Premiere Contest WinnerHibiscus Haven

I want to swim in the golden rivers
of your heavenly haven,
wading through every swirl and twirl flowing in splendiferous streams.
Taste of your warmth courses down ruffles within my ribs,
pulsating your name in assonant motions.

In your moonlit eyes I’ve found the lost poem,
missing from my once hollow heart. 
You are the metaphorical master, 
with a plethora of poetic keys, 
deciphering hieroglyphics syllables, 
ceaselessly obscuring vehement vanity,
endured through violent torrents of torment.

In your arms I found a euphonious sanctuary,
calming stormy edges from a malignant abyss,
there I saw grey on silvery nights, 
until you breathed poetry into my fingertips.

Words began to bloom amongst 
deep ruby wine dahlias,
where seasons never wilt internal imagination.

I still remember the night we embraced a new year,
as fireworks lit up the highest mountains between us.
Revealing incandescent morning stars,
with your infectious smile, 
I knew then, you were the acrylic home
I was sketching on sunflower panoramas.

In your voice I've already seen spring, 
sowing seeds of hibiscus promises, 
hydrating delicate dreams—
drifting with withering ferns and flowers, 
imprinted from roots of fate, 
ascending mauve memories to cloud nine,
where clipped feathers attain nirvana,
to love until the sun burns into ashes.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2023

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George Avatar
December 5, 2023 at 12:49 PM
To love until sun burns into ashes, to love until eternity.. lovely lovely
George Avatar
December 3, 2023 at 8:39 PM
Wow.... wonderful ! Sorry, I miss many of the gems on poetry soup because of my encumbrances. This is perhaps one of your best poems which has no parallels or comparison in its intimate sentiments of love and romance. Every line presents a beautiful image and I can't pick a single one as my favorite. It is heaven to be thus endowed with a muse to inspire you. In all trials of life, looking at the poems you have so far written, you can derive a lot of joy and satisfaction. Once again let me repeat....you are exceptionally gifted !"In your voice I've already seen spring, sowing seeds of hibiscus promises, hydrating delicate dreams—" Live in the beauty of those dreams. Congratulations on your well deserved trophy. Into my FAVE
Jones Avatar
December 4, 2023 at 5:24 AM
Very well said Valsa and I agree that she is uniquely talented!
Empress Avatar
December 3, 2023 at 9:10 PM
Dear valsa you have a heart of gold, truly how kind are you! Im so grateful always that you take time to appreciate me despite the struggles with health etc. thank you so much and I personally love your poem more than mine for this contest, but im so grateful for your fave too thank you again so very much
Poet Avatar
December 3, 2023 at 2:48 PM
Back with hearty congratulations on your contest trophy win. Best wishes always
Empress Avatar
December 3, 2023 at 7:49 PM
Thank you so veryy much dear Sotto
Jones Avatar
December 3, 2023 at 1:46 PM
Congrats on your first place win! Thank you for your beautiful entry in my LOVE JONES contest!
Empress Avatar
December 3, 2023 at 7:49 PM
thank you so very much dear Karen, i did not expect to win at all, its such a beautiful surprise for which i truly am grateful for. I appreciate you and your son, for placing me. Please let him know I am grateful too. Sending you light today and always
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
December 2, 2023 at 12:44 PM
Beautiful accomplishment, Ink Empress. My grannies know 'smiles'. I am truly entranced by how it glides the eyes then holds at stationary points, like 'smiles' whereupon my grannies came into focus as they water the hibiscus' by the house windows calling us inside to close them. Hibiscus flower bushes hug Hawaiian homes as it acts like a barrier to keep bees out. I'm not sure if this is for any contest, but if anything, it's a winning statement, my friend. Aloha, William
Empress Avatar
December 3, 2023 at 9:11 PM
Ah we have many hibiscus too here in the maldives, it is a common island flower maybe , thank you for sharing your experience and the story behind hibiscus there so inspiring to read. I appreciate your kind support always
Hind Avatar
December 1, 2023 at 8:26 PM
This is so perfect and amazing. There are so many lines that I love..."ceaselessly obscuring vehement vanity, endured through violent torrents of torment"...to love until the sun burns into ashes" so deep. A pleasure, sending you light!
Empress Avatar
December 3, 2023 at 9:20 PM
Thank you so very much for your detailed and heartfelt feedback im always grateful for your kind and sincere support
Kendrick Avatar
December 1, 2023 at 3:30 AM
IE, the title drew me in, and the passionate work exploded before me. Thanks for sharing your thoughts about your love in Hibiscus paradise. Sara K
Empress Avatar
December 3, 2023 at 9:21 PM
Thank you so very much for your kind and uplifting feedback, truly grateful always
Rolland Avatar
November 30, 2023 at 11:14 PM
you have so much talent, for images, and assonances ?, enjoyed my reading, thanks poet
Empress Avatar
December 3, 2023 at 9:21 PM
Thank you so very much i appreciate your support always
Lamoureux Avatar
November 30, 2023 at 5:50 PM
Love this one. I read it aloud. Delicious on the tongue.
Empress Avatar
December 3, 2023 at 9:21 PM
Thank you so very much always for your kind and generous support, grateful
Culverhouse Avatar
November 30, 2023 at 12:51 PM
I saw grey on silvery nights, wow what a line, and hats off for using the word plethora, this write is an excellent one IE
Empress Avatar
December 3, 2023 at 9:23 PM
Thank you so very much for reading and for leaving such a thoughtful comment grateful always
Messina Avatar
November 30, 2023 at 12:27 PM
Simply beautiful, Ink. I might be able to write funny, but I don't think I can write as lovely and as romantic as this. If this is for the contest...best wishes :) Charlie
Empress Avatar
December 3, 2023 at 9:24 PM
Dear charles i appreciate your support truly, thank you for saying that, i am grateful for your best wishes too
M  Avatar
November 30, 2023 at 12:21 PM
Oh IE what a magical and romantic poem! “Sowing seeds of hibiscus promises” l just love that….poetically perfect!! Another IE beauty! Debx
Empress Avatar
December 3, 2023 at 9:24 PM
Dear debx im so happy to hear from you always and thank you so much for pointing out your fave line too. I appreciate you truly
Rose  Avatar
November 30, 2023 at 9:44 AM
Oh to love like that and not die from it, sigh. Winning material, beautiful Ink, :)
Empress Avatar
December 3, 2023 at 9:25 PM
Ah sweet rose thank you so very much for being so very kind and so supportive i appreciate your kindness always
Poet Avatar
November 30, 2023 at 7:02 AM
Dear Ink, this is a genuinely lovely example of romance expressed via your incredible verse. This poetic masterpiece captures the essence of your great passion for a lover from the beginning of its conception through to its conclusion. Your work is adorned with a multitude of top-notch diction one of which is its final stanza, which captures the mind with its incredible imagery. Best wishes always
Empress Avatar
December 3, 2023 at 9:26 PM
Dear Sotto thank you so very much for your kindness and for always being so supportive, im grateful for your unwavering support, appreciate your best wishes too
Greenhough Avatar
November 30, 2023 at 6:41 AM
They say love is like a garden. I was amazed at how flowers brought a sense of life and growth to romance in this poem. Deep thoughts revealed an unyielding soul.
Empress Avatar
December 3, 2023 at 9:27 PM
Thank you so very much hilda i am so grateful for your generosity and kindness always, truly . Appreciate your visits
One Avatar
November 30, 2023 at 6:02 AM
That must be some voice that seems to have captivated you... a beautiful romantic poem from start to finish showing your infatuation for a lover... so many great verses here including the last stanza with has lovely imagery.. Why did you decide to choose Hibiscus as a flower? Not a dahlia or a rose or a lotus?
One Avatar
November 30, 2023 at 7:00 AM
How sweet.. Your beloved is very lucky.
Empress Avatar
November 30, 2023 at 6:23 AM
Well theres also dahlias in the poem if you read lolol youll see, hibiscus because they resemble love and passion, but also because i gave my beloved a hibiscus plant… once. Although hibiscus isnt my fave flower. It has some meanings. :D yea his voice is lovely but somedays can be a bit annoying especially when I’m pmsing. .. haha
Pandit Avatar
November 30, 2023 at 5:38 AM
So beautifully romantic poem, my friend. --as fireworks lit up the highest mountains between us. Revealing incandescent morning stars, with your infectious smile--drifting with withering ferns and flowers, imprinted from roots of fate, ascending mauve memories to cloud nine--Much enjoyed the voice of your poem, Ink. Love exudes throughout--a FAVE for me.
Empress Avatar
December 3, 2023 at 9:28 PM
Thank you so very much for the fave and detailed comment dear Vijay, you have been always so very kind and encouraging and i am forever grateful for that truly
Puddifoot Avatar
November 30, 2023 at 4:45 AM
so much i love about this - from the alliteration of the title, to stellar lines such as "you were the acrylic home i was sketching on sunflower panoramas"..i like the concept of finding lost poems in someone's eyes..:)
Empress Avatar
December 3, 2023 at 9:28 PM
Dear Charlotte im so grateful for your support and thank you for pointing out what you liked in the poem too. It means alot coming from you, always
Rhymes Avatar
November 30, 2023 at 2:58 AM
Very touching piece . What inspired you to write this . So beautiful
Empress Avatar
December 3, 2023 at 9:29 PM
Awwn you know it is always my beloved and my feelings that inspire me thank you dahlin i appreciate you so much
Sharma  Avatar
November 30, 2023 at 2:47 AM
Firstly, my apologies for missing so many of ur amazing poems, as u know life's been quite a show these days~I'll definitely be reaching on each of your jewel-like masterpieces!Now coming back to this one, what can I possibly say when you've woven a magical tale of love & romance here which can warm anyone's heart and fill so much bliss!When our muse is our beloved & his/her presence breathes poetry in our fingertips, everything definitely becomes a heavenly haven!!Distance cannot part true love
Empress Avatar
December 3, 2023 at 9:30 PM
Awwn thank you angelic star for always being so supportive and kind i appreciate your generosity and sincerity in appreciating my poems always. Grateful to have kind souls like you . Sending you light alwaysss
Sharma  Avatar
November 30, 2023 at 2:51 AM
And you've expressed that so impeccably in your second last stanza.. I'm seriously swooning over your eloquent n artistic skills which decipher a unique dimension of fairytale to my soul! "In your moonlit eyes I’ve found the lost poem", "I knew then, you were the acrylic home i was sketching on sunflower panoramas", "In your voice I've already seen spring, sowing seeds of hibiscus promises", "to love until the sun burns into ashes" Those ending lines gosh, this piece has stolen my heart, hun! This poem deserves all the beautiful accolades, I loveeee it! :)
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