Heaven's Brightest Lights

heaven’s brightest lights gracefully take a back seat... pyrotechnic stars
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December 21, 2015 at 4:19 PM
Sharon, I like this. :) **SKAT**
Brown Avatar
July 6, 2010 at 8:32 AM
Congratulations Sharon on your win in Deborah Guzzi's contest "Fireworks". Love, Carol
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July 6, 2010 at 2:04 AM
I do agree with Gerard and Andrea---but I'm also happy to see your name in the list--congrats nonetheless with this very creative haiku, Sharon! I hope you're having a relaxed day and evening--you soo deserve it--nikko :)
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July 5, 2010 at 6:10 PM
This might been higher, but I'm glad it made the list. It has a smooth, soothing flow, which is kind of a paradox, considering the holiday. Regards, Gerard.
Dietrich Avatar
July 5, 2010 at 1:44 PM
Sharon, I had really expected this one even higher on the list. It is awesome. LUv, Andrea
George   Avatar
July 5, 2010 at 9:40 AM
Exactly!!!! Great Haiku, Sharon. cognratulatios on your win in Deborah's contest. Love, Lainie
Bagnall Avatar
July 5, 2010 at 5:21 AM
I like your style
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July 4, 2010 at 6:45 PM
Congrats Sharon on your HM for your Haiku in the Fireworks contest with this remarkable write and honor to enjoy as u celebrate on the 4th in style.. with luv from the "Sweetheart" in Hawaii.. AlohA.
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July 4, 2010 at 4:34 PM
I liked this poem the first time I read it. Congratulations on your win in Deborah's contest. Enjoy your honor. Keep on writing. Karen
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July 4, 2010 at 9:10 AM
Wow! Love the last line, Sharon. The stars will be taking a back seat to the pyrotechnic illuminations tonight. Enjoy your Fourth of July! :) Carolyn
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July 3, 2010 at 11:27 PM
oh, my, THIS , my dear, is haiku!! By the way, I saw you commenting to Nikko on how your comment disappeared. And I know that your MARVELOUS poem did not get into Nikko's contest where it would have deservedly have won big there. CAn you figure out what is going on with you? You need to enter a contest and ask the judge if it is showing. If not, let the staff know. Sometimes our comments go to a new page under a person's poem, but I didn't see a new page under Nikko's. VERY stange. Luv, andrea
K. Avatar
July 3, 2010 at 6:00 PM
That's is so gracious indeed of those stars-- I really liked your take on this--very unique, Sharon! That last line was so cool too! I think it gave a good contrast to the "natural" stars--wish you the best in the contest! nikko :)
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July 3, 2010 at 1:45 PM
Simply breathtaking Sharon, good luck in the contest >> James
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July 3, 2010 at 10:33 AM
Interesting way the first and last lines work together for a creative perspective. Best wishes in the contest. Keep on writing. Thank you for your kind comments. Karen
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July 3, 2010 at 9:49 AM
Awesome write Sharon....Good Luck in the contest.....Larry
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July 3, 2010 at 9:46 AM
Awesome write Sharon....Good Luck in the contest.....Laeey
Mehta Avatar
July 3, 2010 at 7:10 AM
A wonderful entry to the the contest. Good luck. Wonderful apt images
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July 3, 2010 at 6:15 AM
form is almost perfect and yes it is haiku rather than senryu since its all nature & no man...line 2 is the least haiku-like and makes the read feel more like a sentence. Put an action in line 2 instead of a continued discription. At the end of line 2 put ... or -- which indicates the next line is the cutting line the line meant to evoke emtion regarding the topic. Hope this helps!
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July 3, 2010 at 5:53 AM
A winner my eyes....good luck. Michael
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July 3, 2010 at 4:38 AM
Great thought that went into this one..Should be in the winners' circle..Good luck..Sara
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