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Heaven's Brightest Lights

heaven’s brightest lights
gracefully take a back seat...
pyrotechnic stars

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Skat A

Date: 12/21/2015 4:19:00 PM

Sharon, I like this. :) **SKAT**

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 7/6/2010 8:32:00 AM

Congratulations Sharon on your win in Deborah Guzzi's contest "Fireworks". Love, Carol

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 7/6/2010 2:04:00 AM

I do agree with Gerard and Andrea---but I'm also happy to see your name in the list--congrats nonetheless with this very creative haiku, Sharon! I hope you're having a relaxed day and evening--you soo deserve it--nikko :)

Gerard Keogh Jr.

Date: 7/5/2010 6:10:00 PM

This might been higher, but I'm glad it made the list. It has a smooth, soothing flow, which is kind of a paradox, considering the holiday. Regards, Gerard.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/5/2010 1:44:00 PM

Sharon, I had really expected this one even higher on the list. It is awesome. LUv, Andrea

Elaine George

Date: 7/5/2010 9:40:00 AM

Exactly!!!! Great Haiku, Sharon. cognratulatios on your win in Deborah's contest. Love, Lainie

Nick Bagnall

Date: 7/5/2010 5:21:00 AM

I like your style

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 7/4/2010 6:45:00 PM

Congrats Sharon on your HM for your Haiku in the Fireworks contest with this remarkable write and honor to enjoy as u celebrate on the 4th in style.. with luv from the "Sweetheart" in Hawaii.. AlohA.

Date: 7/4/2010 4:34:00 PM

I liked this poem the first time I read it. Congratulations on your win in Deborah's contest. Enjoy your honor. Keep on writing. Karen

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 7/4/2010 9:10:00 AM

Wow! Love the last line, Sharon. The stars will be taking a back seat to the pyrotechnic illuminations tonight. Enjoy your Fourth of July! :) Carolyn

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/3/2010 11:27:00 PM

oh, my, THIS , my dear, is haiku!! By the way, I saw you commenting to Nikko on how your comment disappeared. And I know that your MARVELOUS poem did not get into Nikko's contest where it would have deservedly have won big there. CAn you figure out what is going on with you? You need to enter a contest and ask the judge if it is showing. If not, let the staff know. Sometimes our comments go to a new page under a person's poem, but I didn't see a new page under Nikko's. VERY stange. Luv, andrea

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 7/3/2010 6:00:00 PM

That's is so gracious indeed of those stars-- I really liked your take on this--very unique, Sharon! That last line was so cool too! I think it gave a good contrast to the "natural" stars--wish you the best in the contest! nikko :)

James Fraser

Date: 7/3/2010 1:45:00 PM

Simply breathtaking Sharon, good luck in the contest >> James

Date: 7/3/2010 10:33:00 AM

Interesting way the first and last lines work together for a creative perspective. Best wishes in the contest. Keep on writing. Thank you for your kind comments. Karen

Larry Belt

Date: 7/3/2010 9:49:00 AM

Awesome write Sharon....Good Luck in the contest.....Larry

Larry Belt

Date: 7/3/2010 9:46:00 AM

Awesome write Sharon....Good Luck in the contest.....Laeey

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 7/3/2010 7:10:00 AM

A wonderful entry to the the contest. Good luck. Wonderful apt images

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 7/3/2010 6:15:00 AM

form is almost perfect and yes it is haiku rather than senryu since its all nature & no man...line 2 is the least haiku-like and makes the read feel more like a sentence. Put an action in line 2 instead of a continued discription. At the end of line 2 put ... or -- which indicates the next line is the cutting line the line meant to evoke emtion regarding the topic. Hope this helps!