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I rewrote High School Dance in a different form.What form is it? The story changes a bit to fit the form. It may not be correct but I'm trying.

High School Dance

Amelia wanted to go to the annual dance
  but she just might not get the chance
Amelia was a very nice unattractive  young witch
her best friend was a young warlock named Mitch

It's been over a year since Mitch moved
and she was the only one that disapproved
He wouldn't want her to be stuck yesteryear
she had to leave real soon and that's clear

Amelia wanted to cast spell and alter her looks 
her grandmother gave her several old spell books
              As fast as the thought came it went
      and she must get ready for the big event
 
Even though there were no suitors in sight
she will ride her broom swiftly  this night
When she got there she started to dance
the young warlock behind her was in a trance

The young warlock  nervously asked her for a twirl 
         She said yes and they started to whirl
they've been dancing together for years and years
    As man and wife and Amelia cries happy tears
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Robinson Jr. Avatar
December 28, 2016 at 6:20 AM
Reread this one, Alexis. I never read the first rendition until today. So comparing the two, this one is more expressive, more polished. It's still a wonderful poem on it's own right. It is simply amazing what a little tweak here and there can do to alter the emotional depth and expressive complexity of a poem. Just the editor in me talking ... upon second review, this poem is still a winner. Love and joy to you this holiday season.
Robinson Jr. Avatar
November 11, 2016 at 2:16 PM
Aw, such a sweet poem, Alexis. I loved the ending naturally. Very delightful write. And creative too. Good job. Love and blessings to you.
Onclaud Avatar
October 12, 2016 at 12:02 AM
casting a magical spell through your fine story, alexis... really fine!..huggs
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