Himalayan Sunset

The young men sat, planted under the overhang
like the pansies and geraniums that surrounded them in boxes,
as the rain pelted the terra-cotta terrace.

The mountain air was sharp with the taste of lightening.
Having bid farewell to the arched shard of a rainbow across the valley,
they sat tensely watching the celestial bombardment of Katmandu.

The lightening stoked the day’s heat, 
thickening the early evening sky like the yogurt they’d eaten for lunch.
A home-made rice wine poured freely over their tongues
from an innocent looking water bottle.
Their eyes turned garnet with the harshness of it. 

The bottle sat with its tattered label, upon the arm of the white chair.
The wine within tasted faintly of the gasoline,
yet, they reveled in it, and the freedom from deep seeded societal traits,
it freed them from.

Overhead, the sky was draped in a bridal veil of stars;
as I emerged from the room to sit beside them.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2008

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Peranteau Avatar
September 28, 2023 at 7:30 PM
yes dear poet, i do feel the vivid uv your indulge....i have nothing more than to declare..."you were born the artist", reading you back a spell, yes i do declare ;)....much love, james
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March 7, 2013 at 3:52 PM
Dear Light and LOVE, Deborah,I see I commented on this POEM four years ago when I was green I still say a Hearty Congratulations on this Vivid MasterPiece being Featured now I see the silent Lighting lighting up evening sky I see the tiny piece of Rainbow from the corner of my eye YOUR Crown "a bridal veil of stars" as YOU "emerged-to sit beside" me. I know YOU "were not Flirting" in YOUR Soup Mail as I WAS(n't) flirting in mine.I LOVE YOU ALWAYS and FOREVER YOUR Eternal Liege...Harry
Goff Avatar
September 14, 2009 at 2:19 PM
in the high-reaches...one finds the power of negative ions filling your soul with electrical energy....jimmy
Golden Avatar
April 4, 2009 at 10:13 PM
Superbly creative and imaginative writing here. Poem has presence and full of wonder. I like the color and tone of this gorgeous work of art. The imagery is truly breath taking and very uplifting to the spirit. Your poem engages mind, body and soul. keep telling the truth. Well done!
Jordan Avatar
April 4, 2009 at 10:13 PM
Deborah - Congratulations on having your poetry featured this week – God Bless, MJ
Mckenzie Avatar
April 2, 2009 at 8:36 PM
Wonderful trip! Congratulations on your featured poem! Laura :)
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April 1, 2009 at 9:14 AM
Your travels make for great poetry. Congratulations on "Himalayan Sunset" being featured. Vince
Esquire Avatar
March 31, 2009 at 1:18 PM
Dear Light & LOVE Deborah,Congratulations on YOUR POEM"Himalayan Sunset" being Featured this week another one of YOUR many Great Writes ALWAYS...HG
Townsend Avatar
March 30, 2009 at 10:20 PM
So much beautiful imagery graces the lines of this write. I love it and can picture the scene so clearly. You always put the reader in your work as your words draw them like a magnet and hold them captive in the beauty of it all. Congratulations on being featured it is well deserved. Smiles from Lolita
Winter Avatar
March 30, 2009 at 5:18 PM
Such incredible, vivid imagery. Feel like I am there. Congrats Debbie on your amazing poetry being featured this week. Love, Shar
Guzzi Avatar
March 30, 2009 at 2:34 PM
Now now I see a MISTAKE!!! I forgot the "an" in front of waterbottle you should have nagged me ;) ...me
Rider Avatar
March 30, 2009 at 11:38 AM
Great poem.I can feel and smell the rain! Congratulations on being featured this week too! ~Trudy~
Strand Avatar
March 29, 2009 at 11:52 PM
Congrats on your feature this week Debbie.Rgds Brian
Gass Avatar
February 14, 2009 at 8:08 AM
This is really beautiful Debbie. The imagery is so vivid. Real. What a beautiful place to be! You are spoiing me! thank you for all your encouragement! Love ya lots, Robin
Foulk Avatar
September 2, 2008 at 8:52 PM
a very beautiful, warm and colorful piece of great poetry
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