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Helplessly - Hopelessy

We have our trials, but there are
some souls who never get too far.
They barely even learned to crawl.
Helplessly - hopelessly - they fall.

The homeless and the addict who
inhabit streets; what can they do?
Some live a storm that has no lull.
Helplessly - hopelessly - they fall.

The wife abused, the poor child born
to messed up folks, and the forlorn -
They’re pressed against a stone cold wall.
Helplessly - hopelessly - they fall.

How difficult for those who thrive
to comprehend such tragic lives.
Before they’re shrouded by their pall,
helplessly - hopelessly - they fall.


For PD's 100 in a ROW contest -- 
11 PREMIERE number Poetry Contest

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Sunita U.D Palawon

Date: 8/19/2016 9:31:00 AM

I like this form and the repetition...Congrats on your placing. :) Sunita

Charlie Smith

Date: 8/19/2016 8:31:00 AM

So sadly well done Anfrea, congratulations.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/18/2016 7:30:00 PM

Hello Lovely Andrea, Congratulations on your awesome win. Stop by my blog "Don't Come" if you'd like. Enjoy your win. Always & Forever ~LINDA~

Tom Arnone

Date: 8/18/2016 7:25:00 PM

A sad commentary without a solution. I would have titled it, They Fall. Nice, Andrea....

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 8/20/2014 1:29:00 PM

You so hit it on the head with this poem. They must really feel helpless and hopeless in life. Awesome love phyl

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/9/2014 9:55:00 AM

Andrea,, Congratulations, on your win in Cyndi's "HELPLESS, KYRIELLE CONTEST." take care -LINDA-

Tim Ryerson

Date: 6/6/2014 4:31:00 AM

'Before they’re shrouded by their pall' and 'They’re pressed against a stone cold wall' were my favorite lines among many...Also loved your use of alliteration 'Helplessly - hopelessly' in the refrain...BIG congrats - Tim

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 6/5/2014 2:16:00 AM

Perfect Kyrielle with apt take on the theme, congrats on a fine win, andrea

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 6/4/2014 10:25:00 PM

Really pathetic Andrea ! what a wonderful write,, congrats on great win !

Joseph May

Date: 6/4/2014 6:16:00 PM

A sad state of affairs...Congrats on your win Andrea

Faye Gibson

Date: 6/4/2014 3:44:00 PM

Great poem, Andrea. So much sadness in our world. You expressed their plight well.

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 6/4/2014 3:06:00 PM

Congrats on another fine win. I guess there really is no comprehending. BG

Cyndi Macmillan

Date: 6/4/2014 2:13:00 PM

Congratulations on your win in our contest, Andrea. I felt that your kyrielle had the BEST flow -- flawless execution of enjambment that made for a solid write. I also liked how you included many in your poem... encapsulating sad plights. Good job. Thanks for the entry.. and the patience with the judges ;) Cyndi

Paul Callus

Date: 6/4/2014 1:10:00 PM

A very expressive poem where the refrain sums it all up. Many of us have it so good, and yet we do not realize or even get near to appreciate it! Congrats on your win, Andrea. // paul

Bl Devnath

Date: 5/12/2014 11:45:00 AM

Reality in all the ways of those who helplessly-hopelessly-fall. An acute observation and a heart felt adoration. Good luck in the contest, my lovely friend. Loved always, bl

Verlena S. Walker

Date: 5/10/2014 12:26:00 PM

Andrea this is heartfelt. It tells a life story of truth and hope. GL in the contest. Verlena

Jack Horne

Date: 5/5/2014 10:32:00 AM

heartfelt write here, my friend

Angie Thomas

Date: 5/4/2014 11:19:00 AM

a poem with a ring of truth to it... its a good poem

Joe Maverick

Date: 5/2/2014 3:30:00 PM

Really putting a light on the way life is for some other people in adverse situations Andrea..' you have well portrayed the haphazard way of things yet also the driving consistency of untoward events and effects that push down on them..'

Karen Anglesey

Date: 4/30/2014 8:59:00 PM

Excellent portrayal the Helpless and Hopeless is very difficult to understand for us who work so hard to maintain a secure and comfortable life, Missed reading your work !

Jeffrey Bovee

Date: 4/30/2014 8:23:00 PM

Wow! Good stuff for sure,I was impressed also with seeing you post a poem everyday. Definitely shows a lot of love for the written word . Your work is wonderful. Peace Jeffrey nx

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 4/30/2014 4:41:00 PM

Hi dear Andrea..I felt helplessly hopeless trying to be on other sites for a whole month..And here I am so happy to be here reading this poem which describes so deeply..such pain of those who suffer in silence many a time.Missed you lady and your outstanding poetry too.

Robert Johnson

Date: 4/30/2014 10:11:00 AM

When shadows start to be your friend, it will always feel like it's the end. And maybe you don't feel alive. But with some help you can survive. As Jesus said so long ago. Do for the least because you know. He'll do for you when it's time to go. So much of your heart went into this Andrea. And in turn, touch's our hearts. Peace. :)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 4/30/2014 8:47:00 AM

This poem reveals your heart, it is good to bring people's attention to the struggles of others. So many merely walk by those in distress. We fail to realize that at any time we could be them.