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Her Eyes Near the Shallows

The virgin under the pristine sheet, patrols the creaking, cut, timber of time, through the blooming roses and the sleet. The grandiose grandfather chimes. She used to shine her eyes near the shallows. The young lass can only shriek her woes. Her eyes, bright as the moon, on the gallows. For now she bids welcome under bedding clothes. Her arms writhe like the wind on the cliffs. Her feet, hidden beneath the grave cold sheet. No eye holes needed. It creeps out the stiffs. She performs a trick when they beg for treats. The light-as-a-cloud lass, floats just above the grass. When the ghosts, goblins and vampires notice they tremble, they turn pale under their first class masks. The naysayers are given notice! If they think, or call her a spook, or a guy, she tears the snow white sheet off, and makes a spectacle of her hollow cheeks, tangled hair, truant jaw. Fears, beyond terror, make the living bully sensible. The pale virgin roams, as long as there's day and night, as long as seasons come and go, though she longs for sleep. She moves by her own will - no wrong or right. The lass longs for quiet, under soil, six feet deep.

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Date: 10/4/2023 1:07:00 PM
This poem is innovative, captivating, and three-dimensional in character. You have painted a picture with words that tantalize, tease, and catapult the reader into a frightening fantasy. Your talent and poetic energy wrap around your words, and we crave more. This poem is pure fantasy, yet flows off the tongue like syrup, leaving a bittersweet aftertaste...delicious!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/4/2023 1:27:00 PM
Thank you so much! I appreciate you, Emile!
Date: 10/4/2023 11:13:00 AM
Well deserved placement, Kim :) This poem has twists and turns and is beautifully written, deserving multiple reads. Very spookily, eerily enjoyable :)) I love the Wuthering line: "Her arms writhe like the wind on the cliffs."
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/4/2023 1:27:00 PM
Thank you :)
Date: 10/4/2023 5:10:00 AM
Oh ! This poem gave me the shivers, yet took me right back to my first time, which was a long time ago! ThkU. I liked the way you mixed the Light with the Dark. So necessary for the times we are living through. ??
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/4/2023 5:55:00 AM
Thank you, sweet one. Put a blanket around those shoulders. Hugs
Date: 10/4/2023 2:42:00 AM
What a splendid poem! I immediately fell in love with it even though it's on the dark side (which I love). Your imagination runs riot with splendid rhyme, imagery and tale. Blessings and hugs for a great poem.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/4/2023 5:56:00 AM
Thank you so much, my dear friend!
Date: 10/3/2023 9:10:00 PM
Very deep poem. Perfect for Halloween as it moves closer to our doorstep. If for contest, good luck. Hugs and blessings
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/4/2023 5:56:00 AM
Thank you, Eve! Hugs and blessings xx
Date: 10/3/2023 8:23:00 PM
This is very spooky and immensely intriguing, Kim! Love how your imagination works..your storytelling is masterful! Love this! :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/4/2023 5:56:00 AM
I so appreciate you, Laura! :)
Date: 10/3/2023 7:26:00 PM
wow such a thrill to read Kim, congrats on your wonderfully penned poem,
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/3/2023 7:27:00 PM
Thank you so much, sweet poet!
Date: 10/3/2023 3:38:00 PM
"The light-as-a-cloud lass, floats just above the grass", and "The lass longs for quiet, under soil, six feet deep". Eye-opening lines, indeed, Kim! Fine rhythmic flow, my bonnie lass!, Aloha, William
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/3/2023 4:42:00 PM
Thanks, William and for the smile

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