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I rewrote High School Dance in a different form.What form is it? The story changes a bit to fit the form. It may not be correct but I'm trying.

Amelia wanted to go to the annual dance but she just might not get the chance Amelia was a very nice unattractive young witch her best friend was a young warlock named Mitch It's been over a year since Mitch moved and she was the only one that disapproved He wouldn't want her to be stuck yesteryear she had to leave real soon and that's clear Amelia wanted to cast spell and alter her looks her grandmother gave her several old spell books As fast as the thought came it went and she must get ready for the big event Even though there were no suitors in sight she will ride her broom swiftly this night When she got there she started to dance the young warlock behind her was in a trance The young warlock nervously asked her for a twirl She said yes and they started to whirl they've been dancing together for years and years As man and wife and Amelia cries happy tears

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Date: 12/28/2016 6:20:00 AM
Reread this one, Alexis. I never read the first rendition until today. So comparing the two, this one is more expressive, more polished. It's still a wonderful poem on it's own right. It is simply amazing what a little tweak here and there can do to alter the emotional depth and expressive complexity of a poem. Just the editor in me talking ... upon second review, this poem is still a winner. Love and joy to you this holiday season.
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Date: 11/11/2016 2:16:00 PM
Aw, such a sweet poem, Alexis. I loved the ending naturally. Very delightful write. And creative too. Good job. Love and blessings to you.
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Date: 10/12/2016 12:02:00 AM
casting a magical spell through your fine story, alexis... really fine!..huggs
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