Hip-Notic

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What movement, what visual rhyme and grace ... I have watched the old willow on my grand-father's farm Sway in a summer breeze, sweeping the grasses with a soft movement As sublime as the bow of a master cellist ... I have rested in a hammock in the afternoon breath of the Caribbean, Scents carried from the African plains to mix with sugar cane and brine, Rocking me gently off to slumber in a flawless to-and-fro ... I have been mesmerized by the perfect sweep of the pendulum On my parents' grandfather's clock, the rhythmic back-and-forth of a child On a swing, the tick-tock of a music metronome ... The sweet up-and-down of a rolling ocean tide, the swooping flight of a Pileated Woodpecker, the slow-falling drift of a winter snowflake, and the Proud waving of my country's distinctive flag in the wind ... But never in my many years on this Earth, have I beheld anything that Compares with the flawless, hypnotizing, provocative, heat-generating, Rhythmic dynamism and undulation ... of your voluptuous hips. ~ 1st Place ~ in the "Swagger" Poetry Contest, Line Gauthier, Judge & Sponsor.

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Gershon Wolf

Date: 9/7/2019 10:02:00 PM

A real hip write, Gregory. Congratulations on your first place finish in Line's contest. Best wishes, Gershon

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 9/25/2019 2:57:00 AM

Ha - thank you my friend - I'm pleased you enjoyed this swinging write! Blessings, Sir Wolf! :o)

Alexis Y.

Date: 9/7/2019 7:17:00 AM

Wow! Gregory, You nailed the challenge with this" hypnotic" write. Congratulations on your 1st place win. Your top placement was well deserved. Have a great weekend my friend:-) Alexis

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 9/25/2019 2:56:00 AM

Thank you so very much, Alexis, I'm pleased you enjoyed my poem - blessings to you, Dear Poet! :o) <3

Jeanne Mcgee

Date: 9/7/2019 7:17:00 AM

Very hip-notic rhythm to your poem too Greg. Congrats on your win.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 9/25/2019 2:55:00 AM

Many kimd thanks to you, Jeanne - blessings, my friend! :o) <3

John Hamilton

Date: 7/27/2017 10:45:00 PM

Yes very hip-notic Greg, always an adventure reading you.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/28/2017 9:11:00 PM

Thank you so much, my Good Friend!

Darren White

Date: 7/27/2017 2:46:00 AM

what IS hypnotizing, is the swinging enjambments between each tercet :) Works like a charm my friend. Wonderful hips, I enjoyed this.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/27/2017 9:56:00 PM

LOL - thanks for making note of that, my friend ... I call it a total disregard for structured punctuation and form rules, but yours is much classier, (and much more poetic, ha!). Very pleased you enjoyed this one ... you must admit, women MOVE like nothing else, and I find it heavenly! ;-)