Hidden Bloom Unraveling

Written: August 19, 2025 for contest sponsored by John Anderson, *********** through the slack of spring where orchids shivered, we met— your hand brushed my sleeve and the wind forgot its name just to listen to our hush I kept you folded within a dusk-colored thought— years passed like soft rain and still, I never told them how you lit my shadowed rooms I speak your name, now and the sky does not shudder only the sparrows pause mid-flight, as if they knew what I had buried in bloom
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Godwin Avatar
September 1, 2025 at 11:45 AM
I fell in love with your imagery in this poem, not just infatuation. Exquisite. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
Messina Avatar
September 1, 2025 at 4:23 AM
Awesome poetry, Lasaad. " And the wind forgot its name" Great line! Congratulations on your winning placement! Charlie
Miller Avatar
September 1, 2025 at 12:42 AM
Elegant, romantic, beautiful, congratulations
Anderson Avatar
August 31, 2025 at 7:24 PM
Congratulations for your Fourth place in my Tanka Triptych Contest. You did an excellent job with the strict format rules. I really enjoyed reading your poem and hope you may consider using this and similar Tanka String format poems in the future. Thanks again for your entry - Very Well Done. Cheers PS you may want to remove the -center- word at the bottom
Fleming Avatar
August 20, 2025 at 8:13 AM
Absolute genius!! Fantastic Tankas - fantastic poetry!! :) john
George Avatar
August 20, 2025 at 2:45 AM
"I kept you folded within a dusk-colored thought— years passed like soft rain and still, I never told them how you lit my shadowed rooms"---- The tanka trio stays so well-knit and beautifully crafted. But of the three, the middle one I love so much. A treasure you kept folded in your hand for long, lighting your shadowed rooms, invoking a kind of nostalgic longing in you.Great entry for the contest. All the best, dear friend.
Buehler Avatar
August 19, 2025 at 9:49 PM
I loved reading this romantic, heartfelt poem, my friend. The imagery is wonderful! :)
Hind Avatar
August 19, 2025 at 5:49 PM
A marvel of a poem, truly- I love that last stanza
Godwin Avatar
August 19, 2025 at 5:08 PM
Chills, poetry chills, your poem made me high, and I love poetry highs. People pay to feel the way your poem just turned me. Absolutely splendid. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
Narain Avatar
August 19, 2025 at 10:02 AM
A beautiful poem with sad feelings. Great poem.
Etgen-Baker Avatar
August 19, 2025 at 7:47 AM
elegant imagery, dear Sotto! I love the subtly of the romance entwined within your lines. Exquisite and breathtaking. hugs from Texas, Sara
Rodrigues Avatar
August 19, 2025 at 7:31 AM
your hand brushed my sleeve and the wind forgot its name…also love the orchids :)
Greenhough Avatar
August 19, 2025 at 6:01 AM
This is an amazing poem. I enjoyed the story in three parts. Good luck with the contest.
Andresen Avatar
August 19, 2025 at 5:27 AM
- So sad but still so tender and beautiful, Las - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs
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