David Kavanagh Poet Etheree

:::::::Here with me:::::::

                        Lost
                     fumbling 
                   past Eden’s 
                 apple blossoms 
              winds swirl confetti 
            conjuring up blizzards 
         snow globes shake reality 
        awareness of a world in flux 
       supposition heaven may exist
      built by a deity nothing like me 

      life’s edgy I trip spontaneously 
       vector on without destination 
         or memories how it began 
           anyway there is no end 
             just chaotic tangents 
               cosmic quasi-ness 
                 and one perfect
                     innate flaw
                       that i’m 
                         here

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Duke Beaufort April 16, 2025 at 4:20 PM David, this is a beautiful poem, and it reflects a realistic and open-minded perception of reality. For whatever reason, we are here. I do find that life is pleasant for me right now...I wish that were the case for everyone, but as you say, chaos makes that difficult to imagine. There's a lot going on in this tiny speck that's in one typical spiral galaxy among millions. Perfection is a very odd concept in a universe like ours. Smiles!! David Kavanagh April 17, 2025 at 9:42 AM My best guess is we’re here because we have to be here Duke, I mean where else can we be, cosmologists reckon the universe should have destroyed itself the moment the Big Bang happened if mater/antimatter was equal, which it should have been, but for every billion antimatter particles, there were a billion and one matter particles, and everything is made up from those surplus matter particles! an innate flaw? I don’t know it’s mind boggling? Hell I’m flawed for sure! Cheers again David

Tom Cunningham April 12, 2025 at 5:07 AM Plenty to think about in your double E David , I don't think we'll ever truly know for sure if there were flaws in our creation and our earthly existence. I'm with Lin though, hardly a flaw you're here. Hope you're getting the same weather we are. Tom David Kavanagh April 12, 2025 at 5:37 AM I agree Tom, but they do give us something different to ponder, I don’t believe any two of us see the world exactly the same, I wrote this piece as me in the first person as it reflects my raison d'être, (to steal Dilly’s line) Weather was great all week, but broke today so rain gear is at the ready, hope you enjoy the sun while it lasts, cheers David

Lin Lane April 12, 2025 at 4:17 AM David, this is the tightest Etheree form I've ever seen. I know how difficult it is to write them and still have them make sense. Yours definitely does except for the last part where you write it's a flaw in the world that you're here. The cosmos is a quasi-ness of imperfections, a chaotic mess, but I'm glad you're here. David Kavanagh April 12, 2025 at 5:10 AM A perfect flaw in your perception Lin which makes you unique, and without such perfect flaws we would all be clones, so I’m glad you made it too :) Lin Lane April 12, 2025 at 4:53 AM It's a flaw in my perception that I don't always grasp the author's intent. The soup is always simmering, so take your time catching up. David Kavanagh April 12, 2025 at 4:50 AM Heya Lin, thanks for the vote of confidence in my being here, I think what I’m saying in the second part, is a perfect cosmic flaw was inherent in bringing me here, and also reflecting something flawed in the concept of Eden, I was disappointed to miss Inks Etheree contest, couldn’t be helped my mind was elsewhere, thank you so much for stopping by to comment, I’ve a bit of catching up to do on the soup, cheers David