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Like a cork bobbing, thrown about upon the waves by frenzy spurred my train of thought zoomed in and out, I tried to focus: last words, slurred, so near…so far…I swirled in doubt. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - Sicilian Quintain: rhyme sequence: a. b. a. b. a. Five Word Challenge Contest Prompt words: tried, far, train, upon, cork Hosted by Beth Evans © 30th November 2019

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Date: 11/17/2020 1:40:00 PM
You're very creative in your writing, Paul. I enjoy reading your many different styles :)
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Paul Callus
Date: 11/19/2020 6:03:00 AM
Thank you, Angela. I enjoy trying out different forms of poetry, though my writing style probably comes out in most of them:) Regards // paul
Date: 4/19/2020 6:51:00 AM
Nice way you watched those words in bold into your tapestry. You're a poet extraordinaire.
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Date: 4/19/2020 12:13:00 PM
Thank you, Eileen; you never fail to encourage :) Hope you had a relaxed weekend. Hugs // paul
Date: 12/16/2019 11:40:00 PM
G'day Paul … pure poetry indeed - well done Paul - Lindsay
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Date: 12/17/2019 1:54:00 PM
Thank you for the compliments, Lindsay :) All the best // paul
Date: 12/14/2019 11:10:00 AM
Congratulations Paul on your winning poem - Christmas wishes, and blessings and hugs to you my friend and your wonderful family. Jennifer.
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Date: 12/14/2019 3:32:00 PM
Thank you so much, Jenny! May the spirit of Christmas fill your heart with joy! Blessings to you and your family! Warm regards & Hugs // paul
Date: 12/10/2019 10:53:00 PM
Congratulatons on your well deserved win, Paul.
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Date: 12/11/2019 1:21:00 PM
Thank you, Rhoda; your support and string of consecutive visits are very much appreciated. Warm regards // paul
Date: 12/10/2019 6:12:00 AM
Wow! A brilliant one. So creative. Congratulations on your well deserved win...
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Date: 12/11/2019 1:23:00 PM
Thank you so much for your complimentary remarks, Supraja. Much obliged. Regards // paul
Date: 12/8/2019 10:47:00 PM
Brilliant as always, Paul Callus. Season's Blessings and many comforts/friends. Shalom shalom Dear Man & mensch.
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Date: 12/9/2019 8:19:00 AM
Thank you, my friend. A pleasure to have you visiting; had not realized you were back posting. Season's greetings to you and your loved ones. Peace & Blessings // paul
Date: 12/8/2019 8:27:00 AM
Congrats on your winning poem Paul
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Date: 12/8/2019 1:23:00 PM
Thank you, Gregory. All the best // paul
Date: 12/8/2019 4:50:00 AM
One of the best here, Paul. A clear winner in my book - congrats for a fine quintain. I particularly like the "train" of thought, which shows creativity l
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Date: 12/8/2019 1:23:00 PM
Thank you for the complimentary comments, Reason. Best regards // paul
Date: 12/5/2019 10:50:00 PM
Well done indeed. Good luck in the contest.
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Date: 12/8/2019 11:15:00 AM
Thank you, Caren. ave a lovely day! // paul
Date: 12/4/2019 2:00:00 PM
very good use of the words using each in a separate line. Great job, Paul. I really like your entry.
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Date: 12/5/2019 4:14:00 PM
Thank you, Andrea. Using a prompt word in each line was due to my not being quite sure of the rules!! [thought best be on the safe side:) ] Best regards // paul
Date: 12/4/2019 1:17:00 PM
Your creativity always shines in your ability to be descriptive and succinct while displaying emotions so relatable Paul. This is a great entry! : ) xxoo
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Date: 12/5/2019 4:11:00 PM
Your generous, complimentary remarks are music to my ears, Connie...thank you! Warm regards // paul
Date: 12/4/2019 5:41:00 AM
Phantasmagorical writing dearest, Paul! A fav.
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Date: 12/4/2019 6:58:00 AM
Thank you, Demi. Both the fantastic comment and fav are much appreciated! Have a nice day. Regards // paul
Date: 12/4/2019 3:47:00 AM
Awesome Paul - such excellent poetic structure and craftsmanship in this write - 5 words say it all! Best of luck in the contest, Warm regards and hugs, Jenny.
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Date: 12/1/2019 1:47:00 PM
- Excellent written, Paul :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 12/3/2019 2:21:00 PM
Thank you for reading and liking, Anne-Lise. Regards & Hugs // paul
Date: 12/1/2019 7:35:00 AM
You did this in rhythmic tone--excellent write Paul.
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Date: 12/3/2019 2:21:00 PM
Thank you so much, Vijay. I have to admit it was no easy task!! Regards // paul
Date: 12/1/2019 2:17:00 AM
An emotive use of the five words, Paul - excellent penmanship! Best wishes for the contest! Warm regards- Aqua M.
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Date: 12/3/2019 2:19:00 PM
Thank you, Aqua. Your consecutive visits are truly appreciated. Warm regards // paul
Date: 11/30/2019 9:04:00 PM
brilliantly penned Paul...best wishes in the contest... hugs
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Date: 12/3/2019 2:18:00 PM
Many thanks to you, Sandra. Always a pleasure to have you visiting. Regards // paul
Date: 11/30/2019 7:26:00 PM
Hi Paul this is really good. Best of luck in the contest
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Date: 12/3/2019 2:16:00 PM
So pleased you found it to your liking, Greg; thank you. Regards // paul
Date: 11/30/2019 6:54:00 PM
Very well done, Paul, use of words and rhyme with great flow. Good luck in the contest.
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Date: 12/3/2019 2:16:00 PM
Thank you, Eve. I enjoyed your entry, too. Have a nice day. Hugs // paul

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