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Her Nectar Kiss

Within he lost his zest for life When death came by and stole his wife His heart went cold Felt weak and old His soul and mind in constant strife. In loneliness he found a friend The only one to understand His hermit ways The grieving days The acrid drink he kept at hand. Till one dark night, as snow fell deep And rest he tried in vain to reap A fairy came She called his name And lulled him into gentle sleep. Her breath she blew across his face Then on his lips she bent to place Like nectar sweet A kiss - a treat Embittered feelings to replace. He woke at dawn and was aware That there was music in the air Joy in his heart A brand new start With lots of hope and love to share. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - Contest: Just a Little Bit of Sugar Sponsor: Debbie Guzzi © 21st February 2017

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Date: 1/28/2018 3:36:00 PM
Alluring rhythm and rhymes moved me through your enchanting poem Paul. To me this poem represents his surrender of angst and grief to a heavenly being - an angel or the Holy Spirit. Joy, hope and love could then replace the cold, barren landscape of his heart... Warmest wishes and I hope all is well my friend.. ~Susan
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Date: 1/29/2018 11:07:00 AM
You have poetically ticked off all the main points of this poem, Susan:) Thank you for your attentive reading! ~ Warm regards // paul
Date: 7/12/2017 8:03:00 AM
Paul this was put on before I joined PS, but the name intrigued me and I had to take a look. What a wonderful hopeful ending to a very sad start. I love the way you've brought an ethereal fairy like whimsical charm to this beautiful poem. I love it and have to fave it...Maria
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Date: 7/12/2017 3:56:00 PM
Titles are often used to bait readers, Maria, though I don't do it intentionally:) I love your feedback, and the fav! Regards // paul
Date: 4/22/2017 3:43:00 AM
I like how you've adapted a limerick-esque approach to this one, but flipped it on its head to become a powerful and emotionally-soaked tale, rather than a ribald offering. Hats off to you! Regards, John.
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Date: 4/23/2017 3:50:00 PM
I enjoyed this feedback of yours, John. Thank you. Regards // paul
Date: 3/2/2017 12:44:00 PM
What a sweet taste that must have left on the sour part of this man's life..Indeed touching and excellent entry for the contest in my opinion. AWESOME.A Seven.
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Date: 3/3/2017 10:19:00 AM
Thank you for the delightful feedback, Charm. I don't enter many contests nowadays, but I look to them for inspiration. Best regards and have a lovely weekend. ~ paul
Date: 2/25/2017 11:48:00 AM
The visit from the fairy was like a visit from his lost loved one. How "sweet" that he woke up feeling renewed and happy to start again. She would have wanted that for him. Best wishes in the contest, Paul!
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Date: 2/25/2017 3:18:00 PM
I like your insightful feedback, Carolyn. Your comments are never bereft of meaning! Enjoy the weekend. Hugs // paul
Date: 2/25/2017 7:56:00 AM
Your words are enhanced by the form of this poem Paul. Does it have a name? I love the up lifting message that conveys a way out of the darkness of grief. Beautifully written! : ) 7
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Date: 2/25/2017 8:42:00 AM
Thank you for the insightful comments, Connie. I'm glad you like it. I used no particular form; it very much resembles the buildup of a Limerick (although not in content). ~ Have a lovely weekend...paul
Date: 2/24/2017 10:48:00 PM
I interpret the fairy as an angel calling him home to heaven. A beautiful poem, Paul. Good luck in the sugar contest
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Date: 2/25/2017 8:16:00 AM
I like your interpretation, Andrea...and thank you for liking. Regards // paul
Date: 2/24/2017 6:02:00 AM
I think he reached heaven in the last stanza, didn't he, Paul? Well, that's how I interpret this nectar write and love it:)
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Date: 2/24/2017 12:51:00 PM
You make a most valid interpretational point, Jo. Thank you for your contribution:) Regards // paul
Date: 2/23/2017 7:47:00 PM
This is an interesting story, described with feelings written by the heart and edited by the soul. You have a magic way in telling a story like this that brings it all to life my friend. Emile.
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Date: 2/24/2017 12:24:00 PM
Your ability at giving insightful feedback has not changed a bit, Emile:) Thank you! ~ Regards // paul
Date: 2/23/2017 4:48:00 PM
If ever I see Paul Callus put out a bad poem, I will know I'm in an alternate universe. Cheers, Paul. : )
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Date: 2/24/2017 12:05:00 PM
You are too kind, my friend Doug:) Thank you for a pleasant visit! Regards // paul
Date: 2/23/2017 8:14:00 AM
It's nice to be back and read this sugary sweet piece of yours, Paul!! It tastes like honey and flows so sweetly! Lucky me! Thank you!
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Date: 2/23/2017 3:04:00 PM
Oh Child of the Moon...it's also nice to have you back, especially with lovely comments like these:) Thank you...a pleasure to have you stopping by! Warm regards // paul
Date: 2/23/2017 6:04:00 AM
A festival of sounds in rhyme on a theme sublime, Paul ... Regards ... GL ...
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Date: 2/23/2017 3:01:00 PM
Your lovely comments are appreciated, Probir; thank you! Regards // paul
Date: 2/23/2017 3:19:00 AM
This reads like a dream come true, and the last verse, the wonderful dawning of all that is possible. Great writing, a pleasure to read :-) My best to you in the contest. blessings, lynn
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Date: 2/23/2017 1:59:00 PM
You read the poem well, Lynn:) Thank you for your feedback. Warm regards // paul
Date: 2/23/2017 3:01:00 AM
- A very beautiful poem, Paul - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 2/23/2017 1:50:00 PM
Thank you, Anne-Lise :) Hugs // paul
Date: 2/22/2017 7:58:00 PM
So well done Paul, a wonderful tale...
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Date: 2/23/2017 1:43:00 PM
Thank you, Charlie. Regards // paul
Date: 2/22/2017 7:53:00 PM
I LOVE this poem, Paul. Perhaps she'll come visit me:)
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Date: 2/23/2017 1:38:00 PM
Never say never, Danny:) Best regards, my friend. // paul
Date: 2/22/2017 4:55:00 PM
That feeling of being loved is very powerful. Lovely poem Paul
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Date: 2/23/2017 1:10:00 PM
Thank you, Tim. // Regards // paul
Date: 2/22/2017 4:49:00 PM
Paul, this was so good, so uplifting and so filled with happiness that I could not contain my smile as I got to the end. And speaking of the end, that final verse blew me away. Oh, it also contained just a little bit of sugar, not too much, just right I think for the contest. Good luck my friend.
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Date: 2/22/2017 4:59:00 PM
Hey, Chris, you were quick on the draw:) Thank you for the lovely insightful comments, and the good luck wishes. Goodnight my friend...here it's nearly midnight. Maybe one more visit and then off to bed! // paul

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