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Heartbreak Hill

Moments pass away as distant church bells dirge; their widow’s woe in windy waver trembles my tears. Up the westward hill smoldering neath sunset’s pyre, I carry the remains of our song in the broken beats of my being, yearning to yield to burning skies and surrender to spiralling empathic embers. Susan Ashley May 24, 2019 ~ First Place ~ Contest: May Premier 8 (4 - 5 Lines Max) Sponsor: Brian Strand

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Sandra Adams

Date: 6/27/2019 11:38:00 AM

this is gorgeous and written with such emotion the reader can see and feel this piece...Bravo, a well deserved win hugs

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/27/2019 10:29:00 PM

I relish your gracious visit and heartfelt response to my poem, Sandra. I’m inspired by your wonderful presence gracing my poetry page and I’m delighted that you enjoyed this piece. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Lonna Blodgett

Date: 6/20/2019 9:07:00 PM

This is stunning in its content and so vivid in its evocation!

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/22/2019 7:30:00 PM

Lonna, I relish your wonderful visit and your beautiful response to my poem. I'm so happy your enjoyed my work. Thank you for your kindness. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Anisha Dutta

Date: 6/2/2019 11:28:00 PM

BIG CONGRATS to win TOP on your wonderful poem. I am whelmed and touched.

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/4/2019 8:56:00 PM

I am touched by your beautiful comments and heartwarming congrats, Anisha. You are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Kurt Ravidas

Date: 6/1/2019 8:23:00 AM

Wow, perfect spiralling empathic gold! And heartbreaking alliterations too) Congrats, Susan.

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/1/2019 6:36:00 PM

Thank you, my talented and kind friend, for your radiant comments and heartwarming congrats. Your presence shines here, Kurt, and is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Charles Messina

Date: 5/29/2019 9:10:00 PM

This is a winner in any contest my dear friend, Congratulations Susan on your win in Brian's contest with this brilliant write. Hugs // Charlie

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/30/2019 5:38:00 PM

Oh my charming friend, rays of sunlight grace my page when you visit. Thank you, Charlie, for your heartwarming comments and kind congrats. Warmest wishes always my inspiring friend.. ~Susan

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 5/29/2019 6:51:00 PM

Hello Susan Ashley, heartache is hard to take. It is hard to heal from. Yet we do. have a niceevening my friend.

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/30/2019 5:35:00 PM

Indeed, Darlene, your comments, from the heart, are words of wisdom. We can find a way to go on even under the most distressing circumstances. Thank you for your gracious visit and precious thoughts. Warmest wishes always my wonderful friend.. ~Susan

Edward Ibeh

Date: 5/29/2019 1:32:00 PM

This is a splendid stunner, Susan:-) Heartiest congratulations on your well-deserved top win!

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/30/2019 5:32:00 PM

Your lovely comments are received with joy and your gracious congrats are truly appreciated. Thank you, Edward. Warmest wishes always my friend.. ~Susan

Tania Kitchin

Date: 5/28/2019 8:18:00 PM

Congratulations on your trophy win with your powerfully moving poem!

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/28/2019 8:54:00 PM

Your heartwarming congrats are received with joy, Tania. Thank you for your gracious visit. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Line Gauthier

Date: 5/28/2019 5:51:00 PM

Beautifully penned, Susan. Congrats on your gold medal win.

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/28/2019 6:46:00 PM

I relish your lovely comments, Line. Thank you for the kindness of your visit and for your heartwarming congrats. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/28/2019 5:38:00 PM

wow, what a wonderful trophy win for you, Eve. Love the sounds in this moving poem!!

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/28/2019 6:54:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea, for your lovely comments and heartwarming congrats. It pleases me to know you enjoyed my poem. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Ann Gilmour

Date: 5/28/2019 5:02:00 PM

Such poignant words Susan and sending congrats for a very well deserved trophy win! With kindest thoughts Ann xx

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/28/2019 8:52:00 PM

Your lovely presence is truly appreciated, Ann. Thank you for your beautiful comments and your kind congrats. It’s always wonderful to hear from you. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

John Hamilton

Date: 5/28/2019 8:45:00 AM

Loved every well chosen word combo, also the tasteful alliteration"widows woe in windy waver" rolls off the tongue and leaves a lasting impression. Always a quality read from you Susan. Congrats on another win!

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/28/2019 8:49:00 PM

It's so wonderful to hear from you, John. Your valued presence and precious comments are deeply appreciated. Thank you for sharing your insightful thoughts with me (I always learn from your kind critiques). Your heartwarming congrats are received with joy. Warmest wishes always, my friend.. ~Susan

Winged Warrior

Date: 5/28/2019 7:24:00 AM

Hey, sissy poo lol...bro bro proud...congrats!!!

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/28/2019 6:51:00 PM

Lol! ‘Sissy poo’, you’re so silly, my big bro bro ;) I’m so proud that I made you proud. I relish your silliness, your uplifting visit and your wonderful congrats. Warmest wishes and love always.. your sane sissy, Illum <3

Panagiota Romios

Date: 5/27/2019 8:52:00 PM

Hey! Susan. I'd be miffed if an an ad were put in my comnents. Sure,we all want to make money, but in comnents!...seems ludicrous. The ad is now gone thank heaven Panagiota

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/27/2019 9:49:00 PM

Indeed! Those ads are so very annoying, Panagiota. They seem to pop up and squeeze in everywhere. I've noticed them too when commenting on others poetry and I find them very distracting and ludicrous as well. Warmest wishes, my friend.. ~Susan

Gershon Wolf

Date: 5/26/2019 7:36:00 PM

A long, gruleing climb, that... Try to take me seriously here please: I actually see parallels with (Elvis' ballad) 'Heartbreak Hotel.' O.K. Think me an imbecile. But I honestly do... Tender trudging expressed here, Susan! Best always, Gershon

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/27/2019 9:45:00 PM

Ah, me and the king, feeling so lonely, we could die.. :) I think you to be sweet, insightful and inspiring, dear Gershon. As always, your vibrant presence evokes a giggle for your keen wit and appreciation for your wonderful comments and friendship. Thank you, my wonderful friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/26/2019 4:07:00 PM

such poignancy in this brrief but high quality writing, Susan

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/27/2019 9:35:00 PM

Andrea, your uplifting presence is truly appreciated. Thank you for your beautiful comment. It’s always wonderful to hear from you, my inspiring friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 5/26/2019 8:58:00 AM

Such a fine piece Susan, well done!

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/27/2019 9:33:00 PM

Thank you, Gordon, for the pleasure of your visit and wonderful comment. Warmest wishes always, my friend.. ~Susan

Panagiota Romios

Date: 5/25/2019 10:00:00 PM

Moving, very! Panagiota

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/27/2019 9:33:00 PM

Thank you, Panagiota, for your gracious visit and lovely comment. I'm pleased my poem touched your heart, my friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Jean Murray

Date: 5/25/2019 5:37:00 PM

I love this type of poetry, the way it falls off the tongue. Beautifully done Susan.

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/26/2019 8:18:00 PM

It is so wonderful to hear from you, Jean, your shining presence is truly appreciated. Thank you for your beautiful comments, my friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Paul Callus

Date: 5/25/2019 2:15:00 PM

Heartbreak is bad enough, but when one has to drag its heavy burden along, it doubles the pain. The yearning for release comes through clearly in the end stanza. Five lines of emotive beauty which capture the essence of your thoughts, Susan. The noninvasive alliteration is also appreciated. ~ Warm regards & Hugs // paul

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/26/2019 8:23:00 PM

It is truly a sweet reward for my poem to receive a meaningful, heartwarming and beautifully expressive comment from you, Paul. I’m so pleased you enjoyed this piece. I relish your precious thoughts, they are deeply appreciated as is your lovely friendship. Warmest wishes and hugs always, my dear friend.. ~Susan

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/24/2019 11:52:00 PM

Your emotive words capture the loss and sense of mourning profoundly Susan. xxoo

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/26/2019 8:14:00 PM

Connie, your shining presence is truly appreciated. Thank you for your beautiful comments. It’s so wonderful to hear from you, my inspiring friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Frederic Parker

Date: 5/24/2019 10:13:00 PM

a moment of reflection and total aloneness shared through your poetry leaving each reader to look deep into the silence that is their understanding

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/26/2019 8:13:00 PM

Your comments, so poetic and insightful in their beauty, touch my heart deeply, Frederic. It is always an honor and an elation when your soulful and shining presence graces my page, my friend. Thank you for sharing your precious thoughts with me. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Robert Lindley

Date: 5/24/2019 7:47:00 PM

My dear friend, you captured the mournful winds that blow through heartache's winding canyons in your well splattered ink! "yearning to yield to burning skies and surrender to spiralling empathic embers." pure gold--,, and a fav..

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/26/2019 8:07:00 PM

My dear friend, your shining presence and precious comments are deeply appreciated. Thank you for sharing your lovely thoughts with me, Robert, their insightful beauty inspires me, as does the honor of your fav. Warmest wishes always, my wonderful friend.. ~Susan

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 5/24/2019 7:28:00 PM

Great title and content!

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/26/2019 8:03:00 PM

Thank you, Kim, for the pleasure of your visit and wonderful comment. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Laura Leiser

Date: 5/24/2019 5:19:00 PM

Love how you use such well chosen, descriptive words to explain mourning and loss so well in this short, powerful poem, Susan! (moments pass away...dirge in the distance...widow’s woe..etc.) It’s always a treat to read your creative poetry! :)

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/26/2019 8:01:00 PM

It is always such a pleasure when your presence graces my page, Laura. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem. Thank you for being the first to leave your lovely comments. I relish your gracious insight, my friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan