Valsa George Poet Rhyme

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March- 1- 2024

The Rest of the Story Contest

Sponsor- Miranda Hawley

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Hickory Dickory Dock

Hickory Dickory Dock
The captain ran up the deck,
When the storm rocked the ship.
The sailors swayed losing grip.
Hickory Dickory Dock

Hickory Dickory Dock
With no one to direct, the ship hit a rock
Into deep waters, it started to sink.
All got drowned before they could wink.
Hickory Dickory Dock

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Tonye George March 4, 2024 at 7:03 PM I keep wondering, do they not know how to swim? I hate it when people drown. Anyway, the sea doesn't care about anyone's skills. Her mouth is too enormous, and so is her taste. Success of the contest dear Valsa

Sara Kendrick March 3, 2024 at 6:02 AM Whoa!! Sad one. The captain and the pilot definitely need to have it altogether. Reads like a good contender for the contest. Thanks for sharing it and for dropping by my page. Soupmail. Sara K

Kim Rodrigues March 2, 2024 at 12:57 PM ooh hickory dickory dock turned dark! Apparently the lighthouse was not turned on! Great!

Silent One March 2, 2024 at 7:27 AM You did a great addition to this fable.. It flows just like the original.. Nicely done Valsa.. All the best in the contest..

Joseph P. DiMino March 2, 2024 at 2:32 AM Great imagery, Valsa! Delightful read. Though I hate to smile at tragedy, could not help myself here. Best of luck in contest.

Bill Baker March 1, 2024 at 5:25 PM Good luck in the contest Valsa, this is a good entry in my opinion. A fun read and creative way to continue the story. Smiles ~ Blessings Bill

Heidi Sands March 1, 2024 at 12:50 PM Well written for the contest Valsa ! :)

Heidi Sands March 1, 2024 at 12:50 PM Well written for the contest Valsa ! :)

Jay Narain March 1, 2024 at 11:34 AM Sad and dark Nursery rhyme. Though a brilliant composition.

Sotto Poet March 1, 2024 at 10:31 AM Dear Valsa. your poem is a stunning work of art, filled with creativity and emotion, despite its melancholic ending. The vivid imagery of "the captain racing across the deck as the ship was tossed by the storm" evokes a sense of worry but also tranquility.

Tom Cunningham March 1, 2024 at 5:01 AM Not a happy ending lol. Good luck in the contest Valsa. Hope you're keeping well. Tom

Dr. Padmashree R P February 29, 2024 at 11:53 PM Wow. Amazing poem. Very creative.