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Heartache On the Hills

Many years had passed since we’d climbed these verdant hills on our first date. It was a very special place for us and held such precious memories We had visited on every wedding anniversary for the last twenty years, now we were finally retracing our steps. you’d carved both our names on the stump of an old oak true love never dies I stared out into the distance and surveyed the stunning scenery, green fields spread in front of us like a massive patchwork quilt which blanketed the ground A chill breeze was blowing and I snuggled into my warm coat, and I held on to you so tightly as we made our final ascent we’d shared our first kiss as we lay on the soft grass - timeless memories My heart felt so heavy as we went on our last journey together. It is six months since cancer stole you away from me… It was your dying wish to remain on the hills where we first found love. Tears filled my eyes; I looked up to heaven then scattered your ashes and slowly made my descent without you. as the sun goes down I said my final goodbye my heart is broken Choose a topic Contest Sponsored by Russell Sivey Theme 4 chosen - heartbreak and loss 02~08~17
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Hamilton Avatar
February 21, 2017 at 8:31 AM
A beautiful Haibun Jan, wow you are on a winning roll as of late, this is exceptional writing, I do prefer your emotive sad writes, congrats on a great win!
Allison Avatar
February 21, 2017 at 1:43 PM
Thanks John you are so kind with your praise I do appreciate your comments. I do enjoy writing this form and challenging myself in my creativity:-) hugs Jan xx
Duet Avatar
February 20, 2017 at 5:44 PM
So sad, so sorry Jan. Beautiful tribute to your "forever love". You will be rejoined someday I'm sure. And, congrats on your placement in the contest.
Allison Avatar
February 20, 2017 at 6:07 PM
Pure fiction for me in one way, but hubby and I have chosen the same place to be scattered so one day it will happen and we will be reunited in spirit:-) hugs Jan xx
Callus Avatar
February 20, 2017 at 3:47 PM
What a lovely poem. Jan! And that is also where her ashes will be scattered, so that place will remain their forever meeting place. ~ Congratulations on placing so high!! Hugs // paul
Allison Avatar
February 20, 2017 at 3:49 PM
Thanks Paul I am delighted to place so well:-) hugs Jan xx
La France Avatar
February 18, 2017 at 1:13 PM
Jan congratulations on your win in my contest with this beautiful poem, you broke my heart with this write and I love the image too
Allison Avatar
February 18, 2017 at 7:43 PM
Thanks Constance I am absolutely delighted with my win in your contest:-) hugs janxx
Smith Avatar
February 18, 2017 at 8:31 AM
Lovely write Jan, a well deserved win, congratulations...
Allison Avatar
February 18, 2017 at 8:33 AM
Thanks Charlie I am delighted to place so well in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
Krampe Avatar
February 18, 2017 at 5:56 AM
Wow, Jan, this is beautiful! I missed it when you first posted it and am glad to see it now. Congrats on your win! Agnes
Allison Avatar
February 18, 2017 at 8:32 AM
Thanks Agnes I do enjoy writing this form and am delighted Constance liked my sad poem:-) hugs Jan xx
Pett Avatar
February 18, 2017 at 5:00 AM
Such a beautifully written poem Jan, I could visualise the scene from your descriptive words, deserved to win congratulations.
Allison Avatar
February 18, 2017 at 5:07 AM
Thanks Roy I really enjoy writing this form:-) hugs Jan xx
May Avatar
February 18, 2017 at 3:12 AM
Congrats on a great win Jan
Allison Avatar
February 18, 2017 at 4:32 AM
Thanks Jospeh:-) I really enjoyed the challenge:-) hugs Jan xx
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February 10, 2017 at 9:10 PM
Oh so sad but the imagery is beautiful, Jan! Best of luck in the contest, but I don't think you'll need it... hugs, Rhonda:)
Allison Avatar
February 11, 2017 at 5:16 AM
Thanks Rhonda I do enjoy these challenges:-) hugs jan xx
Dietrich Avatar
February 10, 2017 at 9:05 PM
Sad and beautiful, Jan. You can enter it in another contest called SAd! But it is sure to do well in the H forms. I have to get going on that one myself. I got through and now gotta start hubbie's dinner!! SEe ya later, alligator.
Allison Avatar
February 11, 2017 at 5:15 AM
Oh thanks for the advice Andrea:-) hugs Jan xx
White Avatar
February 10, 2017 at 11:43 AM
That is beautiful Jan. Pwerhaps if I feel better soon I will wrap my head on creating one myself :)
Allison Avatar
February 10, 2017 at 1:09 PM
I am sure you will do a wonderful job Darren:-) hugs Jan xx
May Avatar
February 9, 2017 at 9:25 AM
Jan, you sure know to write these emotive poems...A great write, I especially liked the haiku(s)...hugs
Allison Avatar
February 9, 2017 at 9:35 AM
Thanks for the lovely comment:-) I am amazed at how I have taken to writing Joseph from detesting poetry at school I now LOVE it:-) hugs Jan xx
Alhemaidy Avatar
February 9, 2017 at 8:48 AM
Deep & smooth poem!
Allison Avatar
February 9, 2017 at 9:34 AM
Thanks Abdullah:-) hugs jan xx
Trifiatis Avatar
February 9, 2017 at 5:51 AM
A masterfully written Haibun my friend, Jan! Poetry at its best! A seven! Good luck! hugs xx
Allison Avatar
February 9, 2017 at 7:50 AM
Thanks Demetrios:-) Your comment has made my day:-) hugs Jan xx
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February 9, 2017 at 12:02 AM
This is so heartbreakingly beautiful. So enjoyed reading this.
Allison Avatar
February 9, 2017 at 4:22 AM
Thanks Elizabeth its my third attempt at this form i really enjoy the challenge:-) hugs Jan xx
Warrior Avatar
February 8, 2017 at 11:26 PM
Such beauty in your words Jan...even if you gave me heck...it would be poetic lol...great verse my friend...a winner indeed...god bless...^WW^
Allison Avatar
February 9, 2017 at 4:23 AM
LOL ^WW^ it amazes me how I can turn from humour to sad so easily:-) hugs Jan xx
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February 8, 2017 at 8:58 PM
Jan, this is poetry! Loved it!
Allison Avatar
February 9, 2017 at 4:26 AM
I can write the odd serious poem but prefer humour Arthur but if my muse is willing I can write anything:-) I'm just happy people read and comment I'd hate to get no feedback on what I write:-) hugs Jan xx
Smith Avatar
February 8, 2017 at 7:56 PM
Excellent use of the form Jan, best wishes in the contest...
Allison Avatar
February 8, 2017 at 8:09 PM
Thanks Charlie I think this is the third time I've written this form and really enjoy the challenge:-) hugs Jan xx
Marcum Wong Avatar
February 8, 2017 at 5:05 PM
I enjoyed this moving halibun Jan. We are fortunate to still have our mates, though fiction, you have captured loss very well in this lovely entry. ; ) 7
Allison Avatar
February 8, 2017 at 5:22 PM
Yes we are truly blessed Connie I have had a day of highs and lows good news and bad today it makes you realise how fragile we are and how important it is to cherish every day we have:-) hugs Jan xx
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February 8, 2017 at 2:44 PM
- Vibrant written with deep emotion ... a tear ... - Really fabulous written, Jan - Good luck in the contest - a 7 - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Allison Avatar
February 8, 2017 at 2:48 PM
Thanks Anne Lise I do enjoy the challenge of this form I think its only the third one I have written:-) hugs Jan xx
Smith Avatar
February 8, 2017 at 2:12 PM
It is beautiful but heartbreaking Jan.
Allison Avatar
February 8, 2017 at 2:13 PM
Thanks Tim :-) I hope Constance likes it - I do like the challenge of this form:-) hugs jan xx
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February 8, 2017 at 2:05 PM
What wonderful memories you have of this special place, Jan. There is a similar spot here where my first love carved our initials on a tree. Losing a husband creates an empty feeling, but when you are able to fill it with memories like these, you still have happy moments. Amazing, Hon. Broken Wings will love it!
Allison Avatar
February 8, 2017 at 2:09 PM
aww thanks for the positive comments Carolyn:-) I think this is the third poem I have written in this form:-) Thankfully for me it is a fiction write BUT my husband and I have a place where we will be scattered one day:-) hugs jan xx
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