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I pared down the new poem I wrote a few days ago to fit this in the 136 words contest.

Longer version is titled TODAY.

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His Gaze -Edited

Today I caught a young student staring at me.
This young man, who seldom comes to class,
 greets me, nonetheless, with a beaming smile
the days he does show up!
This adventurer (who once described how 
he had driven backroads of Alaska all by himself
to enjoy its raw beauty) is an unassuming, attractive man.
 
When I noticed him watching me,
he did not too quickly withdraw his gaze
as I would have expected someone to do.
His dreamy look held a soft touch of wistfulness.
It both flattered and puzzled me,
for I must be at least thirty-five years his senior.

When he left my classroom,
I was left to conjure
 my words for this poem.
In a different time and place 
I probably would have followed up
 on what that gaze
had been about!


Aug. 24, 2019
for John Lawless' One Hundred And Thirty Six Words Poetry Contest Poetry Number of words  checked by Wordcounter.net
Copyright © | Year Posted 2019


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Date: 11/22/2019 6:22:00 PM
He wouldn't be the first to fall in love with his teach, and who could blame him. I got nothing new on so please don't waste your time looking, Take care, Richard
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Date: 9/18/2019 5:56:00 AM
He wants something, possibly a grade undeserved from the standpoint of effort. Or maybe he was in a daze and not really looking at you at all, being just in his line of vision. Lovely piece, amazing what a simple look engendered from your pen, Andrea.
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Date: 9/14/2019 7:35:00 AM
He may yet give you a chance to find out! A winning poem and story. Congrats
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Date: 9/11/2019 8:30:00 AM
Yes, no telling what he was thinking. Enjoyed reading your winning work. I had a student once to give me an engagement ring but alas he was only 8 years old. I told him that one day he was going to meet a special young lady who would be perfect for him and he would live a very happy life with her. I wonder sometimes if that did happen? Congrats on your winning work. Sara
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Date: 9/10/2019 5:25:00 PM
This is great Andrea. Congrats on your win.
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Date: 9/9/2019 5:46:00 PM
Oh, Andrea, the subtle hint of youth tempting age with a glance. A boost to the ego and a shock to the psyche. Thanks for participating in the contest.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/9/2019 5:49:00 PM
oh my gosh, I placed!! Thanks so much. You totally got my meaning.
Date: 9/3/2019 11:18:00 PM
Andrea, what is beautiful about this poem, is that you bare a little bit of soul, and a little bit of heart! Meru
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Date: 8/28/2019 9:56:00 AM
I like this so much... It paints such a wonderful picture. Thank you so much.
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Date: 8/25/2019 9:37:00 PM
This is perfect as is though I'm late and you've already changed it. I haven't even read about the contest so I can't speak to that element in the poem. Sorry I'm tardy. Soup mail. Love, CayCay
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Date: 8/25/2019 2:30:00 PM
Very, very clever. G.L. in the contest, Andrea.
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Date: 8/25/2019 2:14:00 PM
Aww this is so sweet andrea i am sure you wwre flattered ! Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 8/25/2019 7:04:00 AM
Ah, this rings all kinds of bells in my head as I read the first version. Paring down is difficult, and yet, you have done it with insane ease!
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Date: 8/25/2019 2:36:00 AM
Andrea, You've got to win a little, lose a little, yes, and always have the blues a little. That's the story of, that's the glory of love. (Billy Hill) -Richard
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Date: 8/25/2019 2:18:00 AM
This is so sweet Andrea. Age doesn't matter to some and in fact they prefer the age difference. I love the romantic vibes in this piece. I bet John will too. xxoo
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Date: 8/24/2019 10:42:00 PM
G'day Andrea … perhaps a secret admirer who deleted the secret to gain your attention. Nice little tale Andrea - thank you - Lindsay
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Date: 8/24/2019 7:50:00 PM
oh how many young men have had crushes on their teachers through the history of time....cute poem... good luck in the contest :) hugs
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