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Hindsight Is a Wonderful Thing

when I married Mike
I thought that our marriage would last forever
but in retrospect
I should have listened
to my dear old pa
as he walked me down the aisle…
pa said I could put the brakes on the wedding
but I was young and in love

Mike simply
adored my sleek curves
and shapely body
he'd get my motor running
but soon the polish
wore off our relationship
and he began working late
at the car showroom
later, much later
I discovered his ‘work’ was taking place on the back seat of a Buick

I wish that pa had warned me
that one day
my used car salesman husband
would 'trade me in' for a much younger model!


FICTIONAL POEM

Suzette Prime Poetry Contest

Sponsored by Emile Pinet

01/29/21

Copyright © Jan Allison | Year Posted 2021

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Christopher Flaherty Date: 2/7/2021 2:12:00 PM Absolutely harrowing wonderful piece Jan. May i say one of your best. You may do funny better than most Jan but you also have a seriously deeply touching soft considerate side as well. Love hugs and blessing Login to Reply

Unseeking Seeker Date: 2/4/2021 6:25:00 PM Beautifully penned story, prevalent world over. Congrats on your win! Login to Reply

David Mohn Date: 2/4/2021 4:19:00 PM cleverly written Jan...I'm glad it's fiction. Congratulations :) Login to Reply

Ken Allan Dronsfield Date: 2/4/2021 9:26:00 AM Hello Jan! Congratulations on your finish in the contest. An enjoyable read my friend. :-) A lot of 'truth' in that 'fictional' poem!! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 2/4/2021 3:06:00 PM Fictional for me but sad reality for others:-( hugs jan xx

Emile Pinet Date: 2/4/2021 8:12:00 AM Congratulations Jan! Your fun poem earned a distinguished place in my contest. I was very strict, but your poem rose in the ranks and made the list. Very well done my friend, Emile. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 2/4/2021 3:06:00 PM Thanks so much Emile, i am delighted to be on your winners list:-) hugs Jan xx

Carolyn Devonshire Date: 1/30/2021 10:45:00 AM Oooh, how awful that a man would "trade in" his wife for a younger model. Physical attraction often wanes, but young people often don't realize there is a far deeper connection that binds you to a mate for life. Compelling poem! Best for a win in Emile's contest. Hugs, Carolyn Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/30/2021 4:30:00 PM oh these things happen and sadly all too often of course it applies to both males and females:-( hugs jan xx

Rico Leffanta Date: 1/29/2021 10:41:00 AM No much space in the back seat of a 1940s Buick, but people made dew! Good luck in the contest! Aloha! Rico Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/30/2021 4:29:00 PM lol i just chose an old fashioned car lol:-) hugs jan xx

Jennifer Proxenos Date: 1/29/2021 6:47:00 AM A great story - why is it that husbands always seem to let wives down, women too lately, the numbers for women being disloyal are increasing. You write this poem with such conviction, (I know how close you are to your husband) but I'm pleased you wrote Fictional at the bottom! Hugs and blessings, Jennifer. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/29/2021 7:45:00 AM Yeah sure is fiction for me but sad reality for other couples and yes infidelities can happen with either of the partners it just suited my poem to have him as a used car salesman lol:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 1/29/2021 5:59:00 AM - Forget this Mike ... the whole town knows what he's doing ... a great poem, Jan :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - Have a lovely weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/29/2021 6:15:00 AM thanks sweet lady have a lovely weekend too:-) hugs jan xx

Alexis Y. Date: 1/29/2021 12:45:00 AM Hi Jan, This is a good entry for the contest. The younger “model” is going to get a rude awakening. Ole Mike is going to trade her in to. Fiction or not, you penned a good write. Best wishes in the contest:-) Alexis Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/29/2021 6:15:00 AM In part its based with someone I worked with her hubby certainly had an eye for the ladies:-( hugs Jan xx

Victor Buhagiar Date: 1/28/2021 11:08:00 PM A delightful poem despite the sad subject. Hope all is well with you. ~~ Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/29/2021 6:14:00 AM Thanks Victor, all being well we will be out of lockdown on Monday and I hope to be able to finally visit mum, but anticipate the visit will be supervised for a few weeks:-) hugs Jan xx

Harry Horsman Date: 1/28/2021 10:11:00 PM There is a message and a warning here Jan. Great poetry, love this form and you write it so well Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/29/2021 6:13:00 AM Thanks harry not sure if I've got it correct but it was fun to write:-) hugs jan xx

Gershon Wolf Date: 1/28/2021 7:30:00 PM Well, look at it this way, 'Fictional Jan:' Mike got 'top-dollar-value' for you on the trade-in. You were still a classy chassy (slang for chassis). lol G.L. in ye olde contest, my friend. Smiles, Gershon Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/29/2021 6:13:00 AM I had fun with the links to the cars lol:-) hugs jan xx

Kim Rodrigues Date: 1/28/2021 7:28:00 PM Warnings only tell us what we should have known but were too young and in love or lust to know. Some do indeed forget the beauty that crowned them king. Well done. Glad it’s fiction and I’m happily married. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/29/2021 6:12:00 AM Thanks Kim:-) hugs jan xx

Robert Pettit Date: 1/28/2021 5:07:00 PM Good luck to you in the contest with this fine entry. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/28/2021 5:09:00 PM Thanks Robert, I have no idea if I have got the form correct I hope the final stanza is interpreted as a philosophical statement, I had such fun writing the poem and form and hope Emile likes my first attempt at a Suzette prime:-) hugs jan xx