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:::::::Here with me:::::::

                        Lost
                     fumbling 
                   past Eden’s 
                 apple blossoms 
              winds swirl confetti 
            conjuring up blizzards 
         snow globes shake reality 
        awareness of a world in flux 
       supposition heaven may exist
      built by a deity nothing like me 

      life’s edgy I trip spontaneously 
       vector on without destination 
         or memories how it began 
           anyway there is no end 
             just chaotic tangents 
               cosmic quasi-ness 
                 and one perfect
                     innate flaw
                       that i’m 
                         here

Copyright © David Kavanagh | Year Posted 2025

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Duke Beaufort Date: 4/16/2025 4:20:00 PM David, this is a beautiful poem, and it reflects a realistic and open-minded perception of reality. For whatever reason, we are here. I do find that life is pleasant for me right now...I wish that were the case for everyone, but as you say, chaos makes that difficult to imagine. There's a lot going on in this tiny speck that's in one typical spiral galaxy among millions. Perfection is a very odd concept in a universe like ours. Smiles!! Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 4/17/2025 9:42:00 AM My best guess is we’re here because we have to be here Duke, I mean where else can we be, cosmologists reckon the universe should have destroyed itself the moment the Big Bang happened if mater/antimatter was equal, which it should have been, but for every billion antimatter particles, there were a billion and one matter particles, and everything is made up from those surplus matter particles! an innate flaw? I don’t know it’s mind boggling? Hell I’m flawed for sure! Cheers again David

Tom Woody Date: 4/12/2025 6:01:00 AM Everything God created was perfect till the misuse of free will (not free will itself as some claim) produced imperfection and the resultant chaos and mess we have. Eden must have been every bit a paradise. Most humans don't value what they have, always wanting more. However, Jesus paid the price 1992 years ago and the cosmos will be set straight up on his return. It's something to look forward to David. Nice etheree Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 4/12/2025 10:25:00 AM That would be the aforementioned perfect innate flaw! Tom Woody Date: 4/12/2025 9:07:00 AM Ugh! AI. Mankind once again blindly forging ahead without restraint David Kavanagh Date: 4/12/2025 6:32:00 AM And that’s Fair enough, our timelines probably differ, I’m certainly not here to argue the case for or against Jesus, or free will, nor any God for that matter, this one is all about my own perfectly flawed journey, that possibility began 13.8 billion years ago, as for the immediate future it appears an AI god is in the making! Cheers David

Tom Cunningham Date: 4/12/2025 5:07:00 AM Plenty to think about in your double E David , I don't think we'll ever truly know for sure if there were flaws in our creation and our earthly existence. I'm with Lin though, hardly a flaw you're here. Hope you're getting the same weather we are. Tom Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 4/12/2025 5:37:00 AM I agree Tom, but they do give us something different to ponder, I don’t believe any two of us see the world exactly the same, I wrote this piece as me in the first person as it reflects my raison d'être, (to steal Dilly’s line) Weather was great all week, but broke today so rain gear is at the ready, hope you enjoy the sun while it lasts, cheers David

Lin Lane Date: 4/12/2025 4:17:00 AM David, this is the tightest Etheree form I've ever seen. I know how difficult it is to write them and still have them make sense. Yours definitely does except for the last part where you write it's a flaw in the world that you're here. The cosmos is a quasi-ness of imperfections, a chaotic mess, but I'm glad you're here. Login to Reply David Kavanagh Date: 4/12/2025 5:10:00 AM A perfect flaw in your perception Lin which makes you unique, and without such perfect flaws we would all be clones, so I’m glad you made it too :) Lin Lane Date: 4/12/2025 4:53:00 AM It's a flaw in my perception that I don't always grasp the author's intent. The soup is always simmering, so take your time catching up. David Kavanagh Date: 4/12/2025 4:50:00 AM Heya Lin, thanks for the vote of confidence in my being here, I think what I’m saying in the second part, is a perfect cosmic flaw was inherent in bringing me here, and also reflecting something flawed in the concept of Eden, I was disappointed to miss Inks Etheree contest, couldn’t be helped my mind was elsewhere, thank you so much for stopping by to comment, I’ve a bit of catching up to do on the soup, cheers David