Michael Jordan Poet Rhyme

Hell's An Option

If I die alone I reckon
That’s how I should go
Sometimes I feel alone
Deep inside of my soul
Tell me does it matter
Anything I have to say
I think everyone of us
Have our own bad day
As this day passes by
I will say me a prayer
If it gets heard or not
Think I could really care
I have done the best I can
And that’s all that I can do
If that isn’t good enough
Then hell’s an option too


Written for Sami's contest
and in no way a reflection
on my current state of mind.

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Robyn Blauw April 18, 2009 at 4:09 AM This one touched me.....

Charmaine Chircop April 13, 2009 at 2:47 PM all of us have our bad days that is so true,but to wake up healthy seeing the sun each morning surely gives us a good day,i know this isnt your current state of mind-keep smiling,keep shining-charma

Anthony Nutter April 11, 2009 at 5:00 AM Nice poem and a good way to release emotions and feelings. You may not feel this way currently but I have felt this way many times in the past.

Yoni Dvorkis April 10, 2009 at 10:53 AM Hi Michael, it's interesting to me that you comment at the end of this beautiful piece how this doesn't reflect the way you feel right now. Sometimes writing can be more exploratory where you dress yourself up in a different mindset and write from there. Almost as though you're a different person. If you intended it that way then I think it works very well. Oh and yeah it's me who wanted your pdf file with your work. I'll soup mail you my address again. -Yoni

Kat Crane April 7, 2009 at 6:25 PM I Love this. We all need to shrug off those feelings every now and then with a devil may care attitude. Good luck for the contest

L'Nass Shango April 5, 2009 at 4:27 AM Every utterance of honesty is a genuine prayer, every plea is call for faith that giveth the peace passing all understanding. A great poem on the internal reflection we share. Yahweh is an unfailing rock, check him across the threshold of faith again. Prayers and love.

Tariq Zaqout April 4, 2009 at 1:45 PM Awesome rhyme scheme, amazing words, and deep meanings, just what it needs to be as perfect ! Best wishes for ur contest Tariq Zaqout

Anna-Marie Docherty April 4, 2009 at 12:46 AM Glad this is not really you, but well put to paper, just mind line 8's grammar - should 'have' be 'has' maybe? Hope it helps some, good luck in the contest, kindest thoughts, Anna-Marie.

Derrick Burton April 2, 2009 at 5:16 PM I love the title because it says so much about humanity, sounds funny but I sometimes think about these things or about old thing Ive done every time I think my time is near. From doing stupid things in my past. In a way I think we all do, think of hell instead of heaven where I want to go. Enjoyed this piece and have a great day, hope the docter trip went good for you.

John Loving Iii April 2, 2009 at 2:17 PM for me Hell is not an option. i've taken care of my salvation long ago and with God's help i will stay that way. john h loving iii

Michaela Payne April 2, 2009 at 1:35 PM So sadand depressing :( But I like it haha. Great write Michael. Good luck in the contest! Blessings, ~Michaela~

April 2, 2009 at 12:52 PM Well said. Nice use of rhyme to convey your message. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for your kind words on my haiku. Blessings to you. Karen

Carolyn Devonshire April 2, 2009 at 8:30 AM Very sad, MJ. Having seen so many family members and friends pass, I believe I will die alone. Certainly, however, a man with your faith will not have to fear the option of "hell." Beautifully written, MJ!

Arany P. April 2, 2009 at 7:58 AM surely touching and insipring! best wishes for the contest... a great entry... ~ Arany

Mary Duhart April 2, 2009 at 6:27 AM You do know how to capture your audience. Great write.

Raul Moreno April 2, 2009 at 12:34 AM Best of luck in the contest, nice flow...Raul

Brian Strand April 2, 2009 at 12:21 AM Best wishes with this one Michael.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen April 1, 2009 at 11:47 PM Very cynical. And thank God for the postscript. The last four lines were especially gripping for me. Great write. And thanks for your comments on my poem. Have a super penning day. With love from a new friend.

Elaine George April 1, 2009 at 9:40 PM Dear Micheal, Before I read the postscript, I was worried. lol. I am SOOOOOOOOO happy to hear you are writing a novel. I truly believe it is your next step. I am still struggling with my first draft and am sure I will have to re-write most of it again. I am talking a short break so I can give my mind a rest. bfn yf4l2 lainie

John Rhinem March 30, 2009 at 7:39 PM Smile~No Michael, Not For "You!":)~For whom shall 'ever' be able to pull "Your Beauty, From The Hands of Christ!?"~ Smile, and yes, even the best of us, have our not so pleasant days!? But, I see where Your write is coming from; in regards to this above contest mentioned!? And actually, I believe that this write has a very good shot, at placing very highly!!!:)~As always, "My Love To 'You & Your Loves,' Forever, John!!!"~Have A Very Beautiful Evening, Dear Brother!:)

John Tanaskow March 29, 2009 at 3:42 AM i kinda like it. brought a smile to my face. that dosen't happen everyday.

Tyesha Ehigiator March 28, 2009 at 8:52 PM Wow, The title is so scary I had to check it out..I am glad I got to the ending, I was about to say, NO WAY!! You really had me believing you felt this way, Oh my this was scary..We do have our dark days to where we are like, whatever is whatever and I've done all I could do and that's it. Fantastic write , you really described how many of us often feel at times...I am so happy this is not how you really feel and I hope all is well with you and your family...God Bless You Always, YF4L Tyesha

Iolanda Scripca March 28, 2009 at 1:54 PM Nice rhyme Michael. We all have empty, lonely hearts once in a while. Look, you made me cry now :) Good luck in Sami's contest. Love, iolanda

Frank F. Atanacio March 28, 2009 at 11:52 AM Good luck with this MJ and if you don't when-- well... Hell's an Option very well penned

Sue Mason March 28, 2009 at 11:47 AM Hmmm, guess I need to check out what Sami's contest is ... glad for your comment at the end otherwise I'd probably be filling you full of uplifting advice ... LOL ... anyway, haven't seen you around for awhile so I thought I'd come hollar at ya!! Sure hope they can hang on to this site ... I'd be lost without PoetrySoup and all the wonderful folks like you ... smile ... have a great Saturday!

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