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Her Parting Words

Like a cork bobbing, thrown about
upon the waves by frenzy spurred
my train of thought zoomed in and out,
I tried to focus: last words, slurred,
so near…so far…I swirled in doubt. 

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Sicilian Quintain: rhyme sequence: a. b. a. b. a.
Five Word Challenge Contest
Prompt words: tried, far, train, upon, cork
Hosted by Beth Evans
© 30th November 2019

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Angela Crabtree

Date: 11/17/2020 1:40:00 PM

You're very creative in your writing, Paul. I enjoy reading your many different styles :)

Paul Callus
Date: 11/19/2020 6:03:00 AM

Thank you, Angela. I enjoy trying out different forms of poetry, though my writing style probably comes out in most of them:) Regards // paul

Eileen Manassian

Date: 4/19/2020 6:51:00 AM

Nice way you watched those words in bold into your tapestry. You're a poet extraordinaire.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/19/2020 12:13:00 PM

Thank you, Eileen; you never fail to encourage :) Hope you had a relaxed weekend. Hugs // paul

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 12/16/2019 11:40:00 PM

G'day Paul … pure poetry indeed - well done Paul - Lindsay

Paul Callus
Date: 12/17/2019 1:54:00 PM

Thank you for the compliments, Lindsay :) All the best // paul

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 12/14/2019 11:10:00 AM

Congratulations Paul on your winning poem - Christmas wishes, and blessings and hugs to you my friend and your wonderful family. Jennifer.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/14/2019 3:32:00 PM

Thank you so much, Jenny! May the spirit of Christmas fill your heart with joy! Blessings to you and your family! Warm regards & Hugs // paul

Rhoda Tripp

Date: 12/10/2019 10:53:00 PM

Congratulatons on your well deserved win, Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/11/2019 1:21:00 PM

Thank you, Rhoda; your support and string of consecutive visits are very much appreciated. Warm regards // paul

Supraja Kannan

Date: 12/10/2019 6:12:00 AM

Wow! A brilliant one. So creative. Congratulations on your well deserved win...

Paul Callus
Date: 12/11/2019 1:23:00 PM

Thank you so much for your complimentary remarks, Supraja. Much obliged. Regards // paul

Anil Deo

Date: 12/8/2019 10:47:00 PM

Brilliant as always, Paul Callus. Season's Blessings and many comforts/friends. Shalom shalom Dear Man & mensch.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/9/2019 8:19:00 AM

Thank you, my friend. A pleasure to have you visiting; had not realized you were back posting. Season's greetings to you and your loved ones. Peace & Blessings // paul

Na Na

Date: 12/8/2019 8:27:00 AM

Congrats on your winning poem Paul

Paul Callus
Date: 12/8/2019 1:23:00 PM

Thank you, Gregory. All the best // paul

Reason A. Poteet

Date: 12/8/2019 4:50:00 AM

One of the best here, Paul. A clear winner in my book - congrats for a fine quintain. I particularly like the "train" of thought, which shows creativity l

Paul Callus
Date: 12/8/2019 1:23:00 PM

Thank you for the complimentary comments, Reason. Best regards // paul

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 12/5/2019 10:50:00 PM

Well done indeed. Good luck in the contest.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/8/2019 11:15:00 AM

Thank you, Caren. ave a lovely day! // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/4/2019 2:00:00 PM

very good use of the words using each in a separate line. Great job, Paul. I really like your entry.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/5/2019 4:14:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea. Using a prompt word in each line was due to my not being quite sure of the rules!! [thought best be on the safe side:) ] Best regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 12/4/2019 1:17:00 PM

Your creativity always shines in your ability to be descriptive and succinct while displaying emotions so relatable Paul. This is a great entry! : ) xxoo

Paul Callus
Date: 12/5/2019 4:11:00 PM

Your generous, complimentary remarks are music to my ears, Connie...thank you! Warm regards // paul

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 12/4/2019 5:41:00 AM

Phantasmagorical writing dearest, Paul! A fav.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/4/2019 6:58:00 AM

Thank you, Demi. Both the fantastic comment and fav are much appreciated! Have a nice day. Regards // paul

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 12/4/2019 3:47:00 AM

Awesome Paul - such excellent poetic structure and craftsmanship in this write - 5 words say it all! Best of luck in the contest, Warm regards and hugs, Jenny.