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Here Comes the Bride

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Standing at the church awaiting his bride, ‘twas meant to be the best day of his life; When she arrives, she is not by his side. His bitter tears he can no longer hide, grieving for the one due to be his wife. Standing at the church awaiting his bride The coffin appears; her body inside, She couldn’t be saved; the cancer was rife. When she arrives, she is not by his side. Looking to heaven, he prays God will guide, giving him succour, at this time of strife. Standing at the church awaiting his bride, If she could see him she’d be full of pride; they will meet again in the afterlife. When she arrives, she is not by his side, In his memory she’ll always reside. his heart is broken; pain cuts like a knife. Standing at the church awaiting his bride; when she arrives, she is not by his side. Contest - Shadow Hamilton – Villanelle’s and Terzanelle’s Only My first attempt at Villanelle form 11th June 2105

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Kp Nunez

Date: 6/24/2015 8:53:00 PM

Was about to say dropping back to say congratulations, Jan! Forgot it was under my collab persona that I initially commented! Loved this write, my friend. Congrats! hugs!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/4/2015 4:11:00 PM

Thanks so much for dropping by to comment.I am not at my best at the moment and have not been around lately. hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 6/24/2015 8:30:00 PM

Jan, congrats on your win:)Alexis

Alexis Y.
Date: 7/5/2015 10:54:00 AM

Well I'm glad you're back and I hope all is well:)Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 7/4/2015 4:11:00 PM

Thanks so much for dropping by to comment.I am not at my best at the moment and have not been around lately. hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 6/24/2015 3:35:00 PM

A very touching write Jan...Congrats on your win

Jan Allison
Date: 7/4/2015 4:10:00 PM

Thanks so much for dropping by to comment.I am not at my best at the moment and have not been around lately. hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 6/24/2015 8:26:00 AM

Impressive and so sad. Congratulations!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/4/2015 4:10:00 PM

Thanks so much for dropping by to comment.I am not at my best at the moment and have not been around lately. hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 6/24/2015 8:00:00 AM

First time I read it, I knew this would be a winner, and so it is! Congratulations! Judging is not at all easy, and I think a sponsor should be somebody born with a tough hide:) Also, contests should serve as part of a learning process for poets; thus reasons for NAs or a bad showing ought to be made available (in private). hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 7/4/2015 4:10:00 PM

Thanks so much for dropping by to comment.I am not at my best at the moment and have not been around lately. hugs Jan xx

Skat A

Date: 6/24/2015 1:37:00 AM

Hi Jan, Congratulations on your win. **SKAT**

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/24/2015 12:54:00 AM

nice win. pd

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/23/2015 9:08:00 PM

I'm so glad you made the list with Your VERY first villanelle ever. Big congrats, Jan. and where are you today??

Jan Allison
Date: 7/4/2015 4:10:00 PM

Thanks so much for dropping by to comment.I am not at my best at the moment and have not been around lately. hugs Jan xx

Viv Wigley

Date: 6/23/2015 9:06:00 PM

I'm sorry, Jan, but this doesn't look like a first attempt at all. I'm going to have to smack your bottom with this Herring, for telling fibs. Well done anyway. Viv x

Jan Allison
Date: 7/4/2015 4:09:00 PM

Thanks so much for dropping by to comment.I am not at my best at the moment and have not been around lately. hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 6/23/2015 5:07:00 PM

Congratulations on your wonderful win. Hugs Eve **** @-)--< 7

Jan Allison
Date: 7/4/2015 4:09:00 PM

Thanks so much for dropping by to comment.I am not at my best at the moment and have not been around lately. hugs Jan xx

Judy Konos

Date: 6/23/2015 3:53:00 PM

Congratulations......Jan....big win here....wow wee....

Jan Allison
Date: 7/4/2015 4:09:00 PM

Thanks so much for dropping by to comment.I am not at my best at the moment and have not been around lately. hugs Jan xx

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 6/23/2015 12:34:00 PM

very good attempt Jan congrats on placing hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 7/4/2015 4:08:00 PM

Thanks so much for dropping by to comment.I am not at my best at the moment and have not been around lately. hugs Jan xx

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 6/18/2015 12:01:00 PM

Well done, Jan! When I saw the title, I was expecting a happy wedding poem, and I'm wiping away tears...mission accomplished! Hugs, Rhonda

Jan Allison
Date: 6/18/2015 12:17:00 PM

Thanks Rhonda I was amazed how tough this form was - I just hope Shadow likes my first and last attempt lol:-) Hugs jan xx

James Fraser

Date: 6/15/2015 3:02:00 PM

First time Form, sad, but beautifully written Jan. It oozes feelings and emotions, and sure to do well in the contest, and rightly so, hugs // James xx

Jan Allison
Date: 6/18/2015 12:16:00 PM

you have helped judge contest James - you know how tough it is! Yes people recognise our styles I just hope they would be impartial:-) hugs Jan xx

James Fraser
Date: 6/15/2015 3:19:00 PM

My only gripe is the names, uncalled for of which is my tuppence-worth. I also agree that poems can be recognised as written by certain poets, this is inevitable. Regarding anything else they do, I'll live with, and yes, many haven't sponsored, including me, but as members it's our liberty to speak our thoughts. My mind has ideas for a contest, just need to take the plunge, gulp! - hugs//James xx

Jan Allison
Date: 6/15/2015 3:09:00 PM

I have given up even the thought of placing in contests at the moment James sadly with the recent blogs it has become a pantomime and I wouldn't blame people for not bothering to sponsor contests - too much criticism from people who have never tried to sponsor a contest:-( hugs Jan xx

Jaycee Cervenka

Date: 6/15/2015 8:24:00 AM

Jan this is a beautiful touching Villanelle. I'd say you knocked this one out of the ball park on the first swing. Had tears in my eyes. Loved it! A 7 and Fave.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/15/2015 10:38:00 AM

Thanks so much Janet - I just hope Shadow likes it too:-) Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 6/13/2015 5:56:00 PM

How very touching and sad! This will do well in the contest...it pulls at our heart strings; well done for a first attempt at this form. A winner it shall be:) Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 6/13/2015 5:59:00 PM

I do hope Shadow likes it Paul - my first and last attempt lol:-) hugs jan xx

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 6/13/2015 3:16:00 PM

deeply touching beautiful pen jan wishing you a lovely weekend pal

Jan Allison
Date: 6/13/2015 4:01:00 PM

Thanks Liam:-) Hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 6/13/2015 2:58:00 PM

painfully beautiful, jan... I see this on the list.. for a first try, you make waves!.. huggs

Jan Allison
Date: 6/13/2015 4:01:00 PM

I think it will be a first and last Nette:-) Was a real challenge to write and I am so pleased with the result:-) hugs Jan xx

Judy Konos

Date: 6/13/2015 1:42:00 PM

The poetry is excellent though very sad....the memory recall is even sadder happened to a friend as the Limo was headed to the church....and he stood there.......

Jan Allison
Date: 6/13/2015 4:00:00 PM

Oh Judy how tragic - this came from my imagination so sad to learn it really does happen:-( Hugs Jan xx

Afolabi Muideen

Date: 6/13/2015 2:32:00 AM

This is extremely beautiful Jan penned with vivid picture and emotion. congratulation on your awesome win .....A.M.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/13/2015 4:42:00 AM

Thanks for the comment:-) Hugs jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 6/12/2015 11:30:00 PM

Jan, I have to admit "here comes the bride" I was all set for something naughty! Now let there be no doubt, none what so ever, this is a masterpiece of poetry, you brought me to tears, and this is, well this poem is so classically brilliant. If this was my contest and I read this, I would just tell everyone else go home, You my lady are a poet extraordinaire!!! A7

Jan Allison
Date: 6/13/2015 4:41:00 AM

Aww Arthur you are so kind - this took me about 3 hours to write - was a real challenge:-) Hugs Jan xx

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 6/12/2015 8:03:00 PM

Hello Jan... full of emotion and very touching. Even though its a creative poem, imagining this happening makes it appear so very real - good luck Jan - Lindsay

Jan Allison
Date: 6/13/2015 4:30:00 AM

Thanks Lindsay:-) Hugs jan xx

Emile Pinet

Date: 6/12/2015 2:00:00 PM

This is a very touching poem filled to overflowing with love and talent. Emile.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/12/2015 2:50:00 PM

Thanks Emile it is my first attempt at this form I found it very challenging but am so pleased with the result:-) hugs Jan xx

Harry Horsman

Date: 6/12/2015 6:14:00 AM

Oh Jan this is amazing, love this form you did it proud

Jan Allison
Date: 6/12/2015 2:49:00 PM

Thanks Harry it took me about 3 hours to write it - I found it a real challenge but I am so pleased with the result:-) I just hope Shadow likes it:-) Hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 6/11/2015 8:11:00 PM

Jan, A very lovely Villanelle you have created for the contest Jan. I think it will be wonderfully accepted by Shadow. GL 7

Jan Allison
Date: 6/12/2015 12:10:00 AM

Thanks Connie I hope Shadow likes it - it was a REAL challenge to write:-) Hugs Jan xx