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Heartache Carved Knots

Chilly the pride shredding me torn. In soft grass I lay odd pieces of my new wound, bloody from scorn and wrath as pushed in my creases. I sent harmony into flight to secure love’s peaceful, prime feel, but rage launched and eclipsed my light. My heartache carved deep its reveal. Sorrow shockingly spilled my grief when I fell on your bitterness. Now downed by joy’s ignorant thief, I sad fold in grass tenderness. Striving for life in Pleasantville, I blindly bit regret’s whole pill.
2-10-17

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Date: 11/25/2017 8:04:00 AM
Browsing your poetry, I am in utter awe of the many different forms you have mastered. Such a beautiful talent.
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Rhoda Tripp
Date: 11/26/2017 8:13:00 AM
We haven't met before, CayCay, as I just joined this week. Prior, I have been on Instagram for a year. The browsing of your account is my pleasure. I'm here to learn new forms of poetry.
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 11/25/2017 12:55:00 PM
Your browsing is my gift; it is cool when older postings are read and commented on for they all fade into the list way too fast. I don't recall 'meeting' you before. I've been gone for 7 months, maybe you joined during that time?? I will investigate. Meanwhile, thank you for being sparked enough by one of my writes, that you were led to browsing. I appreciate your uplifting presence and comments. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
Date: 2/20/2017 11:17:00 AM
What a heartfelt rendering of pain and heartache, CayCay! The poem itself is beautiful, but I would not want to think that it's the result of personal experience! ~ Congrats on this high placement...pleased to have you standing next to me on the podium:) Warm regards // paul
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Date: 2/18/2017 2:12:00 PM
Congratulations Cay Cay: I enjoyed reading your Hybronnet. Well done. SuZ
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Date: 2/18/2017 1:21:00 PM
Caycay CONGRATULATIONS on your win in my contest with this lovely poem
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Date: 2/18/2017 12:38:00 PM
So beautifully deep in its imagery, depth and flow. No choice have I but to add this very creative and well composed Hybronnet to my fav poems list here. A7
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Date: 2/18/2017 8:40:00 AM
So sadly well written CayCay, congratulations...
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Date: 2/18/2017 7:56:00 AM
Beautiful poem about sadness and pain. Congrats on your win, CayCay.
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Date: 2/12/2017 6:16:00 AM
I can feel your pain here, CayCay, such profound sadness, I somehow am attracted to sad poems, a 7:)
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Date: 2/11/2017 1:02:00 AM
Full of strong emotions poem that touches the core of one's heart and soul dear, CayCay. Very well written!
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Date: 2/10/2017 7:13:00 PM
This is very emotive and that is what Broken Wings like to see, dear. You did so well with this! I too was thinking of trying this hybronnet form. But will probably go haiku. This takes a lot of work and I am proud of you for pulling it off and I know this poem hits home with what you are feeling right now. Be strong. You can never do wrong in my eyes!
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Date: 2/10/2017 5:34:00 PM
WoW Cay Cay! Such a deeply moving piece. It speaks of striving so hard for something that is always just out of your reach. The lonliness and the heartache leaving you emotionally raw. Great write. Hope you aren't still speaking truth. God Bless, JB
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Date: 2/10/2017 4:04:00 PM
We live and learn, sweetie. Nobody ever said it would be easy. Therapy? I love the wording. Great write, CayCay. Good luck!
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 2/10/2017 4:50:00 PM
You guessed it, and bet you guessed easily. I didn't sleep all night, still haven't and I'm feeling some drunk-type high, oh - is it punch drunk?, that causes me to hesitate about typing right now in front of God and everybody, or reading anybody right now. I never wrote this form before and enjoyed it, always liked brevity in poems. Well, let me close to be what I will be! All the best, still CayCay (so glad Tim willl be here soon )
Date: 2/10/2017 1:02:00 PM
A beautiful sad poem. Poignant. A 7 from me!
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 2/10/2017 1:54:00 PM
Thank you, Maureen. I am thrilled to know you felt my poem, it means so much. I wish you all the best ... CayCay

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