Paul Callus Poet Quintain (Sicilian)

Her Parting Words

Like a cork bobbing, thrown about
upon the waves by frenzy spurred
my train of thought zoomed in and out,
I tried to focus: last words, slurred,
so near…so far…I swirled in doubt. 

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Sicilian Quintain: rhyme sequence: a. b. a. b. a.
Five Word Challenge Contest
Prompt words: tried, far, train, upon, cork
Hosted by Beth Evans
© 30th November 2019

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Angela Crabtree November 17, 2020 at 1:40 PM You're very creative in your writing, Paul. I enjoy reading your many different styles :) Paul Callus November 19, 2020 at 6:03 AM Thank you, Angela. I enjoy trying out different forms of poetry, though my writing style probably comes out in most of them:) Regards // paul

Eileen Manassian April 19, 2020 at 6:51 AM Nice way you watched those words in bold into your tapestry. You're a poet extraordinaire. Paul Callus April 19, 2020 at 12:13 PM Thank you, Eileen; you never fail to encourage :) Hope you had a relaxed weekend. Hugs // paul

Lindsay Laurie December 16, 2019 at 11:40 PM G'day Paul … pure poetry indeed - well done Paul - Lindsay Paul Callus December 17, 2019 at 1:54 PM Thank you for the compliments, Lindsay :) All the best // paul

Jennifer Proxenos December 14, 2019 at 11:10 AM Congratulations Paul on your winning poem - Christmas wishes, and blessings and hugs to you my friend and your wonderful family. Jennifer. Paul Callus December 14, 2019 at 3:32 PM Thank you so much, Jenny! May the spirit of Christmas fill your heart with joy! Blessings to you and your family! Warm regards & Hugs // paul

Rhoda Tripp December 10, 2019 at 10:53 PM Congratulatons on your well deserved win, Paul. Paul Callus December 11, 2019 at 1:21 PM Thank you, Rhoda; your support and string of consecutive visits are very much appreciated. Warm regards // paul

Supraja Kannan December 10, 2019 at 6:12 AM Wow! A brilliant one. So creative. Congratulations on your well deserved win... Paul Callus December 11, 2019 at 1:23 PM Thank you so much for your complimentary remarks, Supraja. Much obliged. Regards // paul

Anil Deo December 8, 2019 at 10:47 PM Brilliant as always, Paul Callus. Season's Blessings and many comforts/friends. Shalom shalom Dear Man & mensch. Paul Callus December 9, 2019 at 8:19 AM Thank you, my friend. A pleasure to have you visiting; had not realized you were back posting. Season's greetings to you and your loved ones. Peace & Blessings // paul

Na Na December 8, 2019 at 8:27 AM Congrats on your winning poem Paul Paul Callus December 8, 2019 at 1:23 PM Thank you, Gregory. All the best // paul

Reason A. Poteet December 8, 2019 at 4:50 AM One of the best here, Paul. A clear winner in my book - congrats for a fine quintain. I particularly like the "train" of thought, which shows creativity l Paul Callus December 8, 2019 at 1:23 PM Thank you for the complimentary comments, Reason. Best regards // paul

Caren Krutsinger December 5, 2019 at 10:50 PM Well done indeed. Good luck in the contest. Paul Callus December 8, 2019 at 11:15 AM Thank you, Caren. ave a lovely day! // paul

Andrea Dietrich December 4, 2019 at 2:00 PM very good use of the words using each in a separate line. Great job, Paul. I really like your entry. Paul Callus December 5, 2019 at 4:14 PM Thank you, Andrea. Using a prompt word in each line was due to my not being quite sure of the rules!! [thought best be on the safe side:) ] Best regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong December 4, 2019 at 1:17 PM Your creativity always shines in your ability to be descriptive and succinct while displaying emotions so relatable Paul. This is a great entry! : ) xxoo Paul Callus December 5, 2019 at 4:11 PM Your generous, complimentary remarks are music to my ears, Connie...thank you! Warm regards // paul

Demetrios Trifiatis December 4, 2019 at 5:41 AM Phantasmagorical writing dearest, Paul! A fav. Paul Callus December 4, 2019 at 6:58 AM Thank you, Demi. Both the fantastic comment and fav are much appreciated! Have a nice day. Regards // paul

Jennifer Proxenos December 4, 2019 at 3:47 AM Awesome Paul - such excellent poetic structure and craftsmanship in this write - 5 words say it all! Best of luck in the contest, Warm regards and hugs, Jenny.

Anne-Lise Andresen December 1, 2019 at 1:47 PM - Excellent written, Paul :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Paul Callus December 3, 2019 at 2:21 PM Thank you for reading and liking, Anne-Lise. Regards & Hugs // paul

Vijay Pandit December 1, 2019 at 7:35 AM You did this in rhythmic tone--excellent write Paul. Paul Callus December 3, 2019 at 2:21 PM Thank you so much, Vijay. I have to admit it was no easy task!! Regards // paul

Aqua Marine December 1, 2019 at 2:17 AM An emotive use of the five words, Paul - excellent penmanship! Best wishes for the contest! Warm regards- Aqua M. Paul Callus December 3, 2019 at 2:19 PM Thank you, Aqua. Your consecutive visits are truly appreciated. Warm regards // paul

Sandra Adams November 30, 2019 at 9:04 PM brilliantly penned Paul...best wishes in the contest... hugs Paul Callus December 3, 2019 at 2:18 PM Many thanks to you, Sandra. Always a pleasure to have you visiting. Regards // paul

Na Na November 30, 2019 at 7:26 PM Hi Paul this is really good. Best of luck in the contest Paul Callus December 3, 2019 at 2:16 PM So pleased you found it to your liking, Greg; thank you. Regards // paul

Eve Roper November 30, 2019 at 6:54 PM Very well done, Paul, use of words and rhyme with great flow. Good luck in the contest. Paul Callus December 3, 2019 at 2:16 PM Thank you, Eve. I enjoyed your entry, too. Have a nice day. Hugs // paul