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Hibiscus Haven Premiere Contest Winner

I want to swim in the golden rivers of your heavenly haven, wading through every swirl and twirl flowing in splendiferous streams. Taste of your warmth courses down ruffles within my ribs, pulsating your name in assonant motions. In your moonlit eyes I’ve found the lost poem, missing from my once hollow heart. You are the metaphorical master, with a plethora of poetic keys, deciphering hieroglyphics syllables, ceaselessly obscuring vehement vanity, endured through violent torrents of torment. In your arms I found a euphonious sanctuary, calming stormy edges from a malignant abyss, there I saw grey on silvery nights, until you breathed poetry into my fingertips. Words began to bloom amongst deep ruby wine dahlias, where seasons never wilt internal imagination. I still remember the night we embraced a new year, as fireworks lit up the highest mountains between us. Revealing incandescent morning stars, with your infectious smile, I knew then, you were the acrylic home I was sketching on sunflower panoramas. In your voice I've already seen spring, sowing seeds of hibiscus promises, hydrating delicate dreams— drifting with withering ferns and flowers, imprinted from roots of fate, ascending mauve memories to cloud nine, where clipped feathers attain nirvana, to love until the sun burns into ashes.

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Date: 12/5/2023 12:49:00 PM
To love until sun burns into ashes, to love until eternity.. lovely lovely
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Date: 12/3/2023 8:39:00 PM
Wow.... wonderful ! Sorry, I miss many of the gems on poetry soup because of my encumbrances. This is perhaps one of your best poems which has no parallels or comparison in its intimate sentiments of love and romance. Every line presents a beautiful image and I can't pick a single one as my favorite. It is heaven to be thus endowed with a muse to inspire you. In all trials of life, looking at the poems you have so far written, you can derive a lot of joy and satisfaction. Once again let me repeat....you are exceptionally gifted !"In your voice I've already seen spring, sowing seeds of hibiscus promises, hydrating delicate dreams—" Live in the beauty of those dreams. Congratulations on your well deserved trophy. Into my FAVE
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Karen Jones
Date: 12/4/2023 5:24:00 AM
Very well said Valsa and I agree that she is uniquely talented!
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Ink Empress
Date: 12/3/2023 9:10:00 PM
Dear valsa you have a heart of gold, truly how kind are you! Im so grateful always that you take time to appreciate me despite the struggles with health etc. thank you so much and I personally love your poem more than mine for this contest, but im so grateful for your fave too thank you again so very much
Date: 12/3/2023 2:48:00 PM
Back with hearty congratulations on your contest trophy win. Best wishes always
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Ink Empress
Date: 12/3/2023 7:49:00 PM
Thank you so veryy much dear Sotto
Date: 12/3/2023 1:46:00 PM
Congrats on your first place win! Thank you for your beautiful entry in my LOVE JONES contest!
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Ink Empress
Date: 12/3/2023 7:49:00 PM
thank you so very much dear Karen, i did not expect to win at all, its such a beautiful surprise for which i truly am grateful for. I appreciate you and your son, for placing me. Please let him know I am grateful too. Sending you light today and always
Date: 12/2/2023 12:44:00 PM
Beautiful accomplishment, Ink Empress. My grannies know 'smiles'. I am truly entranced by how it glides the eyes then holds at stationary points, like 'smiles' whereupon my grannies came into focus as they water the hibiscus' by the house windows calling us inside to close them. Hibiscus flower bushes hug Hawaiian homes as it acts like a barrier to keep bees out. I'm not sure if this is for any contest, but if anything, it's a winning statement, my friend. Aloha, William
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Ink Empress
Date: 12/3/2023 9:11:00 PM
Ah we have many hibiscus too here in the maldives, it is a common island flower maybe , thank you for sharing your experience and the story behind hibiscus there so inspiring to read. I appreciate your kind support always
Date: 12/1/2023 8:26:00 PM
This is so perfect and amazing. There are so many lines that I love..."ceaselessly obscuring vehement vanity, endured through violent torrents of torment"...to love until the sun burns into ashes" so deep. A pleasure, sending you light!
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Ink Empress
Date: 12/3/2023 9:20:00 PM
Thank you so very much for your detailed and heartfelt feedback im always grateful for your kind and sincere support
Date: 12/1/2023 3:30:00 AM
IE, the title drew me in, and the passionate work exploded before me. Thanks for sharing your thoughts about your love in Hibiscus paradise. Sara K
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Ink Empress
Date: 12/3/2023 9:21:00 PM
Thank you so very much for your kind and uplifting feedback, truly grateful always
Date: 11/30/2023 11:14:00 PM
you have so much talent, for images, and assonances ?, enjoyed my reading, thanks poet
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Ink Empress
Date: 12/3/2023 9:21:00 PM
Thank you so very much i appreciate your support always
Date: 11/30/2023 5:50:00 PM
Love this one. I read it aloud. Delicious on the tongue.
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Ink Empress
Date: 12/3/2023 9:21:00 PM
Thank you so very much always for your kind and generous support, grateful
Date: 11/30/2023 4:34:00 PM
dearest Ink--this is such a soft, romantic poem...and so engaging. I love hibiscus promises--what a descriptive image. As a matter of fact, your poem is chocked full of eloquent images--you're so skilled with that ability that I stay in awe of you. This poem captured my romantic heart. I have to fave this one...it spoke to me. Hope you have/had a splendid Thursday, hugs, Sara
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Ink Empress
Date: 12/3/2023 9:22:00 PM
Ah thank you so very much always for your unwavering support, im always grateful and honored to hear from you. Your words touch my soul. Appreciate you dear sara
Date: 11/30/2023 12:51:00 PM
I saw grey on silvery nights, wow what a line, and hats off for using the word plethora, this write is an excellent one IE
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Ink Empress
Date: 12/3/2023 9:23:00 PM
Thank you so very much for reading and for leaving such a thoughtful comment grateful always
Date: 11/30/2023 12:27:00 PM
Simply beautiful, Ink. I might be able to write funny, but I don't think I can write as lovely and as romantic as this. If this is for the contest...best wishes :) Charlie
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Ink Empress
Date: 12/3/2023 9:24:00 PM
Dear charles i appreciate your support truly, thank you for saying that, i am grateful for your best wishes too
Date: 11/30/2023 12:21:00 PM
Oh IE what a magical and romantic poem! “Sowing seeds of hibiscus promises” l just love that….poetically perfect!! Another IE beauty! Debx
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Ink Empress
Date: 12/3/2023 9:24:00 PM
Dear debx im so happy to hear from you always and thank you so much for pointing out your fave line too. I appreciate you truly
Date: 11/30/2023 9:44:00 AM
Oh to love like that and not die from it, sigh. Winning material, beautiful Ink, :)
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Ink Empress
Date: 12/3/2023 9:25:00 PM
Ah sweet rose thank you so very much for being so very kind and so supportive i appreciate your kindness always
Date: 11/30/2023 7:02:00 AM
Dear Ink, this is a genuinely lovely example of romance expressed via your incredible verse. This poetic masterpiece captures the essence of your great passion for a lover from the beginning of its conception through to its conclusion. Your work is adorned with a multitude of top-notch diction one of which is its final stanza, which captures the mind with its incredible imagery. Best wishes always
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Ink Empress
Date: 12/3/2023 9:26:00 PM
Dear Sotto thank you so very much for your kindness and for always being so supportive, im grateful for your unwavering support, appreciate your best wishes too
Date: 11/30/2023 6:41:00 AM
They say love is like a garden. I was amazed at how flowers brought a sense of life and growth to romance in this poem. Deep thoughts revealed an unyielding soul.
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Ink Empress
Date: 12/3/2023 9:27:00 PM
Thank you so very much hilda i am so grateful for your generosity and kindness always, truly . Appreciate your visits
Date: 11/30/2023 6:02:00 AM
That must be some voice that seems to have captivated you... a beautiful romantic poem from start to finish showing your infatuation for a lover... so many great verses here including the last stanza with has lovely imagery.. Why did you decide to choose Hibiscus as a flower? Not a dahlia or a rose or a lotus?
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Silent One
Date: 11/30/2023 7:00:00 AM
How sweet.. Your beloved is very lucky.
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Ink Empress
Date: 11/30/2023 6:23:00 AM
Well theres also dahlias in the poem if you read lolol youll see, hibiscus because they resemble love and passion, but also because i gave my beloved a hibiscus plant… once. Although hibiscus isnt my fave flower. It has some meanings. :D yea his voice is lovely but somedays can be a bit annoying especially when I’m pmsing. .. haha
Date: 11/30/2023 5:38:00 AM
So beautifully romantic poem, my friend. --as fireworks lit up the highest mountains between us. Revealing incandescent morning stars, with your infectious smile--drifting with withering ferns and flowers, imprinted from roots of fate, ascending mauve memories to cloud nine--Much enjoyed the voice of your poem, Ink. Love exudes throughout--a FAVE for me.
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Ink Empress
Date: 12/3/2023 9:28:00 PM
Thank you so very much for the fave and detailed comment dear Vijay, you have been always so very kind and encouraging and i am forever grateful for that truly
Date: 11/30/2023 4:45:00 AM
so much i love about this - from the alliteration of the title, to stellar lines such as "you were the acrylic home i was sketching on sunflower panoramas"..i like the concept of finding lost poems in someone's eyes..:)
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Ink Empress
Date: 12/3/2023 9:28:00 PM
Dear Charlotte im so grateful for your support and thank you for pointing out what you liked in the poem too. It means alot coming from you, always
Date: 11/30/2023 2:58:00 AM
Very touching piece . What inspired you to write this . So beautiful
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Ink Empress
Date: 12/3/2023 9:29:00 PM
Awwn you know it is always my beloved and my feelings that inspire me thank you dahlin i appreciate you so much
Date: 11/30/2023 2:47:00 AM
Firstly, my apologies for missing so many of ur amazing poems, as u know life's been quite a show these days~I'll definitely be reaching on each of your jewel-like masterpieces!Now coming back to this one, what can I possibly say when you've woven a magical tale of love & romance here which can warm anyone's heart and fill so much bliss!When our muse is our beloved & his/her presence breathes poetry in our fingertips, everything definitely becomes a heavenly haven!!Distance cannot part true love
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Ink Empress
Date: 12/3/2023 9:30:00 PM
Awwn thank you angelic star for always being so supportive and kind i appreciate your generosity and sincerity in appreciating my poems always. Grateful to have kind souls like you . Sending you light alwaysss
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 11/30/2023 2:51:00 AM
And you've expressed that so impeccably in your second last stanza.. I'm seriously swooning over your eloquent n artistic skills which decipher a unique dimension of fairytale to my soul! "In your moonlit eyes I’ve found the lost poem", "I knew then, you were the acrylic home i was sketching on sunflower panoramas", "In your voice I've already seen spring, sowing seeds of hibiscus promises", "to love until the sun burns into ashes" Those ending lines gosh, this piece has stolen my heart, hun! This poem deserves all the beautiful accolades, I loveeee it! :)

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