Jan Allison Poet Villanelle

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Here Comes the Bride

Standing at the church awaiting his bride,
‘twas meant to be the best day of his life;
When she arrives, she is not by his side.

His bitter tears he can no longer hide,
grieving for the one due to be his wife. 
Standing at the church awaiting his bride

The coffin appears; her body inside,
She couldn’t be saved; the cancer was rife.
When she arrives, she is not by his side.

Looking to heaven, he prays God will guide,
giving him succour, at this time of strife.
Standing at the church awaiting his bride,

If she could see him she’d be full of pride;
they will meet again in the afterlife.
When she arrives, she is not by his side,

In his memory she’ll always reside.
his heart is broken; pain cuts like a knife.
Standing at the church awaiting his bride;
when she arrives, she is not by his side.

Contest - Shadow Hamilton – Villanelle’s and Terzanelle’s Only
My first attempt at Villanelle form
11th June 2105

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Kp Nunez June 24, 2015 at 8:53 PM Was about to say dropping back to say congratulations, Jan! Forgot it was under my collab persona that I initially commented! Loved this write, my friend. Congrats! hugs! Jan Allison July 4, 2015 at 4:11 PM Thanks so much for dropping by to comment.I am not at my best at the moment and have not been around lately. hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y. June 24, 2015 at 8:30 PM Jan, congrats on your win:)Alexis Alexis Y. July 5, 2015 at 10:54 AM Well I'm glad you're back and I hope all is well:)Alexis Jan Allison July 4, 2015 at 4:11 PM Thanks so much for dropping by to comment.I am not at my best at the moment and have not been around lately. hugs Jan xx

Joseph May June 24, 2015 at 3:35 PM A very touching write Jan...Congrats on your win Jan Allison July 4, 2015 at 4:10 PM Thanks so much for dropping by to comment.I am not at my best at the moment and have not been around lately. hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux June 24, 2015 at 8:26 AM Impressive and so sad. Congratulations! Jan Allison July 4, 2015 at 4:10 PM Thanks so much for dropping by to comment.I am not at my best at the moment and have not been around lately. hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus June 24, 2015 at 8:00 AM First time I read it, I knew this would be a winner, and so it is! Congratulations! Judging is not at all easy, and I think a sponsor should be somebody born with a tough hide:) Also, contests should serve as part of a learning process for poets; thus reasons for NAs or a bad showing ought to be made available (in private). hugs // paul Jan Allison July 4, 2015 at 4:10 PM Thanks so much for dropping by to comment.I am not at my best at the moment and have not been around lately. hugs Jan xx

Skat A June 24, 2015 at 1:37 AM Hi Jan, Congratulations on your win. **SKAT**

Poet Destroyer A June 24, 2015 at 12:54 AM nice win. pd

Andrea Dietrich June 23, 2015 at 9:08 PM I'm so glad you made the list with Your VERY first villanelle ever. Big congrats, Jan. and where are you today?? Jan Allison July 4, 2015 at 4:10 PM Thanks so much for dropping by to comment.I am not at my best at the moment and have not been around lately. hugs Jan xx

Viv Wigley June 23, 2015 at 9:06 PM I'm sorry, Jan, but this doesn't look like a first attempt at all. I'm going to have to smack your bottom with this Herring, for telling fibs. Well done anyway. Viv x Jan Allison July 4, 2015 at 4:09 PM Thanks so much for dropping by to comment.I am not at my best at the moment and have not been around lately. hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper June 23, 2015 at 5:07 PM Congratulations on your wonderful win. Hugs Eve **** @-)--< 7 Jan Allison July 4, 2015 at 4:09 PM Thanks so much for dropping by to comment.I am not at my best at the moment and have not been around lately. hugs Jan xx

Judy Konos June 23, 2015 at 3:53 PM Congratulations......Jan....big win here....wow wee.... Jan Allison July 4, 2015 at 4:09 PM Thanks so much for dropping by to comment.I am not at my best at the moment and have not been around lately. hugs Jan xx

Shadow Hamilton June 23, 2015 at 12:34 PM very good attempt Jan congrats on placing hugs Jan Allison July 4, 2015 at 4:08 PM Thanks so much for dropping by to comment.I am not at my best at the moment and have not been around lately. hugs Jan xx

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders June 18, 2015 at 12:01 PM Well done, Jan! When I saw the title, I was expecting a happy wedding poem, and I'm wiping away tears...mission accomplished! Hugs, Rhonda Jan Allison June 18, 2015 at 12:17 PM Thanks Rhonda I was amazed how tough this form was - I just hope Shadow likes my first and last attempt lol:-) Hugs jan xx

James Fraser June 15, 2015 at 3:02 PM First time Form, sad, but beautifully written Jan. It oozes feelings and emotions, and sure to do well in the contest, and rightly so, hugs // James xx Jan Allison June 18, 2015 at 12:16 PM you have helped judge contest James - you know how tough it is! Yes people recognise our styles I just hope they would be impartial:-) hugs Jan xx James Fraser June 15, 2015 at 3:19 PM My only gripe is the names, uncalled for of which is my tuppence-worth. I also agree that poems can be recognised as written by certain poets, this is inevitable. Regarding anything else they do, I'll live with, and yes, many haven't sponsored, including me, but as members it's our liberty to speak our thoughts. My mind has ideas for a contest, just need to take the plunge, gulp! - hugs//James xx Jan Allison June 15, 2015 at 3:09 PM I have given up even the thought of placing in contests at the moment James sadly with the recent blogs it has become a pantomime and I wouldn't blame people for not bothering to sponsor contests - too much criticism from people who have never tried to sponsor a contest:-( hugs Jan xx

Jaycee Cervenka June 15, 2015 at 8:24 AM Jan this is a beautiful touching Villanelle. I'd say you knocked this one out of the ball park on the first swing. Had tears in my eyes. Loved it! A 7 and Fave. Jan Allison June 15, 2015 at 10:38 AM Thanks so much Janet - I just hope Shadow likes it too:-) Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus June 13, 2015 at 5:56 PM How very touching and sad! This will do well in the contest...it pulls at our heart strings; well done for a first attempt at this form. A winner it shall be:) Hugs // paul Jan Allison June 13, 2015 at 5:59 PM I do hope Shadow likes it Paul - my first and last attempt lol:-) hugs jan xx

Liam Mcdaid June 13, 2015 at 3:16 PM deeply touching beautiful pen jan wishing you a lovely weekend pal Jan Allison June 13, 2015 at 4:01 PM Thanks Liam:-) Hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud June 13, 2015 at 2:58 PM painfully beautiful, jan... I see this on the list.. for a first try, you make waves!.. huggs Jan Allison June 13, 2015 at 4:01 PM I think it will be a first and last Nette:-) Was a real challenge to write and I am so pleased with the result:-) hugs Jan xx

Judy Konos June 13, 2015 at 1:42 PM The poetry is excellent though very sad....the memory recall is even sadder happened to a friend as the Limo was headed to the church....and he stood there....... Jan Allison June 13, 2015 at 4:00 PM Oh Judy how tragic - this came from my imagination so sad to learn it really does happen:-( Hugs Jan xx

Afolabi Muideen June 13, 2015 at 2:32 AM This is extremely beautiful Jan penned with vivid picture and emotion. congratulation on your awesome win .....A.M. Jan Allison June 13, 2015 at 4:42 AM Thanks for the comment:-) Hugs jan xx

Arthur Vaso June 12, 2015 at 11:30 PM Jan, I have to admit "here comes the bride" I was all set for something naughty! Now let there be no doubt, none what so ever, this is a masterpiece of poetry, you brought me to tears, and this is, well this poem is so classically brilliant. If this was my contest and I read this, I would just tell everyone else go home, You my lady are a poet extraordinaire!!! A7 Jan Allison June 13, 2015 at 4:41 AM Aww Arthur you are so kind - this took me about 3 hours to write - was a real challenge:-) Hugs Jan xx

Lindsay Laurie June 12, 2015 at 8:03 PM Hello Jan... full of emotion and very touching. Even though its a creative poem, imagining this happening makes it appear so very real - good luck Jan - Lindsay Jan Allison June 13, 2015 at 4:30 AM Thanks Lindsay:-) Hugs jan xx

Emile Pinet June 12, 2015 at 2:00 PM This is a very touching poem filled to overflowing with love and talent. Emile. Jan Allison June 12, 2015 at 2:50 PM Thanks Emile it is my first attempt at this form I found it very challenging but am so pleased with the result:-) hugs Jan xx

Harry Horsman June 12, 2015 at 6:14 AM Oh Jan this is amazing, love this form you did it proud Jan Allison June 12, 2015 at 2:49 PM Thanks Harry it took me about 3 hours to write it - I found it a real challenge but I am so pleased with the result:-) I just hope Shadow likes it:-) Hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong June 11, 2015 at 8:11 PM Jan, A very lovely Villanelle you have created for the contest Jan. I think it will be wonderfully accepted by Shadow. GL 7 Jan Allison June 12, 2015 at 12:10 AM Thanks Connie I hope Shadow likes it - it was a REAL challenge to write:-) Hugs Jan xx

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