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His Motivation - Make Their Jaws Drop

He was drenched, his hair plastered to his head; dark eyes burned from sweat that ran salty rivulets down his red face. Inflamed, and throbbing in all his straining parts, he panted hard. She, his midnight vision, spurred him on. . . . Her skin was moistened with perfume, and her long velvet hair cascaded around his face to graze his ruddy cheeks. Her eyes of green mirrored the moonlight as he gazed down at her. Then she softly moaned; he focused on this vision and revived. . . . His weak and flagging body suddenly became fully upright, and as he gave himself one final thrust forward, he propelled himself past one opponent and then the next till at last he broke through the ribbon at record speed. Victory! At last he'd won the gold!

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Date: 4/1/2013 2:46:00 PM
Congrat on this winner, wow i do really love this...
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Date: 11/6/2011 9:03:00 AM
when everything else fails, often a woman works..nice write, Andea
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Date: 11/5/2011 10:50:00 PM
andrea;-) CONGRATULATIONS, ON YOUR WIN~ Have a wonderful weekend, GOD BLESS,..p.d.
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Date: 11/3/2011 6:25:00 PM
Imagine something unpleasant as something pleasant, and it's easier to push on. Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 11/2/2011 10:28:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Frank's "Erotica" contest Andrea. Love, Carol
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Date: 11/2/2011 10:13:00 AM
super congrats Andrea on another wonderful win with this erotica entry luv.. awesome lines..
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Date: 11/2/2011 7:51:00 AM
hey Andrea congrats on a your great win, loved it...David
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Date: 10/26/2011 3:49:00 PM
Golden ribbons and purple hearts. Some lose the race before it starts. A scent from heaven befalls his gate. And reminds him it is not too late. With one last hope and one last prayer. He cast's dispursions in the air. And finds his true love, long at last. When he looked in the future, not in the past.
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Date: 10/26/2011 6:54:00 AM
Dear Andrea Dietrich, this is cleverly and grandly composed. well done.
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Date: 10/25/2011 4:51:00 PM
wow Andrea.. a great and cleverly crafted contest entry ..Frank will luv it as I do.. emotional visuals of erotica my friend.. good luck.. that cascading hair in his face did it for me.. and I was thinking of cutting mine a bit but Ron had a fit..so long it stays...now I understand..haha..
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Date: 10/25/2011 2:08:00 PM
We all like to win - at least once in a while .....George
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Date: 10/25/2011 11:20:00 AM
Which one the dream - that is the question. I imagine a track win could cause an orgasm too. You are so clever, Andrea. Oh YOU! Love, daver
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Date: 10/25/2011 11:13:00 AM
hheheh! For a minute there i thought you where talking about my x...hahahha until you said GOLD.... and WON.... and Victory... but, of course he is no runner,, just a bummer... anyways.. Stopping by to say hi again~Thank you for sharing your wonderful poem,, Take care,..P.D.
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Date: 10/25/2011 10:12:00 AM
Oooooh...cleverly done. I'm still smiling at the last four lines. Nice twist, Andrea! Good luck with this. xoxo Robert.
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Date: 10/25/2011 8:54:00 AM
Very good one that has a surprise ending..Enjoyed reading this morn..Good luck in the contest..Thanks for the kind review of my work..Your erotica reads like a winner..Sara
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Date: 10/25/2011 7:50:00 AM
All you my dear friend... Such a good entry.. and yes a winnere already.... luv Michael
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Date: 10/25/2011 7:47:00 AM
Excellent , as ever , as only you can , CD . Best of luck in the contest , and like our hero , I can see this on the winners podium .
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Date: 10/25/2011 7:29:00 AM
LOL, you had me going there! A sure winner. Have you thought of submitting it to Stretched anthology? They love that sort of thing. I'll send you a link if you're interested. Many congrats on your wins too, my friend : )
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Date: 10/25/2011 6:12:00 AM
An excellent entry for this contest my friend. Loved the use of words. Really good imagery. Nicely done indeed. Should be a first place winner for sure. God Bless, JB
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Date: 10/25/2011 12:19:00 AM
Beautifully depicted scene of love with nice metaphorical use of words Andrea.Best wishes.Perhaps I will be unable to come up with something for this contest.
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Date: 10/24/2011 7:45:00 PM
The first couple of lines I thought ' Cardboard Man' Then the imagery took over and erotic it was. then the last lines... well, they do say the love of a good woman will spur a man to great heights.... excellent work Andrea...luv Margaret
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Date: 10/24/2011 2:45:00 PM
Delightful write. Never thought running erotic, but I do pick up the parallels in your poem; one can fantasise anywhere. It's fascinating men and women view erotica so differently.
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Date: 10/24/2011 1:55:00 PM
A wonderful write on this poem Andrea and you had me wondering tell the last stanza. Good luck on the contest. soup mail phyl
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