Paul Callus Poet Rhyme

Her Nectar Kiss

Within he lost his zest for life
When death came by and stole his wife
His heart went cold
Felt weak and old
His soul and mind in constant strife.

In loneliness he found a friend
The only one to understand
His hermit ways
The grieving days
The acrid drink he kept at hand.

Till one dark night, as snow fell deep
And rest he tried in vain to reap
A fairy came
She called his name
And lulled him into gentle sleep.

Her breath she blew across his face
Then on his lips she bent to place
Like nectar sweet
A kiss - a treat
Embittered feelings to replace. 

He woke at dawn and was aware
That there was music in the air
Joy in his heart
A brand new start
With lots of hope and love to share.

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Contest: Just a Little Bit of Sugar
Sponsor: Debbie Guzzi

© 21st February 2017

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Susan Ashley January 28, 2018 at 3:36 PM Alluring rhythm and rhymes moved me through your enchanting poem Paul. To me this poem represents his surrender of angst and grief to a heavenly being - an angel or the Holy Spirit. Joy, hope and love could then replace the cold, barren landscape of his heart... Warmest wishes and I hope all is well my friend.. ~Susan Paul Callus January 29, 2018 at 11:07 AM You have poetically ticked off all the main points of this poem, Susan:) Thank you for your attentive reading! ~ Warm regards // paul

Maria Williams July 12, 2017 at 8:03 AM Paul this was put on before I joined PS, but the name intrigued me and I had to take a look. What a wonderful hopeful ending to a very sad start. I love the way you've brought an ethereal fairy like whimsical charm to this beautiful poem. I love it and have to fave it...Maria Paul Callus July 12, 2017 at 3:56 PM Titles are often used to bait readers, Maria, though I don't do it intentionally:) I love your feedback, and the fav! Regards // paul

John Michaels April 22, 2017 at 3:43 AM I like how you've adapted a limerick-esque approach to this one, but flipped it on its head to become a powerful and emotionally-soaked tale, rather than a ribald offering. Hats off to you! Regards, John. Paul Callus April 23, 2017 at 3:50 PM I enjoyed this feedback of yours, John. Thank you. Regards // paul

Charmaine Chircop March 2, 2017 at 12:44 PM What a sweet taste that must have left on the sour part of this man's life..Indeed touching and excellent entry for the contest in my opinion. AWESOME.A Seven. Paul Callus March 3, 2017 at 10:19 AM Thank you for the delightful feedback, Charm. I don't enter many contests nowadays, but I look to them for inspiration. Best regards and have a lovely weekend. ~ paul

Carolyn Devonshire February 25, 2017 at 11:48 AM The visit from the fairy was like a visit from his lost loved one. How "sweet" that he woke up feeling renewed and happy to start again. She would have wanted that for him. Best wishes in the contest, Paul! Paul Callus February 25, 2017 at 3:18 PM I like your insightful feedback, Carolyn. Your comments are never bereft of meaning! Enjoy the weekend. Hugs // paul

Connie Marcum Wong February 25, 2017 at 7:56 AM Your words are enhanced by the form of this poem Paul. Does it have a name? I love the up lifting message that conveys a way out of the darkness of grief. Beautifully written! : ) 7 Paul Callus February 25, 2017 at 8:42 AM Thank you for the insightful comments, Connie. I'm glad you like it. I used no particular form; it very much resembles the buildup of a Limerick (although not in content). ~ Have a lovely weekend...paul

Andrea Dietrich February 24, 2017 at 10:48 PM I interpret the fairy as an angel calling him home to heaven. A beautiful poem, Paul. Good luck in the sugar contest Paul Callus February 25, 2017 at 8:16 AM I like your interpretation, Andrea...and thank you for liking. Regards // paul

Joanna Daniel February 24, 2017 at 6:02 AM I think he reached heaven in the last stanza, didn't he, Paul? Well, that's how I interpret this nectar write and love it:) Paul Callus February 24, 2017 at 12:51 PM You make a most valid interpretational point, Jo. Thank you for your contribution:) Regards // paul

Emile Pinet February 23, 2017 at 7:47 PM This is an interesting story, described with feelings written by the heart and edited by the soul. You have a magic way in telling a story like this that brings it all to life my friend. Emile. Paul Callus February 24, 2017 at 12:24 PM Your ability at giving insightful feedback has not changed a bit, Emile:) Thank you! ~ Regards // paul

Doug Vinson February 23, 2017 at 4:48 PM If ever I see Paul Callus put out a bad poem, I will know I'm in an alternate universe. Cheers, Paul. : ) Paul Callus February 24, 2017 at 12:05 PM You are too kind, my friend Doug:) Thank you for a pleasant visit! Regards // paul

Hija De La Luna February 23, 2017 at 8:14 AM It's nice to be back and read this sugary sweet piece of yours, Paul!! It tastes like honey and flows so sweetly! Lucky me! Thank you! Paul Callus February 23, 2017 at 3:04 PM Oh Child of the Moon...it's also nice to have you back, especially with lovely comments like these:) Thank you...a pleasure to have you stopping by! Warm regards // paul

Probir Gupta February 23, 2017 at 6:04 AM A festival of sounds in rhyme on a theme sublime, Paul ... Regards ... GL ... Paul Callus February 23, 2017 at 3:01 PM Your lovely comments are appreciated, Probir; thank you! Regards // paul

Lynn Marie February 23, 2017 at 3:19 AM This reads like a dream come true, and the last verse, the wonderful dawning of all that is possible. Great writing, a pleasure to read :-) My best to you in the contest. blessings, lynn Paul Callus February 23, 2017 at 1:59 PM You read the poem well, Lynn:) Thank you for your feedback. Warm regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen February 23, 2017 at 3:01 AM - A very beautiful poem, Paul - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Paul Callus February 23, 2017 at 1:50 PM Thank you, Anne-Lise :) Hugs // paul

Charlie Smith February 22, 2017 at 7:58 PM So well done Paul, a wonderful tale... Paul Callus February 23, 2017 at 1:43 PM Thank you, Charlie. Regards // paul

Daniel Turner February 22, 2017 at 7:53 PM I LOVE this poem, Paul. Perhaps she'll come visit me:) Paul Callus February 23, 2017 at 1:38 PM Never say never, Danny:) Best regards, my friend. // paul

Tim Smith February 22, 2017 at 4:55 PM That feeling of being loved is very powerful. Lovely poem Paul Paul Callus February 23, 2017 at 1:10 PM Thank you, Tim. // Regards // paul

Chris Green February 22, 2017 at 4:49 PM Paul, this was so good, so uplifting and so filled with happiness that I could not contain my smile as I got to the end. And speaking of the end, that final verse blew me away. Oh, it also contained just a little bit of sugar, not too much, just right I think for the contest. Good luck my friend. Paul Callus February 22, 2017 at 4:59 PM Hey, Chris, you were quick on the draw:) Thank you for the lovely insightful comments, and the good luck wishes. Goodnight my friend...here it's nearly midnight. Maybe one more visit and then off to bed! // paul