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Her Brittle Hands

Another layer of lavender scented lotion Rubbed in vehement laughter A quelling of sadness Covered up in mascara insanity Livid strokes of feathered paintbrushes Hoping to see the big picture She cried like oil paintings without a purpose. A treasure hunter searching for rubbery remedies Without heart’s sanctified atrium To light the way She bled from carnivorous pores Bites against feeding palms Struggling licks upon pacifier wounds Mouth Shut Stone’s lonely lyric Thrown against fragile lighthouses Beaming through unacceptable horizons Investigation of deity’s hidden agenda, She questions validation’s esophagus Its vocal chords Torn Another squeeze from lavender bottle Empty Its exhales shedding infantile whisper … A bounced reality check Declaring that it wasn’t a disease That afflicted her bones ©Drake J. Eszes

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 11/9/2013 6:17:00 PM
Nope Nette didn't send me out. I have enjoyed reading this one again Drake. Her brittle hands grabbed me once again.
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Date: 8/25/2013 4:26:00 PM
Lavender again....Hmmmmmm...you are taken with this color. I am too. My favorite! :) I just wanted to pass by to say hi...been...a little CRAZY lately, but hey...that's my life. Hope all is well with you. Read this again...One day...when I visit Cali, you are going to go through this LINE BY LINE! ;)
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Date: 8/25/2013 4:45:00 PM
Ha. Deal. :) Thank you so much, Eileen.
Date: 7/11/2013 9:39:00 PM
Oh, Drake.....it takes a lot to make me speechless but you done it. Amazing poem.
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Date: 7/12/2013 12:13:00 AM
WOO HOO! Mission accomplished! Making poets speechless isn't an easy thing to do. :) I'm glad you stopped by here! That means a lot!
Date: 7/11/2013 5:05:00 PM
All the paint in the world will not hide the pain beneath the surface. Well written! Betty
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Date: 7/11/2013 5:50:00 PM
Precisely! You got it. :) Thanks so much! Nice to see you here, Betty.
Date: 7/10/2013 1:27:00 PM
She cried like oil paintings without a purpose. Looks like someone already has given you praise for this fine line of poetry--but I will concur. The interest to me is the body beneath the hands...this piece would be enriched as a two part...give one part to the other body in the story....could be lover, could be her baby...well done, Drake.
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Date: 7/10/2013 2:03:00 PM
Indeed! Interesting take on that. Hmm. :) Thanks so much, Victoria!
Date: 6/28/2013 5:57:00 PM
Drake, You wind the theme with impeccable verse... "She cried like oil paintings without a purpose"... brilliance
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Date: 6/28/2013 10:42:00 PM
Many, many thanks to you, Karen! :)
Date: 6/26/2013 12:06:00 AM
Such a unique style you have. Another great one. I dunno if you know who Justin Bordner is, but I think you may like his poetry(he's on the soup). Anyhow, it was just a thought. Deep, gripping words in every verse. Loved! Always, Laura
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Date: 6/28/2013 10:42:00 PM
Hi, Laura! :) Thank you very much! I do know who Justin is. He's quite good. Thank you again for coming by here!
Date: 6/25/2013 9:30:00 AM
Ow Drake that mascara can t always hide the sadness..the pain..At a time in life its going to smudge all over..and tears will flow like the cry from oil paintings without a purpose.Outstanding..you are awesome
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Date: 6/25/2013 9:34:00 AM
:) No, YOU are awesome!!! Terrific analysis! :) Thank you so much, Charmaine!
Date: 6/25/2013 9:20:00 AM
My newest fave poem, Drake.. thanks for sharing this beautiful lines..
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Date: 6/25/2013 9:24:00 AM
Hi, Shirley!!!! You're ok! :) Awesome! Thank you so much for your sweet words!
Date: 6/24/2013 7:28:00 PM
Another squeeze from an empty bottle,exhales infantile whisper ...sad...deep...the whole poem Drake...love your take on things and life
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Date: 6/24/2013 8:52:00 PM
Hi & thank you so much, Donna. :) I do what I can.
Date: 6/24/2013 12:20:00 PM
enjoyed your radio show, drake..:) huggs
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Date: 6/24/2013 12:56:00 PM
Awesome! :) Thank you!
Date: 6/24/2013 11:23:00 AM
My absolute favourite of yours so far!!! There is so much going on in this one - so much to think about and interpret, which is what I love about poetry. I would love to hear you read this one on your show!
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Date: 6/24/2013 11:42:00 AM
Hi, Heather!!! Perhaps I will read it. I think I may do another show next week. I'll let you all know on my blog. I aim to get those to think as best I can. Thanks so much! :)
Date: 6/24/2013 12:45:00 AM
The inner pain at the centre of our being cannot be covered-up by external embellishment. Well-written piece of work, Drake... David
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Date: 6/24/2013 7:07:00 AM
Spot on analysis, David. Thank you so much for coming by here! :)
Date: 6/23/2013 6:42:00 PM
Dropped by looking for a new poem also to say hello. One out of two ain't bad.
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Date: 6/23/2013 8:18:00 PM
Ha! Hi Richard! Did Nette set you out to do this? :) Thanks so much!!! You're awesome!
Date: 6/23/2013 2:04:00 PM
hello darke, your fingers need a new write... looking forward!..:) huggs
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Date: 6/23/2013 2:10:00 PM
You called me Darke, HA! :) I'll have something new soon enough. ;)
Date: 6/23/2013 10:43:00 AM
Very moving write !!
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Date: 6/23/2013 10:48:00 AM
Hi & thank you, Debra! :)
Date: 6/23/2013 4:32:00 AM
My gash Drake u have given a talented hand, writing this kind of piece makes my mouth to shut! LOL ur amazing,,, U R!
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Date: 6/23/2013 7:36:00 AM
LOL well I don't wanna do that! I want to hear you speak! Or type, whichever. :) Thanks so much, Elai!!
Date: 6/22/2013 7:55:00 PM
You almost write beyond the boundaries of my comprehension. That is really no difficult task. But, my friend, One thing I do understand is the artist that lives in you. Keep writing and I will continue to read and pick up enough to appreciate your craft.... Deepest respect.....Jake
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Date: 6/22/2013 8:36:00 PM
There aren't enough words to express my gratitude for this kind of comment, John. For now, thank you so much for that. Truly.
Date: 6/22/2013 10:00:00 AM
Beauty at it's innocent best.....loved it................=)=)=)
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Date: 6/22/2013 11:10:00 AM
Thanks so much! :) I appreciate that!
Date: 6/22/2013 8:48:00 AM
If I were to read between the lines, (maybe more than I should), I feel so sorry for her.....that there is something beyond her control, that she covers with lotion, mascara, frantic insanity, anything she can do to drown the reality.....but perhaps that is how we all "deal" with what is dished out to us if we must survive it? Wow....great poem!
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Date: 6/22/2013 9:06:00 AM
Well, did I drive your mind or what? :) Now, having said your perspective, I have to agree. It is a pretty sad state of affairs. I've met a few like this. Grown adults, young & old. While I'm familiar with the whole "fake it til you make it" approach, I think I've outgrown that. For some, I know it's all they have...sadly. Thank you for your awesome comments, Carrie! :)
Date: 6/22/2013 6:53:00 AM
I was wondering how you were going to connect the poem with the title. Great job.
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Date: 6/22/2013 7:50:00 AM
Ha! :) I'm glad I justified it. Thanks so much, Rich!
Date: 6/21/2013 8:10:00 PM
She cried like oil paintings without a purpose...wow I have to disect this poem & process it lol:) ...luv your mind...thanks 4 your comments on my writes...ty4 sharing...cherie
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Date: 6/22/2013 1:03:00 AM
:) That's greatly appreciated, Cherie! Thanks so much.
Date: 6/21/2013 3:43:00 PM
Nice flow, good ending and the image each line drew was vivid in this piece. A great read!
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Date: 6/21/2013 3:59:00 PM
Hey there! :) Thank you so much, Lynn! I appreciate that!
Date: 6/21/2013 3:10:00 PM
Love the impact of the final lines, drake. That's what really calls attention to a good poem, getting it ended just right. Great imagery!
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Date: 6/21/2013 3:15:00 PM
Hi, Andrea!!!!! I agree. It's so important to put the whipped cream on a good pie. ;) Thanks so much!
Date: 6/21/2013 3:09:00 PM
She questions validation's esophagus....what a statement! Drake...your images are so different for me...I honestly don't grasp them all! I must be dim witted! ;( I wish you would explain.....thanks for the visits to my work! :) You always bring a smile!
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Date: 6/22/2013 11:09:00 AM
Well....Here are some more for ya :) :) :) :) :)
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Date: 6/21/2013 3:14:00 PM
Hi there, Eileen! :) Well, if you need a better explanation on something I said, just ask. :) You can ask me here or Soup Mail me. I'll be glad to break it down for you. Thank you so much for coming by and YAY for bringing you smiles! :)
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