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Here On the Edge of Good Reason

Here on the edge of good reason


Here on the edge of good reason
Dancing a shimmering sheen
Laughing at each separate season
Can’t see the shade in between

Dancing a shimmering sheen
Still as the temperature falls
Can’t see the shade in between
Hearing the wind as it calls

Still as the temperature falls
I pay no heed to the change
Hearing the wind as it calls
Never once thinking it strange

I pay no heed to the change
Laughing at each separate season
Never once thinking it strange
Here on the edge of good reason


My first Pantoum poem ever

5/31/17
For the Rhyme Battle: Round 7 Poetry Contest
Sponsored by Juli-Michelle

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Jan Allison Date: 6/27/2017 8:57:00 PM dropping back with my congrats Chris you did an excellent job:-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply Chris Green Date: 6/28/2017 8:55:00 AM Thanks so much Jan. I can't believe I placed in the contest.

Kim Rodrigues Date: 6/27/2017 8:35:00 PM Excellent, my friend! Lovely rhythm! Congrats! Login to Reply Chris Green Date: 6/28/2017 8:55:00 AM Thanks so much Kim.

Juli- Michelle Date: 6/27/2017 1:37:00 PM Chris, well done! Congratulations on your placement in my rhyme battle contest! Love, Juli-Michelle Login to Reply Chris Green Date: 6/27/2017 2:04:00 PM Thank you so much Julie. It was a fun contest to enter and that was my first attempt at a Pantoum.

John Hamilton Date: 6/10/2017 2:57:00 PM I was trying a Pantoum but couldn't get it right, these are really difficult and you mastered the form first try, well done! Login to Reply Chris Green Date: 6/12/2017 8:28:00 AM Thanks John, it wasn't easy, that's for sure. I am glad you liked it.

Maria Williams Date: 6/2/2017 3:48:00 AM Wow Chris , and this is a first attempt? This looks like such a difficult form and you do it with such ease. Love the poem, good luck in the contest....... Maria Login to Reply Chris Green Date: 6/5/2017 9:55:00 AM Thanks so very much Maria. I actually wrote a rhyming poem for the contest before (once again) I read the rules. Once I saw it was Pantoum it was, uh-oh...now what do I do? :) So I gave it a shot.

Jan Allison Date: 6/1/2017 5:12:00 PM wow chris you did and awesome job - I have only written a couple as it is such a challenging form but really do adore pantoum poems! Good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply Chris Green Date: 6/5/2017 9:53:00 AM Thanks so very much Jan. I am happy you liked this one. It was quite difficult to write.

Joanna Daniel Date: 6/1/2017 10:33:00 AM Amazing pantoum for a first one, Chris, I like your carefree positive attitude in this:) Login to Reply Chris Green Date: 6/1/2017 11:27:00 AM Thanks so much Jo. I did try to make if feel fun without being too goofy. :)

Darren White Date: 6/1/2017 1:22:00 AM Oh cool, you did a Pantoum! And a good one too, really great, Chris :) The last stanza does not consist of four separate lines that are there just for the reason it is a pantoum, no, it's a real stanza with depth and meaning. Pantoums, Terzanelles and Villanelles are in fact my favourites, but it is very difficult to write a good one. You have talent my friend, loads of it :) Fave. Login to Reply Chris Green Date: 6/1/2017 9:53:00 AM Thanks so much Darren. I was trying to have it all make sense in a way, I am happy you think it did.

Alexis Y. Date: 6/1/2017 12:32:00 AM WoW! Chris, You did an amazing job with the form. You made it look easy. I know it's not because I did a few. One would know it was your first attemp. It had a nice flow and rhythm. Great content and rhymes as well. It was not "strange" at all. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Login to Reply Chris Green Date: 6/1/2017 9:52:00 AM Thank you so very much my friend. I am happy you liked this one

Tim Smith Date: 5/31/2017 9:25:00 PM Wow great poem Chris Login to Reply Chris Green Date: 6/1/2017 9:51:00 AM Thanks so much Tim.

Arthur Vaso Date: 5/31/2017 8:57:00 PM Your first and so very well done, flows so well! :) Login to Reply Chris Green Date: 5/31/2017 8:59:00 PM Thanks so much Arthur, it looked easy....it wasn't. I appreciate your visit my friend.

Anne-Marie Coreggia Date: 5/31/2017 8:35:00 PM I thoroughly enjoyed the musicality and the playfulness of this piece. I'm ready to laugh and dance on the edge of reason at the change of each season:) Amitiés Login to Reply Chris Green Date: 5/31/2017 8:37:00 PM I am so happy you liked this. It is my first attempt at a Pantoum poem and I wasn't sure if it would make sense or not. Thank you Anne Marie. I truly do appreciate you

Akkina Downing Date: 5/31/2017 8:06:00 PM Pay no heed, just keep gliding and dancing :) a lovely piece I enjoyed. Good luck in the contest Chris :) hugs Login to Reply Chris Green Date: 5/31/2017 8:34:00 PM Thank you Kina. I always smile when you stop by. This was my first poem in this form. It was hard but fun to write and I hope it came out ok.

Lenna Walker Date: 5/31/2017 8:04:00 PM I really like this, 'changing seasons' and 'on the edge of good reason'. It all made perfect sense to me anyway, 'never once thinking it strange' Well done Chris :) Login to Reply Chris Green Date: 5/31/2017 8:33:00 PM Thank you so much Lenna. You are always so kind to me. I appreciate you more than you know.