2008 9:16:00 AM
Damn!! I like that truck already. Fun write. Vince
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Date: 11/5/2008 11:54:00 PM
Very amusing Carrie it shows another side to your pen.Thanks for the email & for your very kind words on my postings.Rgds Brian
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